zryfurn

zryfurn

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    1. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      If you are still doing this, and do not mind. Then I will appreciate it as well. If not, I understand. https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/33997/restorationbook-1/chapter/522136/chapter-1-endless-nightpart-1 (...)


    2. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      If you're still available  https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/40498/apocalypse-meltdown I've got a short 200 word prologue, if you're too busy you can skip through it and head straight to the first chapter. (...)


    3. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Not sure if you’re sick of reading first chapters by now - but I’ll throw mine in the mix too... I’d be grateful for any level of feedback (here or in the comment under the chapter)  https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/39586/designation-first (...)


    4. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Is this offer still open? I'd love to hear your thoughts! My story is in the signature! Having read your first chapter, would I be inclined to continue reading? Yes. Good dynamic between greg and (...)


    5. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      I'd love it if you could leave a comment on my first chapter! It's a fanfic, so the events may seem rather confusing at first...but I'd like to think I did a good job explaining where my story is going (...)


    6. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      If you're up to it. https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/38482/reiincarnation Having read your first chapter, would I be inclined to continue reading? Yes. Because LOL. Enough said.


    7. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/40027/monillas-a-human-garbage Are you still accepting? Thanks If you still are though, I really like to know If my story is appropriate at this website... Even if (...)


    8. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Hi, I'm brand new to writing fiction. Could you give me some criticism on the first chapter of "Ranger"? https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/40263/ranger Thanks in advance! Having read your (...)


    9. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Heya! Could you review my first chapter as well? Link is in my signature (skip the prologue, it's only important if you continue to read it) Please tell me if its too info-dumpy I leave a thank (...)


    10. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Hi there, I'm hoping you're not all out of reviews. If you wouldn't mind I would love a review of my story "Deshawn Dale and the Hidden World." I'd be happy to read any one of your stories, just let (...)


    11. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Actually, my new story has a short introduction before the first chapter; how would it work then? Anyway, the novel in question is called: Shade and Flow.  Hope you read it, hope you like it. Cheers. (...)


    12. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      If you're still up for this, some feedback on my first chapter would be greatly appreciated! https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/39821/ash-and-bone Having read your first chapter, would I be (...)


    13. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      I'm interested in this for my story. It's been a while since I first posted my prologue, would love your thoughts on it. https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/37579/of-swords-gems Having read your (...)


    14. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Hi! I'd appreciate a look and a comment as I'm just getting started out here. I've been kicking my first chapter around for 9 years so I hope it's got some polish. Finally getting some momentum to (...)


    15. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Can you do that to my novel please? I will be very grateful if you do. Having read your first chapter, would I be inclined to continue reading? No. I didn't really understand what was going on. (...)


    16. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      You have a lot of posts so if you have the chance I would like a review of my first chapter but it is okay if you cant get to it!  Nifflheim Asger awakes after being shot full of arrows in an unknown, (...)


    17. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Hello, I would also like critique on my first chapter! Mine is different, I think, in that I already know that it's a rough start. I've been told that it was confusing in a review, but I was looking (...)


    18. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      If you're still doing this, I wouldn't mind hearing what you think. Only just started submitting this story, so the Prologue is currently all that is posted. https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/39385/risen (...)


    19. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      I posted in the wrong forum earlier asking for just this type of thing. This is my first time writing fiction and I've been (too) eager for feedback. Thanks for helping out! Here's the first chapter. (...)


    20. Re: Free Comments on First Chapter

      Thank you for offering this. If you have time, I would really appreciate it if you read my prologue at least, it's very short. Thank you https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/39302/king-eden-volume-i (...)