[Psychokinetic] Eyeball Pulling - A Post-Apocalyptic LitRPG

What is it with these reviews saying its ok but normal but procceeds to give 5 stars SHAME with capitals on al of you guys.

Now my review below>>>>

The story tries to be a comedy with mystery elements as its core or the reverse can also be said so yeah pick whatever you like it doesnt matter for the story.

I stopped reading around the part where the pro team carries out its first mission the reason for this is simple as the mystery isnt worth it. You get a gigantic slug of a grind with random power ups proppeling the MC so far ahead but also keeping her weak that it all feels so pointless.

The few tibids of relevent plot info also feels just randomly thrown in there not giving us any kind of info to build mystery on.
For instance if they find a little clue that at least gives the MC an idea wich we can build on we could fantasize on what happend before the earth went to shiiiit.

Instead we are still clueless very very far into the story.

In many of these litrpg stories the fighting is pointless except to act as filler content wich it does in this story.
So when you got mystery as a core element but never get any juicy mysterious tibids you negelect this part of the story.
When the grind wich is a core element of Litrpg is boring you also negelect this part of the story in the end 100% of the story is a grind waiting for the actual story to mean something.

Unlimited Wishes. (Re-write)

If a character complains about something the whole time and has the means to easlily fix what troubles him yet refuses to do so at any time then you got a bad novel.

I cannot stress just how annoying this can be i wanted to give this novel the lowest score possible but surely its still a novel yet the whole premise rests on the Mc having 142 IQ yet being beyond retarded.

The Daily Life of a Divine Soul

I am only writting this review for the fact that its nice to show your supporting the author but at the same time when the author deserves recognition you kinda need to show it.

So here I am 2 chapters into the story its nice how a modern human kinda reduces the amount of arrogant young masters giving the much needed slice of life these cultivators need... with all their dominance and disregard for human life.

That is kinda all I have read as off now (the humor and other aspects arent as set in stone so cannot comment on that yet).


After 15 chapters + i will revisit and adjust my review ~  but i can proudly say the follonwg I am first heheheheheeh miep miep motha ......

World End My Life Start WEMLS

You could ask the question if a story has bad grammar or spelling then the contents as in the story itself could be good right?

Now if its just on the level of some misspelled words or some rather not so obvious grammar mistakes, you could be right.

The problem lies in the fact that even if the author is aware he decides to post it regardless but its so bad that the right choice would be to improve it and then post it.

Instead he/she decides to post it ignoring all this, this in itself already shows how serious this person is about his novel.

The apocalypse that saved the world

Ever read a novel where the first part you read just kinda drains you off all energy to continue on?
This novel kinda did that for me below is a part out of chapter 1, no spoilers just a kind of info dump by the author (not litteraly the style of this info dump is a kind of backstory).

Anyway read it and you will kinda understand what i mean me pointing this out has actually no value as its litteraly the beginning of chapter 1.

But for the author it may be of some use as 1 star is not really a good rating......


in the beginning, there was only true nothingness, not the void true nothingness. from the nothingness came soul or will many words have been used to describe it over the ages. the old languages have better words for it but nothing, but the languages of the ancients does truly cover the realness of it the closest language that comes close are that of the Ents ancient creatures. Although what they use are more of the length of a novel so it’s not really that useful today and them being nearly extinct doesn’t really help that much. also, there’s not many creatures or scrolls much less actual books that explains it any more. the next concept that came too be was Urrh or the primordial energy that came before all other types of energy. later urrh gave rise to all the other energies the closer too urrh the more powerful.

but before that soul spawned chaos and order and urrh spawned creation and destruction.



I know that the author has every right in the world to make up stuff or decide on names for his novel but come one Urrh?


the next concept that came too be was Urrh or the primordial energy that came before all other types of energy. later urrh gave rise to all the other energies the closer too urrh the more powerful.

Its feels rather awkward to read this Urrh then later urrh hey urrh by urrh....


I suggest the author to completely rewrite the beginning pretty it up a bit...

