This is a slow-building story, so if you’re into instant action you should keep moving to another story. Don’t bother leaving a low-scoring review if it’s not for you; that’s just rude. If, on the other hand, you appreciate an author putting thought and effort into something, read on!
A LOT of stories have a main character acting in ways difficult to define as anything but “stupid.” This is usually a tactic by the author to bring about something clever later in the story, and is all too often painfully obvious. Razzmatazz has performed an admirable trick every litRPG author should study and emulate to the very best of their ability: The main character is exactly as smart as their status indicates!
The poor girl begins her new life with some of the lowest statistics I have ever seen. She is so low in mental stats, she can’t recognize when she is making a poor decision, nor stop herself from following through. She can just barely understand she’s done something foolish, yet again. In short, she reflects the numbers she sees on the screen perfectly, regardless of what she may have been before.
Well done, Razzmatazz.
The characters are well-written, deep, and interesting. The style is engaging and the story takes its sweet time to take each and every step. Even the grammar is well done, with typos quickly corrected by an attentive author who pays heed to every comment.
This is a story I heartily recommend and I will read to the very end, no matter how long it takes.
Any fan of dungeon core stories would be best served not to miss this one.
As usual, our main character starts with nothing but their mind. The journey taken by that mind to learn a new, magic-filled environment using just wits and applied science is truly a wonderful ride.
I normally have to deduct for grammar in a review, but only a tad so here. In this story you'll find excellent grammar and spelling, with an occasional slip soon corrected by the author.
Reading this work you'll also find interesting characters embedded in a fascinating story delivered with a wordy style. I, personally, enjoy a verbose style of descriptions and don't find the word count or paragraph density anything but delightful. If lots of words are not your thing, you may find the story daunting.
Early on, only three characters are present in the entire story. Even so, they are all fleshed out exactly as much as you would expect from a single observer's point of view. The main character has great depth and slowly parses an understanding of the enigmatic other characters. Well done, in my opinion.
Overall, this is a fantastic story I will heartily recommend to any and all who will listen!
@Rhaegar is an accomplished and immensely popular author on Royal Road. Reading his announcement of a new story brought me here. So many people know his Azarinth work, yet few remember Ilea started alone and afraid in her pajamas also...
An author's past work or reputation cannot substitute for a good story, however.
This is the kind of story you'll find yourself yelling at the character on the screen. Like watching a horror movie and telling the group not to split up, I found myself shouting suggestions, then "NO!!!" as life and death and discovery happened in the pages before me.
Such is the style of the story, drawing you in, to experience with Adrian his self-doubt; his learning; his growth; his life. When you imagine yourself in Adrian's bare feet, you realize the story is progressing close to what it would be if your chair-bound, paunchy body were there instead. Real-world slouches, such as many of us are, don’t just start out slaying mythical beasts like Conan the Barbarian immediately. We have to build up to it. And survive.
Adrian is a well-thought-out character, only getting deeper and more complex as the story progresses. Coupled with good grammar, this makes for a great read: If you're willing to let the story grow as it should.
From Merdon's beginnings as a reluctant hero to their entire group's rise in both power and responsibility, this is an engaging story full of real characters. Merdon and Sarel begin a trend by managing to see each other as real people, rather than as separate races. It is a heartwarming facet of an adventurous, often gripping story.
While the style is sometimes slow, and sometimes wordy, these are only minor drawbacks in the shifting perspectives for the story's telling and easily overlooked. The story itself is a thoughtful progression of plot and story arcs and set within a complex, very real feeling universe. Well done, author!
From the rules of magic to the politics of the land to the creatures inhabiting it, the universe of the Kobold Whisperer deserves special mention. Everything fits together in realistic ways with reasonable explanations, where they can be known, at least. Even the kobolds’ non-traditional appearance has a purpose and is not just a random author’s decision. The sub-cultures are rich and enhance the plot and story well.
The weakest point is the story's grammar, but even there it shines well above the average offering on Royal Road. With the well-developed and engaging characters found here, anyone fond of fantasy should be well rewarded by reading this story.
The arrogant princess at the heart of this story is learning how to live outside a palace at the same time she is learning how to tap into and grow with her potential for magic. While the points of view change and are often unreliable narrators, the plight of the princess is central to all else.
