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New Spartan

This story had so much promise but was ruined by the characters. The MC is this hardcore formes soldier who gets flushed by simple conversations. None of the side characters ar fleshed out and are mostly steriotypes.

 

The story and setup is quite cool. an the start was realy good.  Grammerwise is good.