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    1. Re: What is the best way to get to know the culture and lifestyle of different countries?

      Another possibility is going on your search engine and simply typing "the culture of x" with x being whatever country you want to know about. You could also ask someone directly, places like reddit (...)


    2. Re: What is the best way to get to know the culture and lifestyle of different countries?

      Whatever you do, don't watch movies "based" in that country, because hollywood doesn't know or care what they get wrong. That's unthinkable. I would never base my research on an orange-filter movie (...)


    3. What is the best way to get to know the culture and lifestyle of different countries?

      The story I'm working on features a multi-ethnic cast of characters, which naturally means that I need information on the culture and way of living of their motherlands to better develop their personalities (...)


    4. Re: How do you make a sequential scene more enjoyable to read?

      By simple in design, I meant that except for the owl sculpture the door looks like a regular one. excpet is the word you are missing. It was a plain door except for a sculpture of an owl.... (...)


    5. Re: How do you make a sequential scene more enjoyable to read?

      "Examining" a door is cold and clinical; getting "a closer look" is more inquisitive. "Scanning" has a technological vibe; "staring" more mystical.  "Receding" is not usually used towards human action. (...)


    6. Re: How do you make a sequential scene more enjoyable to read?

      Otherwise, I second adding introspection and observations. You do well to tell us what the boy sees and hears, but what about smell, touch, or even temperature? Not that you need to cram in all of that (...)


    7. Re: How do you make a sequential scene more enjoyable to read?

      One way would be to cut up the flow with internal monologue or just thoughts and observations about the setting. Basically just not make it like a statement you give to the police. Do you have like a (...)


    8. How do you make a sequential scene more enjoyable to read?

      A while ago, I asked for a critique on the prologue of an unpublished story and I fortunately received feedback by one person. One of their critiques was that my sentences seemed too sequential and ruined (...)


    9. Re: What would your fiction's title be if it was a japanese light novel?

      My title is already reminiscent of a particular anime but if I went full light novel, I'd probably end up with something like "I Joined a Quest to Save My Home Town But Now the Ecosystem is Dying and (...)


    10. Re: What would your fiction's title be if it was a japanese light novel?

      hiiro no uta: ore wa wakai toki ni kiita uta  no you ni hiiro ninaritai kedo nanka  chotto okashikatta na~ mou dame da~ xD I don't understand what you're saying but rep+1 for the poetry


    11. Re: What would your fiction's title be if it was a japanese light novel?

      An Old and Brain Dead Man Gave Me a Demonic Amulet and Told Me to Travel Far South in Search Of the Legacy of My Heretic Family and All I Have is This Sheepish Sidekick!?  This title is insane! You (...)


    12. What would your fiction's title be if it was a japanese light novel?

      You know how some light novels in Japan have lengthy titles which explain the premise of the story (E.g. That Time I Got Reincarnated As A Slime or I've Been Killing Slimes For 300 Years)?  Well, I'm curious (...)


    13. Re: How do I cleverly avoid repetitions?

      I dealt with a similar problem in What Was Lost Outside Time - the difference being that I was avoiding any use of personal pronouns, instead of any use of names, for any character whatsoever.  The answer (...)


    14. Re: How do I cleverly avoid repetitions?

      Step one - choose 2, max. 3, of the 7 jobs (I vote for mercenary and sellsword). Step two - change the way you write your sentences. Instead of "The mercenary felt the wind blowing" write "The wind blew". (...)


    15. Re: How do I cleverly avoid repetitions?

      I know the answer is "use synonyms", but the fact is that I'm already using them to address my main character. However, some people here have made me notice that I'm doing it wrong. Speaking of my story, (...)


    16. Re: How to describe a brutal death

      This is a PSA from your resident sword nerd, you have been warned. okay as far as the whole swordsman terminology goes I hate the term not due to the gender assignment but due to the fact that there (...)


    17. Re: How to describe a brutal death

      Also, regarding your gender-neutral name for swordsman dilemma- personally I don't think every swordsman must be a man, but I understand how some people might associate this word with masculinity due (...)


    18. Re: How to describe a brutal death

      500 words? for the main character? I'd say that's a very abrupt end. It's fine if that's your intention tho. The mc will experience a lot of "abrupt ends". The one I mentioned is just one of many to (...)


    19. Re: How to describe a brutal death

      1. Too much detail - Do we need to know which fingers exactly are bitten off? Does it make a difference if it is not the index and middle finger?  Now that I think about it, it really seems unnecessary (...)


    20. Re: How to describe a brutal death

      Here, its better if you change the word awful into a stronger adjective. Better yet, put the reader into the soldier's POV. Make the reader 'feel' how getting bit by a dog feels like. Also, dogs don't (...)