I Don't Bite...

I Don't Bite...

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Origini - Book I and II

This feels like entirely a plot driven story with little focus on characters(which I prefer more, but I do enjoy a well plotted story too). It isn't a story you can just hurry through. You need to sit down and invest some time to really get into it...

Style: Huge paragraphs comprising of lots of small sentences. It was somewhat confusing and hard to follow at the beginning, but if I'm not wrong(and I very well could be), that narration style is a part of characterization. Because there seems to be a slight variation of the style depending on whose POV we are following...

Grammar: With my limited ability, I have nothing to add...

Story: I know it's a mystery, but with every chapter, the story raises more questions than it answers. Questions are fine, but without some closures sprinkled in between the chapters, it becomes somewhat confusing and frustrating to read. Personally, it isn't my favourite...

Character: Well fleshed out characters, but the time spent with each isn't enough to develop any sort of sympathy or attachments with them. Only Rish seems somewhat relatable as of now...

This story does the job of being a mystery well enough because as of now, my mind is boggled with more questions than answers...

(Disclaimer: All the above are my subjective views and opinions)


The Merchant Prince Book 1: Returning Home

I must say this story has been quite the unexpected, but pleasant surprise. The start, although isn't my favourite, The more I read, the more the story managed to immerse me within its world and characters. The depth and intricacy woven withing this story are impressive...

Style: For me, the style is the least favourite aspect of this story; especially the first chapter or two, where info-dumps are prevalent. Some of the dialogues are also done just give the readers information. The so-called, 'as you know' or 'maid and butler' dialogue. Further into the story, these problems are less prevalent and the narration also started to grow on me. And although some expositions are still there, it's done in a subtle, less intrusive way...

Grammar: I've got nothing...

Story: A masterful story, with carefully handled dark themes, along with subtly rising tension of political intrigue. I especially liked how the character's way of life is brought to life(I know, redundant) through tiny rituals like wearing a different dress for separate occasions. There's also a lot of attention to detail. Though I'd have liked a bit more tension in the earlier chapters...

Character: The main characters are fleshed out enough, though some of the side characters still have room to improve. But their character is also starting to come through as the story progresses...

As today I'm feeling particularly inarticulate, I wouldn't say anything more, but if you're a fan of strategies and political intrigue, then this is a story is a must-read...

(Disclaimer: Everything I wrote is only my opinion)


A Super Robot Story

Fresh concept, needs tightening...

Isekai + Gender bender + Mecha. I have to say I at least haven't come across this concept before. It is an interesting mix that demanded a read, and although the story of Tsun or Lyle is an interesting one, it does suffer from a few issues...

Style: The style is a big limiting factor to the story's entertainment value. The prose is simple and easy to read and the descriptions paint a vivid picture of the world, but some places, especially during action scenes, it becomes confusing, as if the picture the words are trying to convey, isn't coming across. I had to stop a few times to properly imagine the scenes, even then, I was still confused in places...

Grammar: The grammar is not a problem here. There are no errors that stuck out too much or hindered my reading experience...

Story: A bit difficult to get through the earlier chapters. There's almost no tension or anything, particularly interesting happening. But the later chapters do get intriguing with the shadow of the story coming through...

Character: Well, Tsune, or Lyle, whatever you call him or her, they are a big problem in the story. In the starting few chapters, they lack any shred of motivation or drive. Their inaction and lack of agency are more prominent because we only follow her throughout those chapters, with the only other character introductions happening because of plot points. It's very hard to have a living, breathing world that way. The problem does get solved in the later chapter, with more character interactions and even the mc getting a proper personality(her inner struggle and identity crisis is portrayed very well), it's still a big hurdle to overcome the earlier chapter's stagnant flow...

Overall, this story has a lot of potentials, but it does need a lot of tightening to make the content more concise. As it is now, it still has enough good qualities to keep you reading...

(Disclaimer: All of this is my opinion and mine only)


Quest is not for sorceress

The world that Mia inhabits is colourful and magical. Even in the pages of the story, I can feel the life within the world and those inhabiting it...

Style: The style fits the story like a perfectly tailored dress. Descriptive and lively, it can draw you into the pages as if you are experiencing the story personally. It takes you on a journey and avoids the trap of info-dumping skillfully. There are however a few redundancies here and there, but they didn't hinder my reading at all...

