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Power Up

You might want to skip the first 4 or 5 chapters.

A piece for warning first: If you decide to read this story, you might want to protect your sanity by jumping over the first four chapters (or even the first five). (Except if you like to laugh at absurd back-stories how some party ended up within a computer and if you have much sanity to spare (and I mean much)).

If ignoring the first 5 chapters, what I miss most in this story are believable characters. The characters feel so one dimensional as if someone created them by looking at the description of the role within a cRPG-party and created characters from them. Forcing the beserker to force playing the healer and the scientist the beserker and filling the role of rouge with a squirrel has some potential but this growth potential only increases the feeling of how little of a character there is.

There is little story so far. The first four chapters have some story, but as I think it would be better without, they count with a negative value in my eyes.

Unlike with the content and the characters, I didn't realize any problems with the grammar. I might have only been to distracted, though.

YMMV, and if there was a possibility to write a review without giving a score I might have done so with this one in the hope there are others that can enjoy the story. But this is what I think is a fair score for it.


The Scourged Earth

nice world building, but low quality writing

If you are interested in apocalypse litrpg stories, then this is a must read for the world-building, especially the unique and innovative mechanics used in it. The story is also not bad.

Sadly the writing does not match the ingenuity of the mechanics at all. The low quality of the writing make it quite an exhausting read and reading it as web-serial will not be fun unless the world you are burning with enough passion. Without enough passion for the story to have all the previous chapters memories or managing to be immersed into each chapter starting from the first line, the inconsistent ways to refer to characters alone will make you stop reading almost instantly when trying to resume reading later (like after waiting for the next chapter).


The Forest Spirit who sought the Gods

I don't know what to say about starting with 4 "chapters" of pure data dumping. It's better than adding data dumps to actual chapters, I guess. At least easy to skip.

If you plan to read this, I hope you do not care for spurious commas. Otherwise welcome to hell. The author seems incapable to write more than four words without adding a comma.


The Bratislava Intruder

Bad grammar, mostly only direct speech.

Bad grammar and consisting mostly out of direct speech. Unless you do not care about either, don't waste your time. (Though it has nice images, though the style of the images feels strangely familar).


My Farm Within

perfect imitation of a low quality asian webnovel

Consists almost entirely of direct speach: check

Hardly any paragraph having more than one sentence: check

One-dimensional characters (if any characters at all): check

Contains displays ("blue boxes") without any formatting: check

No mechanics not seen hundreds of times before: check

At least the grammar is not too bad (at least for the low RRL standards).

It might get better later on, but I could not stand more than the first dozen chapters.

If you are into this kind of work, you might be able to enjoy it. Otherwise, don't waste your time on it.


I am power

nothing to see here

Once extremely short chapter only, with no real content at all.

Abandoned since 2 years. Nothing to see here...


The Seven Sins: Wrath

subject says it all...................................


Cyber Ninja (WT)

nice for only a prologue

For a single chapter it is quite nice, might almost make some nice short story.

Though it does not inspire a want for more and it does not look like something a story could grow out of, to perhaps it is quite well that it was abandoned.


Zorn: the Last Minotaur

Abandoned long ago. Nothing lost.

A chapter crammed into a single section. A chapter being a data dumps. A chapter mostly consisting of monologs.

Bad grammer (sentences without periods between them and things like that). No atmosphere.

Abandoned long ago. Nothing lost.


Screaming Whisper, Ballad of Rebirth.

Another story with a MC getting OP instantly. With the so often seen different perpectives packed into each chapter. Also abandoned long ago. At least the grammer does not look too bad.