Necamijat

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Quod Olim Erat

With an eye for detail and a (lack of a) sense of direction, Elcy leads us in this Sci-Fi fiction to realms uncharted. Or that's what I got from the book, at least.
Follow along as we are thrust in the mind of something that is far away from the usual protagonist known to Royal Road, and yet feels so vaguely familiar and nostalgic.

Pros:

  • Excellent Grammar
  • Imaginative, interesting, compelling, and well thought-out storytelling
  • Likeable characters with a flair for higher things than two dimensions
  • Well made scene-setting and world-building
  • Sci-Fi goodness not found on RR

Neutrals:

  • Pace can sometimes feel off, but it's not bad

Cons:

  • Sometimes there's a bit too much technicality going on and words can feel like they're pouring into your mind that you struggle to get a sense of; a lot of tech drivel, as I sometimes like to call it

Overall enjoyment: Excellent.

Reasons on why to read: all the pros. Reasons against: you hate good books.


Empyrean

Thoroughly enjoyable mix of cultivation and litRPG

That's basically all you need to know. It's a well done mix of litRPG, portal fantasy, and cultivation novels.

The MC is well done (even if she might not be likeable to start with) and steadily grows over the course of the fiction. Her actions have increasing consequences and slowly reach beyond her immediate surroundings.

The story slowly ramps up and introduces the world, one bit at a time, without being overbearing.

The style is concise and enjoyable, and easy to read through. Grammar is top notch.


Twice Lived

Good story, mediocre characterisation

Overly winded and complex world building is introduced in snippets and at times lacks internal consistency, or worse, logic. The problems that the MC face are unique to him, have seemingly no effect on anyone else, and the rate at which they appear seem to be mostly just to push his troubles forward.

The style of the story can get a bit dull in description, but it can hold your attention to read the book. An overall positive.

The grammar is bad, the author admits it's bad, and you can only go over it and read. There's no helping it. At least it's readable English.

The Main Character is a husk of anything the author wants him to be. There's nothing apart from whimsical determination and whatever emotion is needed for the storyline. He also reminds me of Xianxia stories, a peerless talents that goes by unnoticed, somehow. The story logic tries to eek sense into it, but not overly convincing. The other characters seem fine, actually somewhat grounded in ability and measure.

The actual goal of the story is somewhat known, the MC is moving closer to it, but most of what happened between the start and the latest chapters don't want to align to it unless forcefully.

Overall, good story, decent storytelling, requires more polish. Not a litRPG.


Bitter

Deep down we are all bitter

I'm trying to find a way to describe how I feel about this fiction. I probably won't find a proper one, but I'll have a go.

'Bitter' describes a life of a less-than-popular high-school girl who enjoys dishing out the treatment she herself endures. It's eerily reminiscent of real life, in both good ways and bad. Add in a VR to the mix, and you have yourself a story.

Update: I went and read the entire story, all 594 chapters (currently) of it.

To say that the story is infuriating would be an understatement. It's meant to annoy the reader. The main character is baffling. She always tries to take the easy way out, then somehow gets rewarded by it.

But that's the beauty of the story. The main character is baffling. The world baffles more around her. Together, they both compliment and contradict each other, playing a game of cat and mouse.

The storyline is fluid. Small events producing large outcomes, small storylines converging onto a larger scope.

The style of the story is quick, easy, and at least as addictive as the game in the story, if not more. Prepared in bite-sized chunks, you don't want to stop until you overeat.

Minor grammar errors, nothing important.

Flawless victory for mooderino.


Better than one

Interesting premise, with a hint of story in place

Better than one starts with an interesting premise which allows it to clip some of the world building issues isekai stories tend to have from time to time.

The protagonists are introduced well, developed over time, and one of them has the perk of providing the story with context and an overarching plot to boot. The other, while just being in it for the ride, provides a point of view as an isekai protagonist. Together, the story develops decidedly well, with the point of contest between two differing logics and views of the world popping up to provide tension.

As far as story is concerned, some plot armour aside, there's not many quips about it.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 The other characters are somewhat plentiful (something which appears the author agrees with as well), and at times even listing their names is a bit of a hassle. If enough content for them is provided — considering their introductions were actually good and had context to them — they could become a staple part of the plot (even though there don't seem to be clear connections between where the story is going now and the main goal of the princess).

Grammar is nigh perfect and I've no complaints, especially with the author's neat writing style which is very readable and clean.

Overall, it's a good start for a story that has the elements of 'make it or break it' depending on how well the plot aligns, and I'll be reading more of it.


The Chalice Quartet

Riveting character-driven story with minor quips

I was pleasantly surprised to encounter a hidden gem of these proportions. The story starts a bit slowly and takes a bit of time to reach the points covered in the synopsis, but the neat writing style, excellent (but not perfect) grammar and a sort of dry wit that you can find in intelligent work can sway you to keep going.

