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Lost Realm: The Chosen

Litrpg with awesome Xianxia setting!

Realms is an expertly crafted example of how a lit-RPG Xiaxia Novel could look like! 

What makes this book different: The author has obviously a lot of experience with writing Xianxia stories as his excellent handling of that genre shows. But despite that, neither the characters nor the story is coming short, creating a worthwhile and unique piece of writing for us!

 

Style Score: as already said, the author knows how to show Xianxia in the best light which is also becoming apparent in the style. It flows very well and is perfectly adapted to work with the Xianxia setting - any fans of the genre will notice that right away from the first chapter. There is nothing awkward or boring, just the right amount of flowery description to paint a vivid picture of the situation and environment - nothing to complain on this side!

 Story Score: the story is thrilling from the start, throwing us in the midst of a packing fightscene and the resulting aftermath. In the following chapters we can see a lot of buildup for future developments that make me want to read on and find out what will come of it - very nice world building that promises more to come.

Grammar Score: not much to say here - the few typos I found were edited after someone pointed them out. It is clearly well-maintained and eventual errors are edited out quickly.

Character Score: The characters feel alive and believable. Especially Kirra, the MC, is authentic from the start and quickly fleshed out far enough to really relate to her, even in the early chapters! I have no doubt that this will continue for side characters as well as the story goes on.

Overall I can recommend the novel to every Xianxia and litRPG fan, but also those who have not yet ventured into the genre: this is a great place to start with it!


Divine Blood

Give that Foofy 5 Stars!

Divine Blood is a story about a girl who found out she has the blood and abilities of a demigoddess but has been raised as a human.
 Now she wants to explore that divine aspect of hers and follow after her brother.


One of the most important parts of this story is that she rescues a big dog from the dog shelter before he is being euthanized.


That means, yes, the dobermann Foofy is a main character! How could anyone give that dobie less than 5 stars?


To make it technical: the style is great - after I got to a certain chapter, I really immersed myself into the environment and breathed the fantastic, happy atmosphere -  absolutely awesome work!


Story: the story is a slow burn and works well with the amazing style and characters. No plotholes, everything is thought-through: 4.5 stars


Grammar: better than 99% on RR - nothing I could find - only a single issue that has already been fixed. 5 stars for grammar, and I don't believe anyone will rate it lower than that 


Character: It has Foofy!!! I like the characters, the romance is awesome, and all of them are authentic. And then there is Foofy!!!!! Really, read this fiction; it has Foofy!


Queenscage

Phew, that's a hard one to review. Queenscage has a fast-paced story that is told in ever-shifting scenarios of different viewpoints. With every scene you get more information about the bigger picture, things are starting to make sense and you realise how big and thought-through the world-building of this novel is!

That is quite a unique and fitting way to write a fantasy novel that lives mostly from intrigue. My problem here is that it should maybe not start the exact same way. This works awesome after you know the characters, environment and basic plotline.

But in the first few chapters, reading a complex intrigue about characters I didn't know yet, felt a bit like trying to solve a difficult puzzle of a picture that I don't want to see as I have no investment into it yet. That made it a bit of a chore to read at the start.

Still - all in all it was a very unique and entertaining way of telling a complex story and if the beginning left us a bit more time to get immersed and invested into plot and characters, this would be awesome!

Style Score: as said, the style is working great in the middle but is hard to get into at the start. I'd say 3* at the beginning and easily 5* after a few chapters with the same style so I will settle for 4*.

Story Score: Nothing to complain. As soon as you manage to get the puzzle together, this is a great story, worth of 5 stars.

Character Score:

Wasn't easy either for me. The Characters all have depth and are believable. Personally, I might have the problem that the only characters I like would die off as they are not cold or ruthless enough to survive in this setting. Still, as the writing is really good, I would go for 4,5 stars here.

Grammar: excellent. 

 

Overall I would recommend the story to readers who like complex intrigue and unique styles in general - this is where the fiction shines!


