Suzumiya

Suzumiya

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    1. Re: Is this paragraph awkward?

      I think the general sentence structure and flow is fine but the overall ideas seem to bounce around. Everything doesn't quite mesh with each other"   The first four sentences don't seem to go together, (...)


    2. Re: Is this paragraph awkward?

      Given no context, I'm curious if this paragraph makes enough sense.       Fed upon misery and desperation, some people gave up. Others struggled against circumstance. Randy did what he was told. He (...)