Luxmes

Luxmes

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Thief of Time

Sub-title: Wait, no, you’re too badass to be Robin Hood

- Style:

The style is full of energy and quick-paced, description, dialogue and thoughts linked flawlessly for an exciting effect. The content of the descriptions, in particular, is very good, giving enough to the reader to immerse properly in the action without creating a flood that would slow the whole pace down.

Another very good point is that the author knows when to tell, when to show, and when to only imply things.

5 out of 5

 

- Grammar:

Nothing to say, zero, nada, niet, rien.

5 out of 5

 

- Story:

The plot kick in right away and the tension is properly managed, the lows and highs flowing just as well as the description supporting them, all with a logical structure without any apparent plotholes.

5 out of 5

 

- Characters:

The MC is described as a thief and, throughout what I read, the author does a great job at building and reinforcing this vision, using details or side thoughts of the character to build him in a natural, yet comprehensive, way.

The second MC, for the tiny amount I’ve read about her, look really promising, by her own character and the interaction she and the thief could create.

5 out of 5

 

- Overall:

A perfectly balanced mix of preparation and action, Thief of Time is a great novel about a master thief following in instinct and stealing life itself from the hand of corrupted nobles.

When even the title of your thief novel is stolen, you can be sure this will be a treat.

5 out of 5

- Stray thoughts :

Seriously, why is this so underrated? This just doesn't have the followers it deserves

I mean, it’s just better than my own novel that hit Trending. I really don’t understand.

Okay but, seriously, this has the exact same name as one of Terry Pratchett, , which really made me laugh when I realised this XD

Welp, that need a proper Romance alright (tho nearly any novel need a proper Romance imo, but this one even more since there's already a proper dynamic that could be grown between the MCs I think)


Natural Alchemist

Sub-title: Give it a shot.

- Style:

Nothing to say about sentences and vocabulary, is neat and neutral.

In term of description, the author takes their time to build the world around the MC, be it physically or socially, which is a nice addition for those who like it. However, this comes at the price of slowing the story a bit.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Grammar:

Minor errors (1 per 2k words) that don’t impede the reading.

5 out of 5

 

- Story:

In part by style, in part by choice, the story is very slow, yet compelling to read because of its soft, ever-present tension that surrounds the starting mystery.

Other than that, the tropes used are very classical and, overall, classic is the good term to describe this story. It works, it’s not bad, but not extraordinary either, if surprisingly entertaining.

4 out of 5

 

- Characters:

As far as I got, the characters are interesting. Oh, the background pnjs and the like are standardly 1-dimensioned, which is normal on such short amount of word, but the MC and the alchemists are very interesting to read about, and the small switches in PoV help with that.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Overall:

Natural Alchemist is a bit of a surprise, as very simple and normal drops, with pretty neutral style, still succeed in being entertaining and relatively hooking. It may not be the pinnacle of writing, but give it a shot nonetheless, you may be surprised

4.5 out of 5

- Stray thoughts :

I really like the labour description and the world-building surrounding it, even if it’s quite classical.

 


War of Seasons

Emotions taking you to the throat

Sub-title: ...in a steady manner. Maybe too steady...

- Style:

Descriptions are efficient and well-written, and give just enough information to give life to the atmosphere while not cluttering the work, letting place for interesting dialogues and supporting them in their messages.

All in all, a pretty well-balanced and mastered style that wouldn’t make a ripple if published professionally, seeing its neutrality.

5 out of 5

 

- Grammar:

Nothing to say.

5 out of 5.

 

- Story:

The synopsis and overall tense tone of the story mixes perfectly with the themes aborded to create a harmonious, stressful read that really gets you in the head of the main character.

In term of actual plot, the premises are standards but well exploited and combined to form a brand-new, fresh story, and the way they’re treated is very interesting, giving it this “spark” needed for each story to be its own creation and not a copy-past of previous novels.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Characters:

The MC is well-defined by her past experience and, through simple yet logical action, efficiently characterised to give you a human being and not a robot reading a script.

Her internal struggles really put humanity in her, and you can’t avoid caring for her and her family legacy, even rooting for her, even if it felt like this hope is vain.

Besides the MC, the two other “main” characters are very interesting, one being non-binary and with implications in the story.

5 out of 5

 

- Overall:

A very interesting story with a sad undertone, War of Seasons give you a main character torn between her wishes and her family legacy, and pushed to navigate a bleak, war-plagued world, with all the implication this has. War Never Changes after all.

A gripping novel full of emotions

5 out of 5

 

- Stray thoughts :

This intro sure is a gut punch.

The rest is a gut punch too. If you’re searching for dramatic tension, this is your work.

For what I read so far, I would say that (imo, and since this section is straight thoughts, I can voice an opinion) the author walk the line of Darkness-induced Audience Apathy very thinly, so thinly, in fact, I shut myself down at what, the 5th chapter?

This shows that this novel can invest you emotionally, but I hope that there will be more, well, hope and happy things in the future. And I am hopeful, because this novel as neither Drama nor Tragedy as tags, so this mean there will be hope, I think ^^’

(Tho beware, I’m made of sugar so I’m quite weak to constant sadness, bleak future and suffering ^^’)


Everyone is a Superhero! Apart from me

Sub-title: ...with a very fun main duo.

