While the flow, pacing, grammar are questionable, the author had put some effort in making the story as well as the characters.
The plot setting is debatable, given the weird flow and style, it does have some form of uniqueness in it, since it goes over just simply being another xianxia/martial arts story.
I would give higher if the story is re-written into something more legible.
The story's a bit better than most other 'summoned into another world' stories, and the author's sincere about writing the story. The plot progression is fine and I quite liked it.
The characters themselves have a good sense of interaction, some readers may have problems understanding the flow, but there shouldn't be any problems to most.