And who knows, it might even be his!
One look at the author's profile pic and you can feel the homage to overlord oozing off of this story. The main character is a necromancer that isn't BAD but isn't going to take a loss just to help someone else out, all bundled in a fairly standard semi-op reincarnation story.
Really, where this story stands out is that the main character is here for his family (defined by him). We have hints fo the various borerline immortal entities he called friends in a forgotten age as well as the people he has decided to protect in the modern, and almost more than the leveling up and story, those characters are the focus of this story (if you're not getting Overlord vibes yet, you should be).
That said, the flow and pacing is much better than at least the anime version of Overlord (I haven't read the LN or Manga so I wouldn't know on that front). In short, I enjoyed it a lot more than I did watching the show. This doesn't mean its a 1:1 match with overlord, there is more focus on worldbuilding and leveling (all of which I enjoyed) and the family focus is more of a 'search for the family' rather than a desire to protect them, but the same aesthetic is still very much there.
TLDR: Should I read it?
Yes. The MC is OP but not over the top and the story is well written with good pacing/flow. GIve it a few chapters, it'll be worth your time.
I'm a sucker for monster evolution stories, and this is a good addition ot the genre. Its a bit slower than I'm used to, replacing the dopemine rush of constant level/evolution ups with a more character heavy focus.
Frankly? I think it's a breath of fresh air. Salvos is a curious demon trying to understand a new world with no prior knowledge, and I find her struggles to define herself both emotionally and physically an interesting counterpoint to the usual blue screens and combat skills (which are still there).
The only downside is that its short. Well worth a read.
I'm not a fan of smut, but there's enough fun military scifi here that you can just skip past it and enjoy a heavy handed (in a fun way!) inversion of gender norms in the middle of a standard 'marine boot camp' military science fiction story.
Well written with sparing third person POV. The story flows easily from one scene to another without lingering too long on extraneous issues or skipping over things that help build the characters. The action is fluid and fun to read, and the plot develops smoothly and in general it does a very good job at encouraging you to flip from chapter to chapter.
I didn't notice anything. Doesn't mean that there isn't something there, but it was clean enough for me to skip past it.
The story and character are fairly well done if straightforward. The main character is thrown into space marine boot camp with voracious space babes and he has to complete military training while deciding whether or not to keep his purity intact and navigating alien social norms.
Right now, there's not a lot that has actually happened, both by way of character development and plot development outside of a slightly exagerrated inversion of Earht norms, but what has happened has been very good. I'm interested in where the author is going with the world building as it seems interesting and we appear to be building toward enemies, but internal and external, but so far not a lot has happened. Hence a joint 4.5.
TLDR: Worth a read and the smut isn't essential to the plot (thank God).
This story had some frustrating elements, but those parts were frustrating mostly because so much else of the story had potential. Is it worth reading? Yes. Could it be improved? Also yes.
This is the story's biggest weakness. The chapters from Liz's perspective are well written and engaging. You care about her struggles, triumphs and how she overcomes obstacles. The fights are frequent without being overwhelming, well written and engaging. The problem comes when the author tries to slot in other viewpoints (and there are a lot). All but one felt underdeveloped and jarring.
The story is very fun and worth following up on, but I would suggest that the author either expand the other viewpoints to the point where the characters feel fleshed out or drop them entirely.
One thing I am very interested in is the 'returnee' side character. He seems to be interesting and a good framing device for the full picture of what is happening in the doomed world. I'm not sure I've seen a side character returnee used in this fashion before, and I am intrigued in seeing how it will play out.
I also very much like the aggressive and almost brutal nature of the System in the way it interacts with people.
The idea that you can make purchases from the System without xp/credits in exchnage for emotional costs really interests me and I want to see how the author develops it.
Evidently there were some minor mistakes before I read it, but they appear to be fixed now. 5/5.
If you want to talk about weak to strong, this story is very good at it. In fact the MC almost starts out too weak and the story is about her confronting that weakness, both physically and emotionally. it's a little short right now, but her arc has a lot of promise (as does the returnee) and its worth reading for their development alone.
Obviously you should read this. Materia blade is one heck of an author and even though we only have fifty or so pages of story, already it is positively tantalizing. The story starts slow, but the world and characters are heavy with unspoken concerns and mysteries. We have hints of magic, of ecological disaster, and of trauma, but we don't know anything yet. More importantly, the writing is good enough that Materia makes you WANT to know.
In my mind that's the line between a good story and a great one, and at least so far, this is a great one.
My only 'complaint' is that the story eases us into the world a bit slowly. This isn't actually a problem. It fits the heaviness and dread that underpins everything so far like a glove. The writing is good, the flow is good, and the pacing are good. An easy five stars.
I didn't notice any problems. There might be some, but if there are they're rare enough that I didn't spot them.
There's barely a story right now, just the foundation of one, but hoo boy what a foundation. From the aesthetic to the world, everything feels right.
So far we only have one real character, consumed by survivors guilt and lashing out at his friends but he's believeable and sympathetic. He's seen things and done things that he's struggling to process and the writing does him justice beautifully.
This is an interesting story because there are elements I really like and elements that make it struggle. In recommending this, I want the caveat to very much be "so long as you can get past the word usage/stylistic issues."
