LambentTyto

LambentTyto

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Copper Claws

Starts good and gets a lot better as the story progresses!

This story starts a little slow, but it picks up pretty well. Though that being said, it's not an "action story." It's more introspective with moments of action, and to my surprise, creepyness, though I wouldn't call it a "horror."

It's an adventure story into the Steppe, a magical place with hunters and supernatural creatures, which is cool and unique. The characters are believable and sympathetic. There's a certain couple that I want to get together, but I won't say anything more on that point. I've asked for a sequel. We'll see...

Copper Claws is definitely worth reading, but if you find the beginning a bit slow, just endure for a few pages. As you can tell, this is an advanced review by someone who has read the entirety of the story. ;)


The Cycle of Resentment

An interesting story, but I wish there was more to visualize!

I'm rather new to Xianxia and Wuxia, so I'm just going to say what my impressions were. I like the story, though I felt Tiangong could be a little more sympathetic and likable. He's already super powerful, so revenge I feel is a little to over the top.

This story is also very strongly narrative drivven. Some people might call those info dumps, and they are, but I don't mind. What I DO which this story had more of was dialogue. Ten times more. More dialogueeee! And of course, more descriptions about what people look like, what their surroundings look like, etc. I would also like to see some internal monologue from Tiangong and the other characters so I know what he's thinking rather than always being "told" what he's thinking.

The grammar is somewhat lacking, but it's not super bad. I've seen some pretty unreadable stuff, and there were only a few sentences I had trouble understanding what was going on, but that's the trouble with most stories when authors describe things vaguely or in weird ways.

With more fleshing out on the descriptions, dialogue, and interior monologue, and a little more sympathy for Tiangong, I think The Cycle of Resent could be pretty good!