I cried, I laughed, I smiled, I feared. All from reading this novel. It brought out in me feelings I never had. The letters, the words, the sentences, the paragraphs, everything combines into a masterpiece of language that transcends space and time. I would recommend this book even to people who don't know English. All of you who had doubts, questions, hardships in your life, you can find all of the answers in this book. Know thyself, the old adage, after reading this novel I can confidently say that I am finally at home with myself.
This is an anime/light novel style novel inspired with fairy tales. What it separates it is the intelligent twists and turns author makes for every fairy tale. What I especially liked about the twists is that 1) I didn't saw them coming and 2) they made sense and weren't just twists for the sake of just adding them. There is little more blushing than I would like but that is standard for YA.
Two points author needs to improve are style and grammar. There are some awkward repetitions and tense shifts but it is still very readable.
Characters are well developed and distinct. For now there are two arcs, but interaction between Prince and other characters is, as the title of review says, very wholesome. Author does walk a thin line of this being a true harem so we will see how he develops Prince after this.
Often I read reviews here that talk how characters are realistic and then when I read I see that they are anything but. People often talk realistic when they mean "I liked the characters" /rant over. Here, I finally can say we have a realistic characters in LitRPG. The confusion, fear, lashing out for no apparent reason. It is really well executed.
Story is ok, the premise might not pull you in, but the execution will and is excellent. Action is vividly described with enough rest in between, which actually blend well with the story. Style is in the service of the story and it adds to the confusion and constant anticipation. All in all a well connected story.
Didn't learn much about characters other then the MC yet but they are introduced well. The MC is your average Joe at this point in an unusual situation. He is likable, and I could easily understand his intentions even if I thought some are bad choices at that point.
Grammar seems to be proofread, not many complaints from me.
I had a Gormenghast vibe reading this novel. It reads more like a classic than a webnovel. The style really complements the setting and the genre, it is beatufully written and imaginative. Dialogue is well written, it flows well and oozes you into the story. I really enjoyed Pierre, he reminded me of myself during my "darker" periods.
You can see that the writer really cares about her world. Everything is carefully done and thought through and many tidbits add to the overall story. It is a refreshing(?!) look on life and death, little romanticized but well executed.
I didn't find a single grammar hiccup, unlike my review :). Professionally done.
Author rewrote the novel and fixed most of my complaints so I updated the review. Old review in spoiler tags.
Writing syle is really good and I enjoyed reading descriptions and flow of the sentences. The story is well guided. Introductory chapters are pretty good, we get the feel for the characters immediatelly, progresses at a good pace and it's easy to follow even though there are six protagonists.
For me it was very readable. Maybe I would notice something misspeled/wrong word once per two chapters.
Story is well thought out. The world is logical and interesting. Vitae is a nice concept, I imagine it as a something between magic in standard fantasy and oil/electricity in our world. And author really thought about how it would affect the world, even though we are not told explicitly, we can see it in the background of how the world functions. Everything seems both believable, logical and strange because it's different from our world.
We have six very different characters. Some I hated, some loved and to some I was indifferent. But they were all craftily made, what they do and how they think makes perfect sense in the world. And their mutual interactions are pure gold. They all seem like a real-life people at this point.
But what I feel is lacking in this section is style on the macro level. There are too many switches in the beggining. We have an interlude, infodump chapter, introduction to our 6 MCs and interlude again. It makes it much harder to follow the story.
For example, I'm not sure the last interlude chapter is necesary or the history chapter could be broken up and put in the MCs chapters (e.g. part of the history we could hear in the Olive's lesson, so when he's bored we could empathize, some explanation of the conflict could go into Werner's and Jericho's chapters, map could go to the Maria's chapter, she's a pirate after all).
Second thing is that after 35 chapters we still don't know who is the antagonist and what are they fighting against. Sure, every MC has his/hers thing to worry about, but it is strongly hinted that there is something more. We only know the name of the organization ELPIS, and everyone hates them, but the reader doesn't really have a reason yet. So there's a lack of urgency because of this.
One of the reviewers mentioned that there is same word repetition in adjacent sentences. I've noticed this as well, but my impression is that this isn't a mistake but a stylistic choice, it's just that sometimes it works, sometimes it falls flat.
"This vitae was able to power entire cities. Entire cities that powered the economy and skyrocketed the country to heights never seen before. "
For me this didn't work, it felt really clunky when I read it and I think it's because in first sentence power is used literaly while second is more abstract. I think second powered should be replaced with a synonim.
"To those who oversaw this land, this was a petty dispute. A dispute that would resolve on its own."
This is an example of what worked for me. It rolled nicely and somehow added to the rythm of the paragraph. I just wanted to give an idea what worked for me and what didn't.
I watch some anime and I loved the anime style illustrations in the beggings. It adds a lot to the feel of the novel. BUT, when I saw an illustration that I particularly like (Athiena), I was shocked to see that there was no description of her in her own chapter. I bactracked and saw that none of the MCs have descriptions! I didn't like that. Illustrations should be additions not replacement for descriptions. Especially if I liked some character, I would like to read description of that character as well, because it is a different feeling. And author could point to some things specific and make them stood out more, which illustration can't do.
Also I had some issue with naming. People who manipulate vitae are called Conductors and they use machines called conductors... It's unnecesary confusing. Maybe one of those could be renamed?
This is a very good light-hearted comedy. Crazy and broken quests really add to the story. There is no overarching plot for now, but in a way this is like a good sitcom, characters in a weird situations really cary the story. Quests, boss fights are all well done and always give something new to laugh about. Humor isn't recycled which is really good.
One issue I have is with style. There were some cases where character would say something in chat but author would continue with the description without some indication that character was done with talking. So it made it confusing.
Grammar was mostly fine, but I am not an expert. Anyways, it's readable and it doesn't take away from the experience.
I enjoyed the characters, like other reviews mentioned, Bonifacius is awesome. They really reminded me when I had my own gaming clan.
This is a good story if you want to relax, chill and have some laughs.