As usual your personality shines through the characters. You do a great job of fleshing out the personalities of these people, making an engaging world to explore. While the game itself seems manic, it is interesting to say the least. Can't wait to see more of the characters and the world.
So far what you got is very cool. I love the style of the writing overall, it's like I ger classical art in my head when I read your descriptions. I like the plot of the story so far, It's something new especially with chapters 2 and 3. While It's too early to judge your protagonist, she seems like a blank slate almost. Like she's made for the reader to insert themselves into the story. Overall, beautiful start. I can't wait to read more!