The White Horde (Revised)

You are seaching for a masterpiece like GoT?

Search no more! The White Horde is the most compelling story I found on RR together with "The Wandering Inn". David Talon is kidnapping us into a vivid world of fiction that rivals my favourite authors and trumps most fictions I have seen here!

The story has several MC's, but you will see even before you meet them, that even the most random side character is fleshed out in a few words like if he was the main protagonist. By the time David Talon started with the backstory of the important characters, I was still in a daze from the fate of several side characters. 

From chapter 1 to Chap 40 there was not a single boring paragraph - nothing that made me stumble and nothing that would make me skip something....

As a reader, I would definitely pay money to get this book!

 

Now that we have that settled, I will give my feedback as an author:

David is definitely a great mind. His story has the making of a masterpiece and the characters are up to the extreme challenge! 

His style and grammar are both far above mine, so I can't really give any less than 5* for it. I hardly found anything wrong while I can definitely say that the style is optimised for his version of a medieval fantasy world


Ancients [An Epic Litrpg]

Ancients is an expertly crafted example of how a lit-RPG Xiaxia Novel could look like! 

What makes this book different: The author has obviously a lot of experience with writing Xianxia stories as his excellent handling of that genre shows. But despite that, neither the characters nor the story is coming short, creating a worthwhile and unique piece of writing for us!

 

Style Score: as already said, the author knows how to show Xianxia in the best light which is also becoming apparent in the style. It flows very well and is perfectly adapted to work with the Xianxia setting - any fans of the genre will notice that right away from the first chapter. There is nothing awkward or boring, just the right amount of flowery description to paint a vivid picture of the situation and environment - nothing to complain on this side!

 Story Score: the story is thrilling from the start, throwing us in the midst of a packing fightscene and the resulting aftermath. In the following chapters we can see a lot of buildup for future developments that make me want to read on and find out what will come of it - very nice world building that promises more to come.

Grammar Score: not much to say here - the few typos I found were edited after someone pointed them out. It is clearly well-maintained and eventual errors are edited out quickly.

Character Score: The characters feel alive and believable. Especially Chen, the MC, is authentic from the start and quickly fleshed out far enough to really relate to him, even in the early chapters! I have no doubt that this will continue for side characters as well as the story goes on.

Overall I can recommend the novel to every Xianxia and litRPG fan, but also those who have not yet ventured into the genre: this is a great place to start with it!


Somebody Stop Her

Somebody Stop Her is a really unique story and I won't spoiler anything story-wise in the review. What I can say is that this novel is constantly throwing you from laughing into shock and leaves you speechless on more than one occasion, even with only the few chapters which are out right now. This going to be big and I can only recommend giving it a try!

 

Style: pretty unique and absolutely optimized for the story and setting it carries. Descriptions are vivid and always on spot without throwing unneeded information in all directions. Nothing to complain - 5*

Story: as already said, this is a rollercoaster that you should ride - I would advice to read at least until chapter 3 so you know what I'm talking about. - 5*

Grammar Score: everything seems to be cleanly edited - I have not stumbled about anything. - 5*  

 

Character Score: Now this is a thing that I was torn up about at the start. I didn't like Martin although he is definitely filling the role he has perfectly. It's just a personal preference. But Alexa alone is such an awesome character, I would have given 5* for her anyway. As you read on in the story, that part recifies itself in an even grander, unexpected way and the new characters, like Cottie, are likewise experty written. 5* here and overall!


Desolada

Immersive and magical!

Desolada is a fantastically thought-through piece of fantasy fiction. We are following the MC Leones who is ripped from his easy-going life as the son of a rich father and thrown into a maelstrom of mystery, action, intrigue and the development of his own fantastic powers as he tries to evade the murderers of his father and find a way to reverse the catastrophe.

Story: The biggest plus for me are the constant plot twists that came really unexpected - a lot of "wow" moments here. That kind of story needs awesome world-building of which we have plenty in Desolada. There is no boring moment even in the peaceful times meant to flesh out the characters - it gripped me from the start and never let up!