As for the rest of the novel if it is of the same quality as the beginning of chapter 1 i would suggest to rewrite the whole novel.

Wonder Baby

Cannot read anymore utter suspension of disbelief

The title basically says what i want to say.

The whole junkie shizzle and the fight with the rat is utter bullshit.


The novel litteraly did an infinite jump kick combo on me making it impossible for me to take it seriously.

And that just in the first 2-3 chaps making this one of the most awkward novels i have read even tho the grammar/spelling is quite good.

Meaning this is not a crap novel written by some 13 year old not having any mastery over the english language.

Instead its just what the author decided to write about that is making this a not so pleasant read....

Dragon Heart

Seems placing comments is not tolerated

i could write a full review wich i wasn't planning on doing but the author of this story deletes any comments he even slightly dislikes.

Even if they are neutral in tone ( example below)

I can see to many elements and to many inlogical stuff happening.

I assume you got inspiration from the manga Id and of course wuxia/xanxia genre with a sprinkle of fantasy...... mashing them all together.....

This aint a problem per say but if its all mashed together on a speed train leaving plot holes the size of jupiter in its wake you got a problem...


Not completely neutral but it's not like i am bashing him or her just stating an opinion without downright hatefull words.



Stuck in a game world with an OP shop

At the beginning i was having fun thinking of many scenarios that could be fun with the shop system in place.

Instead the MC does not do anything noteworthy at all.

With this shop he buys the most useless skills wich dont have any type of skill level.

While he only grinds things that a normal person wont even do while having the assitance of a skill system......

IF your in a rpg world why build a random shack if you got a far cheaper inn at your disposable?

Nor do i see the reason he doesnt mingle with any humans or people in general, he doesnt ask question not even thinking about his current situation.

Even the anime nerd thinking of yay i am in a different world i can become a fucking wizard so who cares about my old world would be nice to see....

Instead this could be a story about some random dude grinding shit in a mmorpg ignoring any npcs or people in general while doing whatever ignoring any top tier skills in the shop.

A demon bow costs 2000 gp he says no way i will be able to buy this anytime soon 2 chaps later he buys shit worth 2000 gp+.

No planning nor any discomfort at his current situation he doesnt eat nor shit and only sleeps to pass the time.


All this together makes one wonder why read this?

If only something can be added to this novel making one look forward to each day as the Mc wakes up, that would be awsome otherwise this stay rather bland.

Our Cosplay Became Real in Another World

Title kinda says what i find of this novel.

This feels like those old animes where the princess of a country needs to travel with her only trusty archemage friend.

As her country got taken over by her evil aunt or something, looking for the ancient golden dragon to help her cause.

Along the way they make friends and stuff while relying on her one hit legendary sword or dragon slave ^



The above is obviously some old anime from the 90s or around the year 2000-2009.

But the author managed to add what we like currently with the Litrpg genre, bluescreen sama and gender bender shizzle.

Revisiting the old much liked and well received plot that I very much liked but almoost did not remember (thx for that).

Sadly the novel only has 4-5 chaps at the moment as i was craving for more but i will be patient so go for it author while knowing i very much like this novel.


As for an in depth review on the aspects of the novel meh screw that, I can name some things that feel quite odd but i do not find the need yet.


A World Reborn

Werewolf nice story not wise ~

Ok i binge read this novel when it had 7 chapters out giving me a clear idea about what i can expect.

With this i don't mean the plot but the general what the peep is this all about.

Namely a Mc with werewolf powers and other tibids you just have to read the story for it if you want to know all about this shizzle wink~

As i already wrote several comments going from small to large and then to larger walls of text i will leave the final comment from chapter 7 here in a spoiler tag.

It basically sums up all the reasons why i give this novel 3 stars i want to give it less because i like the story but the plot holes and reasoning is just beyond horrible but i wil refrain from doing so.

I know this does not motivate the author i do not even know if he agrees but i am not here to make buddies with the author (T.T it would be nice if he/she likes my review even tho the above isnt that nice to hear/read).

