I really enjoy this story. I will say, it is getting excessively wordy so i find myself skimming chapters and not missing much of substance, so maybe work on putting more content in each chapter, but less words? It reads poorly.
But the story is fantastic. Not as good right now as it was around chapter 20, but very good nontheless
Solid writing and characters. Most of the main cast, Core/Rat/Snake/Golem are interesting and have good growth potential.
All the villains are the same rote "evil for evil's sake" bad villians with no thought every other story has though.
The story itself is meandering, aimless, and has no real idea what it wants to be or do. Neeeds a lot of work and plot planning. As is, the story doesn't hold up well long term and will end up fading to obscurity like 98% of every other D Core story on RR.
I hope the author gets his plot planned and in order, and the story picks up with same magic the first several chapters had. But im dropping it myself
So far, i've been really enjoying this. The concept is so interesting. It's nice to finally see a story on RR where the name Lucifer is used as a bad guy, rather than another misunderstood antihero lol
I enjoyed it a lot. Im not a big YA fan; but its still a good solid read.
soooo EXCITED! Book 1 is fucking incredible. Book 2 is hopefully gonna keep the trend going!
Enjoying this quite a bit, will write a. Full review when more is out
I love it. It's fun, fairly lighthearted to start, but it gets dark just enough and well enough to keep the story interesting!
This is one of, if not the single best story on this website that is ongoing right now. everything about it is absolutely fantastic, and incredibly well paced and thought out. That will probably be detractors that dislike that there are more than one focal character in the story, but the author doesn't do that randomly. There are very well done and portrayed reasons for each alternative character chapter, and it only enhances the story as a whole. The only downside I can think of to say about this story, is that it doesn't release daily. Seriously go read it as soon as you can
Okay, I don't think I'm going to continue to follow the story at least not for several months. However I don't think it's bad, I think it needs to be Rewritten. You're trying to write two separate stories right now. This is half of this story is a tower litrpg adventure, the second half of the story is a global Superhero by the numbers comic book story without pictures. You need to pick One Direction go with it, right now the blurb in the beginning and the first 20 or so chapter have almost no relation to the second half of the quote-unquote book. Your tower litrpg is okay, the world is completely underdeveloped in the first 20 chapters there's basically nothing, but that can be slowly revealed overtime, so that's not really a big issue that early on in the story.
Your superhero story is very disappointing to me personally because of how incredibly unoriginal it is. It's not always a bad thing, like it's okay to pull ideas and things from media story but if you just pull it out and leave it in it's barebone state in your story like you've been doing - where the main character has to help get money for his sister, where his mom is depressed because their dads incarcerated, where his family has daddy issues and that's what leads him to needing to get superpowers, where there is a mysterious all-powerful being quite trustworthy giving him his magic. - Very very very predictable.
I'm aware of how negative the sounds and that's because I have negative feelings towards a story, but I don't think it's bad I think you need to plan it out more and rewrite it and probably break it into two separate stories or remove the litrpg aspect altogether because it makes no f****** sense in this world at all. Having numerically defined statistics that cannot be influenced in any real way other than by the "chosen one" main character Is very very very weird and doesn't really mesh with the world. It feels like you did it because you wanted to write a litrpg and then you realized halfway through the story that litrpg doesn't really work well if you don't plan out your entire power curve. Wing it and the character gets too powerful too fast and your enemies have to be like enemies in cultivation novels. Every new enemy is the unbeatable Elder. boring.
The story has issues getting started, but once the adventurer's begin coming, the story gets it's legs under it. Then it's just nonstop fun. :)