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Horizon of War: An Isekai with Historical Twist

I have to say this story was a delight to read. As someone who enjoys history, this writer put an immense amount of effort into getting every little detail right. And it's fun seeing a traveller from Earth get a real taste of medieval life--warts and all.

Style - The story is a slow burn, but thoroughly enjoyable. The author puts great attention to detail, and has written some matersful descriptions. With the way some scenes are written, you can perfectly visualize the world.

Story - I'm only on chapter 6 currently, but the story is shaping up nicely as a tale of young man trying to find his way in a harsh world. While war ravages the land, he uses his unique skills to earn a place and find a way to keep a roof over his head. Some of my favorite bits are the struggles of trying to earn a living in a world with only simple labour. This is something rarely seen, yet makes for a gripping story. 

Grammar - There are a few grammar issues sprinkled throughout the story, though nothing serious enough to detract from it. Most of the issues are just typos and little mistakes, which is still excellent for a self-edited work. 

Character - The character interactions are really a high point, along with the descriptions in the book. I really enjoy the interactions between the common people and of course the squire. The little moments between the characters are just perfect, and I can't wait to see how they develop.


Keeper Of Demonic Forces

A Simple Yet Engaging and Exciting Story

First off, I'll say this review is part of a swap. But to be honest, I probably would have left a review regardless, as I really enjoyed this story. The premise is relatively simple, with a young girl taking over the mantle of protector from the previous holder of the position. But the execution is a lot of fun, and I found myself flying through the chapters. And I'll update this review as I get further into the story (it probably won't take long.)

Style Score - The style is perfect for this sort of anime-like story, and the writing is snappy without too many details to bog down the reader. The author does a great job painting a picture with their words, and the fight scenes are expertly crafted. 

Grammar - The story could probably use a bit more editing, and the additional spaces between the paragraphes is a bit distracting. But the errors are mostly just simple typos and don't detract from the story. The overall grammar is solid without any major mistakes.

Story - The story is a pretty simple tale, but it's told in an exciting and engaging manner. The author weaves together bits of world building in the first few chapters that make you want to read more to learns what's going on. And there's plenty of fun bits, with characters you can't wait to see how they develop.

Character Score - The protagonanist, Kira Vermillion, is definitely the highlight of this story. She has a tragic back story, but she's also a lot fun, with some great lines. And you can really feel her emotions in the writing, especially when she's trying to deal with her adopted family, and also trying to figure out how to deal with her new... demon friend? I have to say I really enjoyed the main character, and I can't wait to read more about her.


The Ruins : [An Isekai Dungeon Crawl]

As someone rather important once said, there is nothing new under the sun. But even with tired tropes like an isekaied dungeon crawl, there are still ways to make it fun and novel. And the author has succeeded here with a fresh—and so far dark twist on the genre.

Style Score – The style is solid and it’s easy to tell what’s going on in the story. And the fight scenes are detailed but not overburdened with too many flowery descriptions that so many others stories rely on. With that being said, there is a little repetition in parts and the author might want to change up some of the kill methods for a bit more variety.

Grammar – The grammar is the only part of the story that could use some work. There are a fair number of errors especially with dialogue, but it’s nothing that a good editing wouldn’t fix. And it doesn’t distract from the overall experience as it’s not too glaring. 

Story – The story of the Ruins is a lot of fun, and you can tell the author put a lot of work into creating the world. Everything encountered is carefully constructed and there are mechanics put in place like timers to push the story forward and give it a sense of urgency. The weapons are cool as well, as are the monsters the characters face. Overall, I think this is a solid base to build a long-running story on. 

Character Score – The main character is interesting, though I feel as a I reader I haven’t gotten to know the real Akir yet. He starts off as withdrawn but then quickly transforms into a proper murderhobo. I’m sure we’ll get to know him more as the story progresses, but so far everything he’s done has solid motivation and makes sense in the context of his situation. However, he is definitely an anti-hero (up until chapter 7), so not everyone might appreciate some of his actions.


Sanguine Symphony

First, I'll preface this by saying I don't normally read fanfic, but I have seen enough to know this is far above the standard quality of the genre. Everything I’ve read so far has been expertly crafted and at the level of what you’d find in traditional published stories. However, the story is more a slow burn—and incredibly dark—though I imagine it will pick up in the future.

Style – The author has an impressive style, where they paint the world with exquisite descriptions of and characters and locations. The writing comes alive as you read, and it’s easy to visualize the dark underground of the vampire world.