But its what i do, bash people and then bash them some more... sad truth but if you cultivate int he way of the douchebag even for the good of the masses you need to understand that its a thankless job !!

Without further ado (edit fucking spoiler tag just smashes all the text together without alineas making it nigh unreadable.

I wanted to say just go to chapter 7 to read the same thing but i will paste it below without a spoiler tag so BEWARE SPOILERS BELOW I WOULD SAY READ IT IF U DONT MIND OUT OF CONTEXT SPOILERS.

Otherwise read only if you already ate the 7 chapters that have been released to either rate my review as bullshit or as something accurate and helpfull.


Wasnt one of the people an army guy in the sheriff building who knows the Mc?

I am not talking about his uncle as he came out later but the one who first looked tru the slit in the door was a sergeant and as i remember this term is fromt he army...

So if a guy who had some training in the army ( i am refering to the Mc) can use a freaking sniper rifle (you need training for this shit and not just a bit, to shoot something from a mile away needs at least some skills not just the basic course of 1 month training i think he got or none at all) then why can this sergeant not do what the MC did with his team of goons?

Your earlier stated reason is flimsy at best if the lives of himself(the sergeant) and others are at stake food gets less and less and eventually they will be forced to go outside and it has been 2 months so really....

As for the MC if he got any training with a sniper rifle and i do not mean a hunting rifle but a genuine sniper rifle from the army that would be what he specialized in but i doubt that is the case.

Most american peeps (young ones) if this is america just get the basic recruit training and from there they do special shit or if its obvious from the start they can get some other training only then do they get it.

But yea i am binge reading this so do not take everything i say seriously these are just thoughts that pop up while writting the above and what i had in mind when reading this.

As for him staying in human form that is only usefull for interactions but even then its on the top 10 of most suicidal moves as he loses his skull armor any gun will kill him.

He realizes he aint that unkillable yet the first thing he does is go outside in his mortal form to get his anus wreckt?

His brains can still be painted on the walls and if learning to use your werewolf hands to kill peeps while being protected by high regen and skull armor.

I would be nervous as fuck to walk around in the open with my human skull like the greatest retard in history.



As for his reason to come back to town is it for a relative? then it should have already been revealed because Luna aint a drone she would ask why are we here i dont like this place can we go back to the woods where we can build a pack together?

That would be a natural question and even if she thinks he is an alpha simpely asking this does no harm she can show her displeasure about him telling her to stay behind a second time but not this? 

So in the end why the peep is he here in this town risking his life and that of his partner.. if he can eat purple hearts for dinner each day while ignoring the town and just live a carefree life of being a werewolf with his very pleasing Queen then he is doing it wrong.

Not even the dumbest shit would do what he is doing if he got a reason to be in that town doing what he is doing......

And u said in an earlier chapter that he got his reasons but seriously what i said above if that is the reason it should already be revealed.

Otherwise your doing 2 things wrong firstly artificially holding back the powers of the MC to not make this a power wank story (Then dont freaking give him such powers to begin with).

And secondly holding back his reason for being there if it aint anything special he cannot share with his partner at this time as its dangerous as fuck and free food in the wild is more preferable than this shit.


To add to his powers it almoost feels like he did the following (wich is actually a fact) yay the apocolypse starts now i dont know why but my guts is telling me to get the shit out of here into the wilds ONWARDS TO GODHOOD!!!!

He stays does nothing special just so plot armor can guide him to a vial with the word suspicious on it to gain the ULTIMATE POWER.

Then he suddenly says ok i am done here lets go back to town HWWHAAHAAAHAAAATTTTT???????? THEEEEE ACTUALLLLL FUCCCCCCCKKK.

Not even 1 day has passed he only ate 1 fucking purple heart at least go after eating 100 of them and maybe get some more wolfs to transform and make loyal to you.....

He does none of the above so as this is the last chapter i think i will copy paste this comment into a review, i like your story but its full of inlogical stuff not even the comment or argument all will be REVEALED IN THE FUTURE can fix the problems i pointed out above.