That said, there are some hints of a fun and fast light novel hiding in this story. I think the author is on the right track and I really hope they can refine and polish it until it is there. The aesthetic and 'anime feel' of a fun story of the new prince/king and his friends having to protect his kingdom against nefarious plots seems fertile ground for a story.
This story is written to be fast and fun with a focus on a cast of unique characters. That said, it clashes with a ponderous writing style, long chapters and some questionable word choice issues. It sounds like the author is working on ironing out the kinks so hopefully by the time you read this, these problems will be in the rearview.
Not going to lie, the grammar is a bit rough. There tense confusion issues, missing words, confusing descriptions, and just generally a strange 'off' feeling to how the words are chosen/used. If grammar is a dealbreaker for you, you should probably move on from this story.
We're in the early stages of the story, but I very much like the simple but fun trajectory of the plot so far. In addition, does a good job of introducing a fairly complex world that feels lived in and developed. I ended my read eager to know more about the universe of the novel.
The characters are a bit tropey, but they all feel different and real. I feel like a story focusing on them, their development and their interaction has alot of potential as they seem like a fun bunch
Despite some stylistic liberties from the author, this is very much a fun and fast read.
This is the novel's weakest point. The fighting is great and the character develoment is great, but it isn't uncommon to run into a tonal shift or a narrative shift. as well as the occasional 4th wall break. I think this novel could do with a proofreading draft, but outside of some of these worldbuilding/musing moments, the stroy reads very smoothly.
I noticed one or two issues, but not much more than that. It's really not a problem, but I did notice infrequent issues with phrasing etc.
The story is half cliche and half new. System Apocolypses are incredibly common, and the character's life is fairly standard fantasy fair, but the addition of cultivation/daos shakes things up. That said, the pacing IS a good grip faster than I'd like, but beyond that the story was fun, albb
Characterization of the main character and his family are probably the best parts in this story. It can get a little exposition heavy at time, but we have a back story, and the characters react naturally to it. The story introduces some trauma for the MC early on and as he develops we learn a little about his own role in perpetuating his own suffering. Overall, very good.
This is a rewrite of a cultivation novel that I greatly enjoyed the first time. It's better. It has all of the tropes you come to expect with the genre- unfair worlds where strength rules all, alchemy, and mysterious masters, but it does it with a light enough hand that they don't FEEL overdone. It's a little early in the story's development, but it has more than enough potential to follow at this stage.
The story does a good job of advancing hte plot with alternativing third person points of view. There were one or two spots where things went a TAD too fast and it got a little confusing, but beyond that pacing, word choice and tone are all very good.
I didn't notice any mistakes. They might be there, but they didn't jump out at me.
Right now we're just in the foundations of the novel. We're spending more time learning who the characters are and what the world is than we are watching them DO things. That's the only reason for the half star ding- nothing has happened yet but that isn't a bad thing.
I liked the characters in the first iteration and I love them now. They feel real as I read them and I'm interested in each of their goals, struggles, and trials. If this story follows the pattern of the original, that will be the focus going forward and I'm looking forward to it.
Only a mask is a mixed but very positive experience. The concept is phenomenal and the author carries out the core of the story extremely well. The main characters are debt ridden screw ups that end up as supervillian henchs to make ends meet. I LOVE how the author wove absolute brutality and office worker banality together. Half of the story is people bored and gossiping, and the other half is characters bleeding out in alleyways because being a hench sucks. In short, the author has a gread idea and is on the right track. Just ignore the speedbumps along the way.
The style is very much a mixed bag. Most of the time it's just fine, but perspective is third person omni and from time to time the author slips into passive 'narrator voice,' more or less breakin the 4th wall and talking directly to the reader. That said other than some idioms that don't land correctly, the story is well written and engaging.
The grammar is good, but there are some word choice issues that are a bit glaring (especially in the first couple chapters). I generally consider poor/inappropriate word choice under grammar (as usually they're connected) but this story is a bit weird in that the grammar was actually very solid.
The story concept, world, and crafting are all A+s. I am more than willing to overlook the above two concerns to keep reading about this plot/world.
There are multiple well fleshed out characters. In fact, characterization is flat out a strength of this novel. That said, one of the MC's is so grating and frustrating that I struggle to read her. It's their personality/in character, but it just saps some of the fun out of the story when they're being purposefully difficult and causing problems for everyone else. Still, if you can get past that, all of the characterization is A+ caliber.
So your 'TLDR' is that this is REALLY good. If you have even the slightest inkling that you want to read epic science fiction, give this a try.
The story has a massive scope, entire stellar empires getting wiped out massive. There are a lot of POVs which at times can be good, but at times is a distraction. I know that some of the story arcs feel like throw aways that I scim past because I just don't care. That said, when it works (most of hte time) it WORKS. The chapters skim past quickly and it's hard to put down.
Overall good, but I noticed the occasional missing word that threw me off. Not enough to really disrupt my enjoyment, but I noticed it.
Yeah, the story is amazing. Post scarcity humanity in all its unfocused and manic glory replicating the science fiction from old while fighting ancient enemies. There are plenty of pop culture references, but it's literally references to a half forgotten and legendary pop-culture so it works.
The good characters are REALLY good. I found myself enthralled in and getting emotional over the struggles, failures and triumphs of aliens. Moreover, the aliens were ALIEN. Not just a person in a bog monsters skin.