The princess is sometimes relatable and often not, but all the characters are deep enough to feel real, rather than monochromatic. If anything suffers from lack of depth, it would have to be the setting itself; the scale of travel and size of the known world seem both off and undersized.
Nothing negative detracts from the enjoyment of the story, however, and I find myself looking forward to the posting of each new chapter. If you enjoy fantasy kingdom intrigues or deep characters, you will likely enjoy this story as well!
I so want to give this story five stars. Unfortunately, it has not yet earned all of those stars.
Otto wakes up trapped in a tower with no memory of anything beyond going to sleep in his normal bed last night. Standard isekai entrance.
Before the first chapter is over Otto discovers a magical instruction manual and casts his first spells. I found all of this interesting, but presented in a choppy, almost bullet-point manner. The dialog is often confusing, with transitions between speakers often only separated by an extra line space. The characters often use several lines of quoted sentences to express what is typically found in a single paragraph--usually with only contextual hints at who is speaking.
Hopefully without spoiling anything for you potential readers, the magic system is complex, but is actually the nuts-and-bolts of how the system is built. Where a common mage might know how to cast a fireball, Otto learns the language used to construct a fireball spell, which he can then call, "Fireball." A normal magic-user never learns anything like this.
I like this. I like the coding approach to magic, even if it is bulky and complex. What I have a harder time with is Otto's attitude toward the simple task of reading a magic instruction book. He is so desperate to escape, he ignores the fact he is in a perfect environment to take as long as he needs to learn everything in the book.
In short, Otto is an idiot. Soon, his idiotic decisions start getting people killed. It makes it hard to like Otto, and difficult to root for his success.
As a coder, Otto should be a problem-solver. That's what writing code is really all about. If the author can clean up the dialog and description issues, then have Otto act with more forethought and deductive reasoning, this story has a five-star potential. I will keep reading with my fingers crossed.
I must say, beginning life in a magical universe as an adult in a five-year-old's body is a difficult challenge for most isekai. Many will only remember the main character was an adult when in need of some adult-like behavior or knowledge. The author seems to be mostly avoiding those pitfalls with a system and environment which allows ten-year-olds to act like full-grown adults. The system lockdowns preventing some of that sort of over-powered advantage are definitely interesting.
Grammar is an issue, and some editing polish here could really elevate the story. Better character interactions would go even further.
This is a promising story I am enjoying and will continue to read. The crafting instead of or in addition to combat is nice, and the interaction with the main character's previous skillset is particularly well done. If you can overlook some grammar and stiff character development, you can probably enjoy it also!
The story builds on a combination of Archimedes' arrogance and desperation to survive. The ancient dungeon's mind knows tricks employable by even a spanking new dungeon can use, and so pulls out all the stops live another day.
The building progression and preparations for avoiding the inevitable doom approaching combine with the dungeon's quest to understand in interesting ways.
When the discovery of how the world really works is made, the story starts to fall apart instead of coming together for a new motivational arc. The story seems to get too caught up in character abilities and needs to get back to character interactions and motivations.
Building main doors out of thick platinum, then being surprised by adventurers just peeling off the material and leaving. Really?!? The story felt like it was off the rails by this point.
The author could benefit from more advice about how to make interesting traps and logical dungeon floors, but I have enjoyed this story regardless, and if the author can manage to write more, I would love to continue reading more as well.
Characters drive this story. The new chef has a secret, and his methods of food production are almost comically difficult to hide. The supporting cast are given just enough time in the spotlight to get a sense they are real people with real hang-ups and real motivations.
The main players are interesting and full of complex flaws and motivations. Along with bits of humor and drama, it makes for one entertaining chapter followed by another.
The magical system and character motivations interact to produce a story I will gladly continue reading. If you are in need of a reading experience similar to a good cup of hot cocoa, you need look no further.
I knew I was in for a bumpy ride from the first pages. Despite the sometimes jarring grammar and the often speech-like dialog, I found myself interested in the story. So I read it all the way to the end.
If grammar is an issue for you, you should probably pass on this one. Likewise, if character development and natural dialog are important to you, keep moving on.
However, if you can overlook these basic storytelling elements, the author's tale of what an immensely powerful wizard with memories from his modern society beginnings does to cope with being accidentally absorbed by a fresh dungeon core can most certainly work for you.