Danetello

Danetello

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    1. Re: I need opinions and advice on my description/blurb

      I noticed that you posted a request on my description editing thread. We'll definitely get to your request in due time, but I can't guarantee that it will happen soon. If you want some immediate, although (...)


    2. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      Please help me with a better description, you are my only hope.  The link is in the signature. I honestly don't think there's much I can improve in your description. Your success so far proves my (...)


    3. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'Healing Dungeon': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/43490/healing-dungeon The description was all over the place, so I tried to clean it up and get it properly structured. Hopefully, you (...)


    4. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'Hilda Finds a Home': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/34777/hilda-finds-a-home We only edit descriptions, and thus we can only work off what's provided. Your description is good with no (...)


    5. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      I also would like you to take a look at my description and work your magic if you have the time! Your description is a textbook case of what I consider to be a good description. 3 short paragraphs. (...)


    6. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      Hi, I'm always interested in any and all kinds of feedback. The link is in the signature. Also, thanks and sorry :P This description isn't one that I can casually edit. You clearly had a clear goal (...)


    7. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'King: The Silver King's Echo': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/40741/king The description started great, but near the end, it went off the rails. I get what you were going for, but the (...)


    8. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'The Guardian of the Stars': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/42947/the-guardian-of-the-stars There were a lot of grammatical errors that I had to fix alongside restructuring the description. (...)


    9. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'Thick as Thieves': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/41780/thick-as-thieves All I did was was add some paragraphs to the original description. I literally didn't change anything else. The (...)


    10. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'For Irisiont': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/41571/for-irision The original description was one glorified sentence. I tried my best to provide some structure to it. You can judge my (...)


    11. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'Descent': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/43266/descent I can't edit the description of Cry Wolfe, since there is literally nothing to work off of. For this story, I attempted to clean (...)


    12. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'Space Lord': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/42877/space-lord I mainly focused on cleaning up the structure and sentences of the description. I've constructed a basic framework, but it (...)


    13. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      Hey, thanks for offering this :}  Been going back and forth about doing this, but I do feel as if it's lacking compared to my first book.  One I'm inquiring for is 'Lost in the Shadows' . It's (...)


    14. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'Asleep - A LITRPG story': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/41537/asleep-a-litrpg-story Your initial description didn't really have anything wrong with it, apart from the one-paragraph (...)


    15. Re: Viewers insufficient

      Fixing your description will help a lot. I might be a bit biased towards this issue, but long, poorly structured, story descriptions are one of the biggest mistakes that writers make. The description for (...)


    16. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      I'm willing to edit anyone's story description. My goal is to make the description more polished and intriguing. If you have an attractive and appropriate description, then more people will want to (...)


    17. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      For the story 'Gemstone Goblins': https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/40929/gemstone-goblins Your initial description wasn't bad by any means, so I mainly just tried to add some flair to it. Because your (...)


    18. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      < Your story description (...)(...)


    19. Re: Swapping from first to third person

      My first book is written in the 1st and 3rd person. My approach to avoid reader confusion isn't particularly elegant, but I only had like 5 complaints about it, so it might work for you. Though, the one (...)


    20. Re: I'm willing to edit anyone's story description.

      Would appreciate some assistance. I need a better description of my story, but I find that a lot harder than writing chapters. Had feedback from folks getting past my first chapter that it hadn't (...)