I’m enjoying this story immensely. A reserved but talented teenager gets separated from others just as the world converges with the addition of hostile alien species. Very well written.
I enjoy stories about swordsmen. Nowadays every MC is a mage or a sword-mage. A good old fashioned swordsman is a rarity. So the story concept interested me.
But this story stumbles over itself, mostly due to word choice. For example, he carries a swordstaff sheathed at his hip A swordstaff is a pole arm, a spear with a long blade It is not sheathed on a hip.
In one scene his wife replies to him, but the author uses the word “spat”. That’s normally used for a venomous response and was poor word choice.
The MC is supposed to be a mature swordsman reborn but persists in a preteen worldview where that’s “not fair” is central. A hardened warrior of decades experience would be a bit more practical.
These issues and others drag me out of the story. But the concept is good so I’ll stick with it for now.
This story has been around for a month but I’d ignored it due to the prior title. That was a mistake.
The MC is a reincarnated soul on a fantasy world. Little detail is given of his prior life. He’s lucky in that his 2d father is a 1,000 year old saint. He has an affinity for life and light magic. He masters the basics early, which has the side effect of slowing his aging. So at 15 he looks 8.
Straight forward story so far. He collects a party and has adventures.
Grammar and spelling are usually decent with some significant mistakes every now and then. The author could use an editor.
One gripe is the MC wants to learn how to fight but claims he can’t due to a lack of muscles and mass. While it is true his effectivenesss as a fighter will be greatly reduced due to his artificially youthful body, there is nothing stopping him from learning any martial skills he cares to learn. Mastering the techniques requires only time and discipline.
This review is current as of chapter 10.
Three protagonists, a techie gutter thief, a wealthy aristo, and a calculating fighter type. Each is from a different portion of the galaxy.
So far the author is just laying background. So far the setting is rich and complex, the characters interesting. I will be following this story closely.
A 15 year old student is trapped in a time loop. Every 30 days (often less from his perspective) it resets. Things get crazy.
Why this has not been published I don’t understand.
I’ve read the first ten chapters. The grammar and spelling are good. The setting interesting. It seems to take its lead from novels like Randidly Ghosthound. But I like what the author is doing with it so far.
The stories weakness is the main character and his friend.
The main character, Lucas, is a bit of an idiot. For example, after being warned the forest is dangerous, and having had a few weeks of near death experiences, he reveals his presence to an unknown creature while his friend and ally is sleeping and mana burned. Does he have a death wish?
Also be warned. The MC, Lucas, and his friend, Colt, do not act like typical early 20-something males. If I were being kind I would describe them as being very emo. In reality they act like two teenage girls. I’m not sure if this is intentional on part of the author or not.
Regardless, I think this story is worth following as of now.
- Only two chapters but off to a great start.
I confess I have a soft spot for old school fighters. It’s nice to have an MC who is a fighter.
This is an excellent LitRPG, dark and gritty. The MC is not OP, is not the center of the universe, and is struggling to strive.
There are a few spelling errors each chapter, but not enough to be distracting. The grammar is generally good.
The biggest complaint is the MC starts out as a wimp and, even after 2-3 weeks of brutal battles, still falls back on his flinch and cower instinct. With as much fighting he's been doing he needs to step it up if he's going to survive. When one goes fetal and gets stabbed, repeatedly, eventually the MC should learn that's not a viable survival tactic.
This criticism should not over shadow the positives of the story. This is one of the best LitRPGs I've read in a long time. Highly recommended.
This is an excellent transported to another world story. Humourous fantasy that nevertheless seems somewhat believable.
As an aside, I don't get the reviews that complain the MC is a pushover. He would be an idiot to offend archmages who can (and do) kill with a thought. He would be an idiot to go toe to toe with offending nobles (they'd win, if only because they can hire killers and the MC is still developing). To me, the MC seems very ambitious, hardworking and sensible (sometimes).
And I have no doubt that he'll even the scales somewhat as he develops his own brand of magic.
Well written and engaging story. Recommended.