Our of the four main characters, I feel that Alpine seems to lack focus and/or growth. His background doesn't cover his motives and his character seems to sway between likeable and miserable.

The world building in the story is great, and a lot of miniscule details added that make it feel fledged out.

Although two of the characters seem to be the driving force of the group, none feel left out, even if it sometimes might feel better to do just that to advance the story. 

Overall, this story is a slow burner that should be paid attention to and I think it deserves a lot more recognition than it does currently. 

I can only encourage the author to keep going (and maybe make RR his primary place of publishing, instead of his WordPress, I don't like switching sites).


Greyblood: Progenitor (A LitRPG Series)

Good grammar (that probably just needs a quick passthrough to fix) and very easygoing and direct style lend itself to readability.

The character traits of the MC are between 'well developed' and 'predictable' for the genre. It's the almost generic 'stern, yet somewhat naive, up-and-coming hero' character.

The story has a few good hooks, some decent worldbuilding, and the characters are generally likeable, relatable, or heck, even appear to be malleable by what they have went through.

Unfortunately, the author decided to stray away from introduced world-building, and put a literal God to drive the plot in an moment of necessity. While not unheard of, it could've possibly be done with greater finesse if it was taken care of earlier and with already given/explained world building tools, which were actually novel and interesting, and could give the fiction a push.

I'm also weirded out by the obvious conflict between what the MC had done and what was done to him in regards to class giving. 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 All in all, I can't give this fiction more than 3.5. It has good hooks and a decent writing style, but I felt that single moment in execution cost a lot more than it should've.

But I'm probably not the one you should be listening anyway. If you manage to get past chapter 15, then you're a better person than I.


Rise of the Lord

Rise of the Lord offers a quite... unique perspective and a bit detached narrative that plays well into the hearts of strategists.

However, the detached storytelling and various missing pieces, such as hanging plotlines or lack of proper character interaction and development, make this a somewhat drier read at times.

The main character doesn't experience, or show, growth. He is just shown being a great strategist, and wins coming so easily just makes me feel like the previous ruler was incapable and/or unwilling by comparison.

Furthermore, there is a distinct sign of dropping or suspending plotlines that don't focus on the now and on fighting, as well as any lack of veritable contact between nobility in an era in which such contact would be assumed to be a given.

I'm suspending disbelief that a new, young, virile, unmarried head of a noble house is not pestered with offers from other nobles one way or the other.

So far, the story is good, but adding more elements that go beyond bandit disposal would go a long way towards making it more believable.


The Good Necromancer

I thought I could handle it honestly. But I couldn't, not by a longshot.

The premise of the work is novel: What happens to the Necromancer that decides to do good?

Royal Road and many other places have seen Necromancers as selfish pseudo-slave-owners, but Daniel is trying to break the mould here with the author's insistence of him remaining true to the peaceful and devout worship of eternal rest.

The story moves at a distinctly rapid pace. Or, it would, if the author didn't love exposition so much.

So much information is crammed needlessly at the start of the story. I am reminded of reading through game guides or cheat sheets of information intended to be used in min-maxing a character.

The prologue is somewhat detached, from both the story and the style of writing. The first chapter, or should I say the first flashback, is riddled with exposition. If it would be spread better throughout the story instead of dumped all at once, people could maybe take a breath between reading upon encyclopedic explanations of terms.

The author often makes basic grammatical mistakes, usually in the form of misplaced apostrophes for possessives and plurals. Other times, we are privy to cut-off sentences or dialogue that could be formatted better. I'd say a proofreader could fix 90% of the grammatical errors in their first read-through. If that is fixed in the final, private version of the fiction (which I assume exists), then that is great. If not, I'd urge the author to start doing it.

The main character is decently built in the first few chapters, based on what little information is not exposition. His point of view allows for a good estimation of his character, but it doesn't provide much content beyond that, and a lot of what he says should be referred more in his mannerisms rather than dialogue.

The dialogue is messy, often too cookie-cutter and formulaic. The characters' dialogue sounds like a single person's sometimes. Sometimes they sounded like reading off a grocery list to me. A lot of dialogue centres on getting the reader up-to-date, but it can sound overdone, eerily reminiscent of NPCs in a game.

I'm conflicted about which score I should give. If there's a time when I revisit the start of this fiction (which I'm basing the review on, the first seven chapters), I'll also reconsider my score accordingly.


Drunk Dungeon

No nonsense, no tables. Maybe some cheats.

A Dungeon story where the protagonist is not a Dungeon itself or connected to one is a relatively uncharted territory and Vocaloid's storytelling is both riveting and concise enough to push through.

The main character has inherent flaws and a goal to work towards to, and the attention to detail makes it an interesting read.

Adding to that a steady release date of sizeable chapters, and the story is being put together nicely.

There's an odd sense of rooting for the underdog when reading through the story of the main character, and the author plays to the strengths of the genre and the novelties of the story well.