7 chapters in
So far the plot has been up nice, backstory made, environment perfectly suited for character development and time lapses. Little things here and there, like the the way 7 year olds are mature enough to lust over the MC, the rather quick realization of how destructive his actions would be. I look forward to seeing where this story will end up, so keep up the good work.
Just rating the first chapter, I, as a reader, am drawn in by the story concept and easy flowing dialogue made by the MC. The speech format is a little hard to follow, but the descriptions are believable. I am looking forward to future chapters and hope to see them improve with the author's experience.
Have to say, I love all your works. I like your amazon publications too- need more. Keep it up man :)
You write some amazing stories, don't ever stop or let anyone tell you otherwise.