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System Change

A novel idea with a good execution

Last update: Chapter 33, 12/15/2020

Overall:

This story does something I never saw done before: someone from a system-ruled Earth gets forced into another world, which has another system.

The MC is strong by the old system's standards, but not the top dog of the world. Therefore, when he arrives at a small village in the new world, he is super strong by their standards.

He is a somewhat OP MC, but not overly so.

Imagine Bill Gates, who is not the richest man in the world, arriving at a third-world small country city and you'll get the picture. Only, instead of money, the MC has power.

Yet, this is not a face-slapping novel -- at least not up until now, though it should have some scenes of it as soon as the MC meets some arrogant noble.

This is a novel of a lost MC trying to get his bearings in a new world with a different system, and maybe a way back home. A world that seems to have lower levels of energy, at least on the edges of the human nation where he's at, and a system that is less generous than the old one (sometimes, outright punishing).

The MC was lost in the void for years and has adequately become a little bit crazy. Some social cues and rules are lost on him, and he is missing common sense here and there. Don't worry, it's nothing over the top, he just doesn't do society well.

The supporting cast is okayish until now. The first person the MC finds gives the necessary perspective on things from this world's side, and so do the next ones.

The first one, who becomes a companion, show signs of future growth arcs, and he is likable enough.

Its greatest sin is the pacing, which is hurting the story really badly. It feels like nothing is getting done, as if the MC is getting nowhere.

That said, I still trust the author enough to only take half a star from the overall score.

All in all, 4.5 stars.

 

Style:

The novel flows well most of the time, but things get a bit overly prolix for my tastes sometimes. I end up just skipping big chunks of text.

The story also feels stagnant at times. We get some cool action/exploration chapters, then a whole lot of nothing for quite some chapters.

I blame my impatience more than the author for it, but I still feel compelled to remove half a star for each issue, since this is my review =P

So, 4 stars.

 

Grammar:

This is straightforward. There have been mistakes, but I can't remember any right now, which makes this a...

5 stars.

 

Story:

I already covered it in the overall section, but the gist of it is:

A good idea with an okay execution.

The greatest issue is the pacing, as I said before. The story is suffering a lot because of that.

Actually, it feels like there's no story at all, because there's no real progression to show any story.

So...

4 stars.

 

Character:

The main character is well built. His decision-making process makes sense most of the time, his personality is okay, his slight craziness is cool.

I had to take half a star from character though. As of late, the MC is just giving free stuff left and right. Either he was never meant to be cold and rational, or he shouldn't be giving away stuff for free. Something is wrong.

The lead support character is okay and smart for his age at times. Might become something interesting in the future.

The other characters to show until now weren't card boxes. They had their issues, backstories, and personalities. The only reason I don't care for them is that they are unimportant, but that even unimportant characters are so well fleshed out is a testament to the author's skills.

4.5 stars.

 

Conclusion:

Read it already!


A Beginner's Guide to Napping, Sunbathing, and Slaughtering Your Prey

This is great, pure bliss. It makes me laugh and keeps me entertained, trying to guess what's going to happen, which I always fail to do correctly.

I highly enjoy and highly recommend this fiction to all.


Classmancers - A MOBA Esport Story

I read up to chapter 8 before leaving this review.

I wasn't expecting much from an esports novel, much less one about a kid playing a MOBA.

And yet, this was great.

It's lighthearted, funny at times, the characters are believable, has a good progression.

It was also great remembering my times playing MOBA, remembering my naive beliefs and how they were crushed (SPOILERS, ranked mode isn't Heaven).

A great novel overall, one I'm glad I took my time to read.


The Hunter

I'm loving this story and I highly recommend it

First, let me tell you I'm a very hard reader to please.

Story, character, style, grammar are well and good, but having an arrogant author saying things like "stop being a pain in the comments or I might stop posting here and make this a Patreon-only story," or obvious false modesty like "this story is garbage, how can you read it?", or similar things have made me stop reading more than one story before. [/end of rant]

That being said, I love this story.

I love it so much, in fact, that I couldn't stop myself from reviewing it after reading only five chapters.

It is simple without being stupid, heartfelt without being overly emotional, has a decent wordbuilding for a xianxia-like story, the characters feel at least two-dimensional, the pacing has reached almost the point of perfection, there are no misplaced infodumps, and the way the author writes (style or voice) resonates well with me.

(At least for now) it's the story of a cultivator god is living a simple mortal life in an alternate universe with mana and magic instead of cultivation.

Everything points to him learning how to love and care for others after a lifetime of cultivation and loneliness, and the way it's being done isn't rushed. There's a clear and believable reasoning to the feelings of both him and his love interest, and it thankfully lacks the nonstop conflict of wuxia/xianxia stories.

It's a slice-of-life story that makes me actually interested in the characters, who aren't just caricatures without a personality. How will the god and the people around him grow as time passes? Will the world be affected by it? How will those around him react when they inevitably learn the truth? Who will be the enemy and how will the god deal with them?

I'm loving this story and I highly recommend it.

Thank you, mister author, for writing it.