Draconicchimneysweep

Draconicchimneysweep

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Micro - Efficient and Reliable Cultivation [deckbuilding, cultivation, isekai]

Very nice. Micro is a sweetheart, and all the characters are written well. The interactions between characters feel believable for the most part, and so far the story has stuck to its tags and principles pretty solidly. Interesting world, fun characters, enjoyable atmosphere, and a consistent upload schedule. The summary makes it seem kinda like the magicians are going to be the protagonists, but that's not even close to true.  


Los

Decently enjoyable, but has issues

Written after reading chapter 5.0


Style: The story starts out with a solid premise, and continues to build that premise as the story continues. The POV change chapters aren't infrequent, but are not sudden or intrusive, and hep build other characters beside the MC and their interactions. The power system is simple, however the MC gets rather overly powerful and competent too quickly for a progression based story in my opinion. 
The style of the authors writing that bothers me most is how much they focus on female characters bodies and their sexuality. In a world where anyone can grow to inhuman levels of strength, having Charm and Water (in universe Water is seen as a good element to retain beauty) skills be the majority way to gain power as a woman seems, well, ridiculous. 

Story: Although not written poorly, the story of this fiction (as of 5.0) is rather inconsequential. After a few chapters of exposition, the MC's only goal is basically to get stronger. There are minor objectives in order to accomplish this, but no overarching plot has been introduced. There is worldbuilding yes, but little of it impacts the MC. We have our MC hero, and her companions, but no antagonist or reason to follow her adventures. The story gets the Call to Adventure, and then seems to just continuously repeat the Meet the Mentor step of the Hero's journey.

 

Grammar: This novel needs some editing. Not a lot, most of the story is properly written. However about 5-10% of paragraphs have grammatical errors. Missing commas, run on sentences, places where it looks like the author wrote half a sentence and then wrote half of another sentence. Easily fixable but rather jarring. There are no spelling errors that I could see.

Character: I try not to be too critical on writing. It's hard! But the characters in this story (as of chapter 5.0) need to figure out their morals, get some backstory, and find a few more character traits. Spoilers for chapters past the first 10 or so.

The wolf pack has a long and deep history clearly, however the reader only hears about the very VERY recent past. At one point the Alpha does indeed explain some of their history to MC, however it is written exactly like that: "The Alpha explained some history to the MC." The reader is informed of very little. 

 

The MC herself is written better. She has a history, and a character, with traits to go alongside that. But what exactly that character IS is used when it's convenient and when it's not? Skipped past in order to make numbers go up. 

For example. Her brothers notes are shown by the author to have manipulated MC's mental state slightly, to allow her to accept violence in a calm manner. However at a certain point MC realizes this and doesn't particularly like it, but accepts that the past her needed it, but that her brother may not be morally upstanding. We later find out MC was involved in wiping out a secret military base of some kind, whether terrorist in nature or just another country is unclear. The base was used to train information gathering, and primarily used young women as teaching targets to satisfy the people in charge's sexual desires. MC wiped the base out in a technically illegal move, and was disgusted by the whole process. She also expresses distaste at murdering innocents and brothels at different points. But after settling down into a town in chapter 5, she allows her newest companion, who's abilities revolve around sex and assassination, to set up a school to teach orphans and young girls similar abilities. She does this in order to gain power over the male leadership of the town, and to ensure her victory, she proceeds to make competing women have "accidents." Non lethal ones, yes, but enough to essentially ruin their lives. 

Overall, the MC's moral judgements seem to be whatever the writer feels is convenient, and changes when there isn't even a reason or need to. 

The final issue I have with characters is the quantity. The author introduces way too many companion characters way too quickly, and hardly fleshes any of them out. The POV chapters do a decent job, but not enough. 

This is all my opinion of course. To others, the experience may be significantly more enjoyable. However I personally don't recommend Los.