- Style:

This is not performance-writing, the style is very flexible, organic and full of energy. The lack of rigidity may annoy some, but through the read you can feel this is the style of the author, the one they write naturally and with this breath that more artificial works lack.

4.5 out of 5

- Grammar:

Nothing to say.

5 out of 5

- Story:

The plot foundations are simple and the actual story takes it’s time to kick in, but all the build-up done before is useful because there’s a lot of information to absorb from the system and world-building.

Moreover, the time “before-plot” isn’t annoying downtime but exciting action, so it’s even less of a “problem”. It’s a bit battle-heavy but it’s a style on its own.

4.5 out of 5

- Characters:
The limited character cast let the author switch PoV with surprising ease and, doing so, give us a glimpse of each character’s inner working, which do marvel to involve us. Moreover, the opportunities created by the PoV switches are well-exploited to show the other characters in action, which is welcomed.

5 out of 5

- Overall:

A good, efficiently built litrpg that will entertain you like a good light novel. Not the best out there but good enough to give it a shot.

4.5 out of 5

- Stray thoughts :

BLUUUUUUUUE BOXEEEEEEES BLBVLBLBLBLBBL (read: Warning! Blue Boxes detected! Caution advised!)

Nice colour-coding.

I like the relationship of the two MCs, it’s fun to read ^^


The Harrowbird's Crown

Sub-title: ...overly confusing style.

 

- Style:

The style is convoluted and it’s easy to lose yourself in a sentence, making you read it again. And again. Sometimes I had to read one sentence three times to make sense of it.

The commas are used to a minimum where they should be used more.

Overall, though, the style is still fine and readable. In particular, the dialogues are quite well-made, with good accents, and the internal monologues are good.

4 out of 5

 

- Grammar:

Flawless

5 out of 5

 

- Story:

The world and the story start tiny, confined in a “speck of dust” as they say so rightly, but through storytelling, it let you see the potential of the future, how big both the world and the story can be and, if the start is a bit slow, it’s work for building solid foundations

4.5 out of 5

 

- Characters:

It’s interesting because, at first, you find your usual stereotype of characters but then, suddenly, those stereotypes turn very human and quite a bit more complex than you would have thought at first.

5 out of 5.

 

- Overall:

If the daunting style used by the author is more a rampart between you and the story than anything else, crossing this wall is worth your time and focus, as the story and characters behind it are very interesting and well-grounded, with a living, sprawling world.

5 out of 5

 

- Stray thoughts :

My rant about the difficult style isn’t personal. I liked the Silmarillion and its epic, old style, but that was because this style added something to the book.

Here, the convoluted style doesn’t really add anything to the story but confusion.

I think it’s the first time I’m ranting about the style of a book. Most of the time, it’s the story that is jarring but, here, the story is great.


The White Horde (Revised)

Sub-title: ...Do A complex magic pact that can warp the very core of your being, as they say.

- Style:

The style is simple and efficient, describing just what is needed. It’s not starved for details, as some stories can be, nor lose itself in pompous description extending like some swamp.

As for description vs dialogue, so far, the mix of the two is balanced, without one side having the upper hand on the other.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Grammar:

Nothing to say

5 out of 5

 

- Story:

The setting that is built right from the start of the first chapter is heavily inspired by Antiquity and, in particular, the Roman Empire and all the other societies that revolved around.

This very solid foundation gave birth to a simple story (anyone could dissect and discovery the simple trope used here) yet a powerful one, because it’s grounded and built from the base to the top without holes.

5+ out of 5

 

- Characters:

There are numerous characters, even just at the start of the story, which diminishes what I will call their “screen time” but each is a true little jewel that shines when the spotlight falls upon them

4.5 out of 5

 

- Overall:

Energetic, full of potential and hooking, The White Horde is a novel whose foundations are powerful, and each step built over it are well-planned, with a great cast at its heart, bizarre, old magic that gives it an exotic feeling, and a clear quest to drive the whole thing forward.

5 out of 5

 

- Stray thoughts :

I really like the “Antiquity Period” inspiration of the first chapter.

Very hooking.

I’m doing a ton of review swap and finding way too many good novels to read XD

Urgh, my heart.


The White Horde

Sub-title: ...Do A complex magic pact that can warp the very core of your being, as they say.

- Style:

The style is simple and efficient, describing just what is needed. It’s not starved for details, as some stories can be, nor lose itself in pompous description extending like some swamp.

As for description vs dialogue, so far, the mix of the two is balanced, without one side having the upper hand on the other.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Grammar:

Nothing to say

5 out of 5

 

- Story:

The setting that is built right from the start of the first chapter is heavily inspired by Antiquity and, in particular, the Roman Empire and all the other societies that revolved around.

This very solid foundation gave birth to a simple story (anyone could dissect and discovery the simple trope used here) yet a powerful one, because it’s grounded and built from the base to the top without holes.

