I'm a sucker for anything that describes necromancy in realistic detail. The first chapter does that really well. At ten pages I don't feel there is enough content yet to give it ratings, but so far, your grammar is an easy five. You use punctuation like a master magician. I'm really looking forward to seeing how this develops as a story.
Okay, the system makes you plug in ratings, I did not know that. I wanted to see more first before I could even begin to be fair. I left a four for building a promising start.