Cap'nSmurfy

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Soulforged Dungeoneer

A story that seems to be a parody of itself. The plot is non-existent, the characters are all cartoonishly exaggerated archetypes and the mc has essentially no personality. It's only redeeming feature is the lack of spelling errors.

The story opens with the mc having already obtained his abilities which he proceeds to explain over the next few chapters in a classic example of how to "tell not show". Even then there is virtually no context for these abilities or how they fit into the stories world. By chapter 10 the mc still has no idea what he's going to do and ,much like the story itself, is going nowhere fast. Would not recommend.


Katalepsis

Aggressively Gay Lovecraftian Horror

A not so schizophrenic, lesbian college student discovers her hallucinations are real. Set in an Eldritch horror universe, this fiction isn't for everyone but is a treat for those who enjoys it's themes. The author does an amazing job of describing the unknowable and the character interactions are a treat. The main character Heather is a very broken, damaged individual Magic is straight up dangerous, poorly understood and has decent odds of driving you insane. 


Heart of Cultivation

Set in an Xianxia style world this is a cultivation novel where the characters aren't raging man children. It keeps to the usual tropes for sure but the world building and socila interactions are kept to a high standard and reasoned out. Only downside is that it is a little slow and tends to drag on in a few places.


Parasite King

An interesting idea and premise but poor execution. Too much time spent on 'unique' formats and decoration, not enough on actually writing. A subpar story.


Incursions

Interesting premise and possibly interesting setting but 20 chapters in and still nothing of note has happened. Protagonist is kidnapped by mad scientist in the second chap and basically nothing happens after that. Just pointless filled with a scrap or two of world building. For such a great opening chapter it is really a very dissapointing read.


Super Minion

A unique, imaginative read

Written from the perspective from a non-human, ignorant protagonist, the writing style of Super Minion takes a bit of getting used to but is well worth the effort. It takes real talent to write from the viewpoint of a creature that, while intelligent, has abosultely no understanding of humanity or the world around it. The setting of super minion is higly original and very different from our everyday earth. We get to discover more about it organically with our protagonist rather than through unweildy info-dumps. We haven't even been giving a proper explanation of super powers in 15 chapters but most readers could probably give you a basic rundown nonetheless. All in all, Super minon is fun, rewarding story.


Esper:  Search for Power

Well written, but a chore to read

This a well thought out story, a lot of care has clearly gone into it. It's easy to see why it's so popular. That said, it is almost unbearably slow paced and verbose. There's just so much unnecessary details that we don't need to know.

In the opening paragraphs alone we have extensive detail about Dan's grandfather's accent, the legalities of telemarketing and the exact location of Earth. Parts of this like Dans's hypocrisy about law are relevant and funny but all of it could be cut down to size without loss of storytelling. We don't need to know the details of Dan's case, when "it was a complicated case, Dan's favourite" or something similar would achive the same result.

Stuff like this: "He grabbed his favorite mug, which had a picture of a baby lion on it and had been a gift from his Grandma, and filled it to the brim". I mean how much do we need to know about Dan's favourite mug if all things?


Threadbare

A Fun, Well-Crafted Story

A fun, well-written story with excellent world building. The system and the resulting world just make sense and you can see how things would work that way. If you're looking for an OP protagonist or amazingly rapid scaling this isn't the story for you. Our protagonist is a golem made from a Teddy Bear and the enemies faced are of an equally low standard. But if you ever wanted to read a story with a dungeon based entirely on Cat puns or cheer for a housecat and a sentient Teddy Bear as they overcome their differences to face a common foe (rats) as fellow warriors, then this is the fic for you.