Characters: Not only the MC but also most side characters feel alive and authentic. Everyone has a role to play, there is no unnecessary character and I really like Leones and can relate to him.

Style: a few issues here and there, but they were fixed as soon as I pointed them out, leaving nothing I could complain about :-). Generally, the style is very well flowing - the last fighting scene was done excellently: quick and thrilling. I also love the setting and the author excels at creating that fantastic environment with few words which keep the pace fast enough.

Grammar: same as with style - anything I found was edited shortly afterwards and there was nothing that would really stick out, to begin with.

Overall I can recommend this fiction to everyone. 


Guilty x Creatures

Awesome character development!

GuiltyxCreatures is a story about two dark elves and their 'victim' who quickly turns the tables on them. Fiona and Kianna decide to drug and abduct a human man. Unbeknownst to them, Anton is anything but mundane... They won't find out until it's too late.

I really love the character development in this fiction. We are only a few chapters in and they are already fleshed out, believable and alive.

Style: the style is flawless in my opinion. It makes for an easy flow and is perfectly adjusted to add the right atmosphere.

Grammar: I found hardly anything wrong on that front - it's written professionally and could be sold on Amazon without further edits.

Story: there is not that much here yet. The story itself is not the real focus of the novel and as said, we only a few chapters in yet. But even then, there are already a few twists that I had not anticipated and same as the style, it perfectly sets the stage for the most important aspect of the novel:

Characters! To bring all 3 characters alive to such an extent in so few chapters is a feat on its own. I really adore Kianna and I love every interaction between Anton and the defiant Fiona. 

I have not found anything similar to this fiction on RR and I would advice to read at least until chapter 3 bevor making up your mind. There is much more to this story than you might think at the beginning!

Overall 5* and recommended to everyone who burns for awesomely written character interaction!


God Noise: Volume I

God Noise is a fairly unique fantasy adventure set in a wuxia environment. The novel starts switching in the POV of 2 different characters - one is clearly the antihero while the other seems to be the hero but with a dark secret.

Style: generally I was really liking the authors writing style (except for the prologue, that somehow confused me in every paragraph). It flows nicely and is adjusted to the pace. The only issue is that he gives us not much visuals to grab onto. I believe her will change this at some point, but for now I leave it at 4*.

Characters: refreshingly different from most stories I've read. Especially Igni (the bad guy) is a unique main character. That alone is worth a read! 5*

Story: somehow I can't get a deeper meaning to the occurrences yet. While it is interesting, I am not totally hooked on that front. That might change of I read further so I will likely adapt the rating later. 4*

Grammar: not much to complain - this has been mostly edited. 4,5*

 

I would recommend this novel to everyone who likes a darker wuxia setting and is looking for something he won't find everyday!


Nomads of the Sea

This one was a bit hard for me to judge. The pacing is slow while I prefer faster pacing and I couldn't really warm up to Sig yet. But I know that both of that is very subjective and I will try to rate the fiction objectively.

Style:  The novel really reads like any professionally written fantasy book - beautiful descriptions that make it easy to visualise the environment and characters. As said, it is heavy on flowery descriptions but that's a feature for some and a bug for others^^. Thus, my objective score: 5*

Story: Despite being only through chapter 6, I can already see a lot of careful worldbuilding and interesting foreshadowing events. I might adapt this score after reading further into the book, but as of now: 5* straight.

Grammar: If there is anything to find, my English is not good enough to find it^^ 5*

Character: as of now, I still really can't feel anything for Sig - neither bad nor good while most of the early chapters were about him. On the other side, the two chapters from Idala's PoV already brought her to life and I love her. I'm going to settle for 4* now but might change this as I read on.

Overall I can only recommend the book for anyone who likes a beautifully crafted fantasy world with slow pacing (similar to Terry Goodkind's "Sword of Truth). 5*