5+ out of 5

 

- Characters:

There are numerous characters, even just at the start of the story, which diminishes what I will call their “screen time” but each is a true little jewel that shines when the spotlight falls upon them.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Overall:

Energetic, full of potential and hooking, The White Horde is a novel whose foundations are powerful, and each step built over it are well-planned, with a great cast at its heart, bizarre, old magic that gives it an exotic feeling, and a clear quest to drive the whole thing forward.

5 out of 5

 

- Stray thoughts :

I really like the “Antiquity Period” inspiration of the first chapter.

Very hooking.

I’m doing a ton of review swap and finding way too many good novels to read XD

The characters are very likeable imo ^w^

Urgh, my heart.


Wander West, in Shadow

Sub-title: Written by a modern author.

- Style:

Besides one problem, words repetition, the description-heavy style is mastered to a good level, creating environment and characters that are vivid, if slow to be presented. Some styles are quick, this one is a slow wave rolling over the sand, covering it thoroughly.

The mastery of the pacing through sentences is a true pleasure, as I haven’t spotted even one comma out of place. It’s still a non-professional book but it’s better than most.

In term of dialogues, nothing special. It’s smooth and sticks to the style of story written here.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Grammar:

Some minor errors hinder slightly the reading.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Story:

The story has very fairytale-heavy feel (as in, a true fairytale, not the manga/anime) which is refreshing in a place where Isekai Litrpg are kings and mild smut stories queens.

5 out of 5

 

- Characters:

The characters are classical takes of the fairytale style, both humans and symbols, be it the MC, the adjuvant or the enemies.

The dynamics between the main duo is interesting to follow, as they exchange knowledge and impression in a very genuine way.

The lack of originality may bother some, but it’s not bad per se, as it’s very well inscribed in the general theme.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Overall:

A very pure, in the true sense of the term, fairytale that somewhat grabs you and pulls you in for a refreshing experience. The prose support well the intent of the story and, if some tiny problems exist here and there, it is, overall, a very good experience. I recommend.

4.5 out of 5

 

- Stray thoughts :

This isn’t fantasy, this is “Merveilleux”, a specific style closer from Arthurians’ myths and old folks tales than from the Modern Fantasy kind.

I mean, this is so classical you can feel which trope is coming next, but it’s by no mean bad. It’s good, even.

The story put a smile on my face more than once. It’s a good sign ^w^


The Courting of Life and Death

Sub-title: It will directly hook you if you like this kind of stories.

 

- Style:

The style used is built around character actions and interaction, supporting them and giving them life in a very masterful manner. Unsurprising, as this is a professional book after all, but impressive nonetheless.

 

- Grammar:

Nothing to say.

 

- Story:

The story is woven as a punch in the guts and, once you’ve bitten the meat of it, it’s really romantic, in a very special way. The duality between life and death is very well used for the plot and the romance.

 

- Characters:

The way characters speak is very refined, giving an authentic touch to the noble status of the main character and the people around him.

This, coupled with impactful and powerful yet simple actions, produce characters that are interesting, fascinating even, and very human. In particular, the MC is very well written.

 

- Overall:

An extraordinary work of dark and gothic romance, The Courting of Life and Death is written with a mastery of contrast and duality rarely seen even in the professional realm, a powerful strength for the themes it’s based on.

 

- Stray thoughts :

The story is fast into the action, it’s very nice as it grabs you directly.

The first part of the first chapter are so sweet, it contains nearly as much sugar as my own work XD (which is a lot)

Wow. This first chapter.

I feel like my reading list keeps growing since I started doing swaps last week. I read so many good stories already, and this one is not an exception to this statement.

Note: I give 5 out of 5 to novels that are of a professional level. This story is at that level.


The Beast and The Swallow

A professional Romance on Royal Road.

Sub-title: But a slow-burn one. Read the whole novel, you would make yourself a favor.

- Style:

The style is extremely fluid. This novel reads like a breeze, yet is extremely vivid.

Even better than some professionaly published works I read. It’s good.

 

- Grammar:

Nothing to say.

 

- Story:

The story progress switfly, without any visible stich between the events, as it seems it has been very well planne before hand. Yet, just like the style, the story is very natural and vivid in its devellopment, very organic in a way.

 

- Characters:

The depictions of the character is extremely efficient and grasp you quickly.

Just like the depictions, character interaction is done efficiently, but their genuine nature, as well as the well-defined character of the people interacting, make for a very nice read.

 

- Overall:

A very well-written piece of fiction, The Beast and the Swallow succeed in creating a grim yet loveable world, with living people to which you will soon see yourself attached to.

I only read the first three chapters, but if the whole book is like that, it could already be published, and just by reading those three, I would gladly buy it.

 

- Stray thoughts :

I came here for the romance, but I must say everything grasped me. This go in my reading list.

I should do more swap with stories of this quality.

“Women shed tears, Jess. Men endure.” So I know this is completely correct from the PoV of the setting, but it always make me cringe to read something like that ^^’

The name of the MC, Lorelei, always reminds me of my visit to the actual Loreley, in Germany. It’s a nice, peaceful place. Great view, harsh yet good wind, and the folklore is very fun ^^