Well, the writings been pretty decent so far. However, this premise has been done before, pretty much exactly, so as far as I'm concerned you're fighting an uphill battle.
Seems interesting so far, but the writing style is long-winded. Run on sentences and flowery language make the writing awkward and a bit of a slog to get through. If the author can cut out some of the fluff it could be really good. However, right now it reads a bit like you’re trying to stretch the word count.
I'm ready for adventure Captain!
I like it so far, I can tell the author is putting in the time to put forward some quality writing. Let's hope it stays that way!!
Haha, the very first.
Like the writing style so far.
I don't enjoy having the decifer what I just read to figure out what the hell is going on.
It's a style thing, if that's what floats your boat more power to ya, but my boat is sinking.
Honestly, I feal like I could like this a lot, but pretty much every sentence has some kind of missing or misplaced word. Reading this is a bit like solving a crossword puzzle. Proofreading is important people.
Command of the English language is strong and writing skills are high. Characters have depth and the author understands how to show instead of telling. The premise is interesting and relatively unique. Definitely worth a try.
I like Female Mc's and I'm feeling generous
Writing is pretty good, but it’s just not drawing me in
idk maybe I’m just not into the mystery type style
How do I describe reading this?
It’s kinda like masturbating but never being able to climax, getting frustrated and annoyed to the point you just give up?
also Rachel’s motivations and mental diatribe seem disjointed/inconsistent to me
Let's get this party started!!!
Give it a go; you won't regret it unless all the subpar content on RRL has warped your perception of reality so much that you can no longer enjoy good writing.
Western fantasy, complex characters, strong command of the English language