Grammar: Well, it's difficult to say since the story is so wonderful, but the grammar is really a bummer. Although it doesn't affect the readability too much, inappropriate forms of verbs and tense mistakes are too much to ignore. As of now, the chapters could really use some editing...

Story: I have almost nothing to add here. It's a story full to the brim with fun and excitement. Though the latest chapters lessened the tension a bit more than I'd like, that's just my personal gripe...

Characters: The characterization is so good it makes me jealous as an author. Everyone is distinct and fun to read, with their own quirks and specialities. Though the protagonist didn't really feel as like she's 16 yet, whether that is a conscious decision by the author or not, it can only say, I like her as she is...

Readers beware, you might find yourself entangled in the wicked sorcery Mia Dendragon has woven into the story, and unable to escape, you'll become like me, someone waiting desperately for the next chapter...

(Disclaimer: This review is only based on my opinions, so take it with a grain of salt if you will)


The Precipice of Power

Seriously! there just isn't enough of this gem. Not bragging, but I've probably read a truckload of cultivation novels, and despite their addictiveness, there are a sizable number of things that frustrate me about them. While it's too early to pass on a proper judgement on the story, I haven't noticed any of those elements in it yet...

The prose flows really well with the story, bar a few instances where I found some wordings a bit unsuitable, with no noticeable grammatical errors, this one just drew me right in with its distinct and likeable characters and intriguing story...

So now I'm just waiting for more chapters to gobble up...

(This goes without saying, but all above are my opinions and mine only)


Saisei Man

It's not your average superhero story, that's for sure, especially the characters, which I think is where the story shines. Their actions might not always be heroic, and sometimes downright unlikeable, but I still find myself cheering them on. The grammar's alright and without any noticeable mistakes and the story told from the perspective of the two protagonists flows really well...

If I have a gripe, it'd be the first chapter. That long intro into Hitomu's home to office life might have served a purpose, but as the start of a story, it isn't interesting enough and takes a heavy toll on my attention span...

Other than that, it's a superb superhero fic that's definitely worth a read...

(As usual, All above are my opinion and mine only)

p.s. Don't you just want to smash your keyboard in half when you accidentally delete the review you wrote due to clicking the wrong thing? Ah, don't mind me, I'm just rambling...


Long War

Yeah, that’s a gladiator reference, but that statement does sum up my experience. I tend to lean more towards the fantasy crowd rather than sci-fi, but the story gripped me and kept a hold of me till the latest chapter...

Other reviews mostly explored the technical things already, so I won’t go too much into detail by regurgitating the same thing, but here are the few things I noticed...

Style: This is where my biggest problem with the story lies. While the narration is nice and flows really well with the story, some of the narrative choices still left me wanting. Especially in the earlier chapters(that’s not to say it doesn’t persist until now, although much less noticeable), exposition-heavy narration and dialogue were fairly regular...

The transition between POV and dialogue also had some issues with different character’s thoughts written in the same paragraph with another character’s narration. Those bits forced me to halt my reading to figure out who was thinking and who was speaking, although the time it took was minuscule, any stop in the flow of the story hampers the reading experience. But the author has started fixing that problem too, so I don't think it would be a major problem in the later chapters...

Grammar: Nothing to say here. In this part, I’m inferior to the author and noticed nothing that hampered my reading experience...

Story: Again, nothing much to say about this excellent, well-crafted story except the fact that I enjoyed it very much. Although the characters still don’t have an obvious goal and are in the phase of finding themselves, the sheer amount of fun in the story is... well, fun. If it’s a plotted(peasant way) story, then well done! If it’s discovery written(noble way), then double well done, though I suspect it was a pea- plotted story. But still, well done anyway...

(Yes, I’m biased towards discovery writing. got a problem???)

Character: The cast of characters is large in this one with each having noticeable traits and personality, but the sheer number of them makes them harder to grasp. The protagonist also started with a fairly uninteresting personality, though it seems to be improving in the later chapters. And not just him. Many other characters are also starting to get much more depth in the recent chapters. in short, not much to complain about...

Conclusion: As I said in the beginning, I was entertained, and thoroughly. And why the heck aren’t there more chapters, dammit!!!

(My usual disclaimer: All above are my opinion and mine only)


An 'Ordinary' Adventure

A painful beginning, though improves later...