Grammar – The grammar is impeccable, and I think I only spotted a single questionable word choice. There is nothing to say here other than the author has obviously put in a significant amount of time editing.

Story – The author has done an excellent job of establishing the protagonist and setting up the vampire’s underworld, but there hasn’t been an inciting incident yet to kick off the story. To be honest, it probably wouldn’t hurt to establish a direction for the plot a little earlier in the story. However, with the solid base the author has established, I imagine that the story will pick up in the next few chapters.  

Character – The main character is well fleshed out and entirely believable, with a significant amount of backstory added for flavour. The same goes for the supporting cast, and everyone has realistic motivations and distinct personalities—a hallmark of good writing. The characters of this tale are undoubtedly the highlight.


The Chronicle of the Wolves

I'm currently only on chapter 5, but this story seems to be setting up something epic here. The author has done an impressive amount of worldbuilding, which thankfully isn't conveyed through info dumps, but instead through conversation and little tidbits here and there. And while the story is still in the setup phase, I think it's going to become something great.

Style Score - The author paints a picture with his words, though occasionally the description is a little too detailed. But beyond that, he has a solid style perfectly suited for a slow burn like the Lord of the Rings. Everything is easy to understand and clear in the story, and it flows smoothly, especially after the most recent revisions.

Grammar - The grammar is overall solid, but there are some places where it could use improvement. This is probably the one weak point of the story, though the author is working on fixing it based on all the revisions.

Story - The story has drawn me in and I'm invested enough to want to see what happens to the band of adventurers. While they're mostly on the 'side-quest' phase, it's obvious something more grand is in the works.

Character - The characters are the highlight of the story, and each of them has their own unique personalites. It's obvious the author has spent a lot of time giving them each their own interests and goals, and the introductions are a lot fun as well.  


The Ascent: A Kingdom-Builder/Military History Survival LitRPG

This story is a refreshingly new take on the LitRPG apocalypse genre. It's set in South Africa—something rare in itself—and features interesting classes and terrifying creatures. The action starts early on and doesn't let up once it gets going.

Style  - The story is impeccably written, with snappy dialogue, and a good flow to it. This makes it easy to read and the chapters just fly by. The only problem I had was that there's several terms from South Africa that I didn't recognize in the first few chapters. But its becomes less of a problem after Chapter 2.

Grammar - The grammar is incredibly solid, and aside from a handful of typos which don't detract from the story, there's nothing to mention here. 

Story - The story is definitely the highlight here, and the desperate situation the protagonist and his friends find themselves in makes you want to read further. And the system seems to have a lot of unique twists and nteresting aspects to it. I've only reached chapter 4 so far, but I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Character - The characters are well developed and you get to know the protagonist quite well in the first few chapters. And eveyrone else is well fleshed out, which is a nice change from most LitRPG. There also seems to be some setup for conflict later on, and I find myself caring about what happens to the characters. 


Momo The Ripper [Isekai/LitRPG]

An Thoroughly Enjoyable and Funny Story

From the first chapter, I was hooked on the story. The writing is snappy, the protagonist is immediately funny and likeable, and there's much I want to know about the world. 

And the story just improves as you move through the chapters; with strange wizards, bony bears, and the dreaded dragon Capalsm. I thoroughly recommend this anyone lookin for a fun read.

Style - The style is excellent and the writing makes it easy to read. I breezed through the first part of the story, and more than once I found myself smiling from reading some of the quips. The author has really captured the essence of the protagnist and I look forward to seeing how Momo evolves.

Grammar - The grammar is solid, but there are few problems sprinkled through the story, mainly to do with dialogue. But it's nothing that a second pass can't fix, and in no detracts from the reading experience. It's very solid for a work that hasn't been edited yet.

Story - So far, the story has been great. While it's still near the beginning, the groundwork for an overarching story has been experlty laid. Several factions have been introduced, along with some world building to explain the conflict in the story. If the author continues on the path, the story will be top-notch

Character - The character Momo is definitely the highlight of the book. She's instantly likeable, has great quotes, and you really feel for her plight. From a pair of yokels demanding she take a bath, to a disobedient bear, she's had to face some difficult challenges—and she overcomes them all with unique talents. I can't wait to see what she does next.

Overall, it's a very solid story, which I think will only get better from here. I'll update my review as more chapters are published.