To be honest, I'm in a bit of a quandary about this. On one hand, I could feel the writer's passion behind their craft, on the other, reading through the first chapter was sometimes a painful experience for me. Maybe because recently I've developed a bit of skill towards critical reading, the faults seemed all the more glaring to me...


To the writer's credit, they did improve their craft in the most recent chapters...


Style: The biggest weakness of the story, redundancy. Repetition, when done with moderation and proper skill can sometimes be the strength of a story, but too much, and it becomes a shackle that hinders the story's progression...


In the case of this story, the abundance of redundancy in both narrative and word choice makes it a chore to trudge through in the earlier chapters. The later chapters did become cleaner and the repetitive style of writing was discarded, making the story more bearable, much to my relief...


Story: Up till now there's only a vague idea of a story but nothing concrete. The earlier chapters are quite stagnant and there's not much feeling of progression there. When it does start to pick up, we have little idea about the goal of the story. Although it's not a bad thing having a vague goal for a story, the picture that the story has a goal should be clear. in this case, even that picture is vague. the feeling of progression is barely there...


Grammar: With my limited grammar skills, I didn't spot too many errors that took away from my experience and comprehension...


Character: The second biggest in the weakness department. All of them felt very inconsistent, even the MC, whom I couldn't figure out the thought process of even when the author spelt out his thoughts...


All in all, as far as fictions go, it starts pretty poorly, though that might be more due to a lack of skill rather than effort, as proven by the fact that the author has improved significantly in the recent chapters. In my opinion, if the story is tightened up some more and the structure improved it has the potential to be better...

And though the beginning is hard to read, if you just skim through it by skipping over the details, it becomes much easier...

That said, I wish the writer good luck and hope they're able to improve their craft and the story further...

(BTW, all above are my personal opinion)


Magnus

THE STORY OF AN MC, WHOSE NAME IS...

MC, a Post-modern soldier with bullets for swear words, trapped in a fantasy world under the whims of a madman- tentacle- thing???

It was a fun, action-packed read that kept me going till the latest chapter and left me wanting more...

STYLE: Although it had a slightly wonky beginning, with a somewhat grandiose sounding narration that didn't seem to suit the story, it became better with the story. There are some slight redundancies here and there and although the descriptions are vivid and well crafted, though it can slow the pace sometimes. There is also a chapter or two(especially the beginning of the first dream sequence) where the story dragged for me, but overall the story had a decent pace and flow...

GRAMMER: I'm no grammar expert myself, but from what little I know, I didn't spot any obvious mistakes...

STORY: For now the story is kept vague and we don't get much of an insight into what's going on, but it's done in a good way. We mostly follow MC through his journey in a strange and magical world with minor POV shifts here and there. The writer does a good job of portraying MC's discomfort as someone who has no control over his life or death. The MC has a clear goal and motivation to get there, and strange powers that help him in his way in an amoeba infested world. All in all, it's an engaging story...

CHARACTER: There is only one character that really matters as of now, MC. His character overall is kept pretty consistent, though somewhat unlikeable for me. Some of the other characters introduced have some consistency issues and felt slightly unbelievable at times...

All of the above is only my opinion...


Creation - The Path of a God

Let me get this out first. I HATE ZOMBIES. 

But that's not my only problem here. First when I started reading, I didn't like the mc. A passive mc who goes around saying 'look at me! I am so miserable!' isn't my cup of tea, the characters are all cardboard cutouts who always do the same antics. They are supposed to be loyal to the mc, yet they never really inform the mc of any info they get. They act as they please, but always the same way. And everyone, I mean EVERYONE literally spout the same nonsense over and over. 

The mc's reasons for supposed 'non-interference' are very frustrating as he ultimately does interfere. It seems a contrived way to advance the plot. 

Still, it was readable enough as a wishfulfilment story, though the ending was really hasty, leaving many unexplored plot holes. 

But the book two was just wrong! It suddenly and completely changed the tone of the story. Reading a few chapters it seemed like reading an uninteresting gibberish. Loosing completely the feel of the previous story. Plodding through the first few chapters when I finally reached the action, I found it unengaging and lacking in tension. I even doubted if its the same author writing.  

The constantly changing POV's, are really destracting and make it even worse. It stagnates the flow of the story. I binged through to the last chapter and well, all I can say is that it's an unnecessary book two. Unless it starts getting better, it's not worth reading.