Cap'nSmurfy

Cap'nSmurfy

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The World-ruling Dungeon

Honestly, this is just bad. The prose reads like a bad light novel, the premise is virtually non-existent and the sexual aspects are cringe-worthy. The mc doesn't have any goals at all. The plot, if you could call it that, just sort of happens to him. He doesn't like being a core but doesn't even express some kind of desire to change this. I wanted to like this going in but it just doesn't work.


Leveling up the World

So far this is an interesting enough story. The world building is intriguing, with fairly unique magic system. The story and characters are a bit flat, but reasons for this are possibly offered later in the story. There's enough here that its worth holding out for the mystery being resolved. 

Honestly my only real gripe is the downright strange comparisons. "The contrast was like between yellow and black (not black and white?)", "like scissors through silk" and "The jet of water burst on by him, reaching up to the sky like a truck of mentos falling into a cola lake". Its just odd and immersion breaking for me.


Sexy Space Babes

Undisguised, Sci-fi Smut (and I love it)

This is exactly what it says on the tin. Earth has been conquered by giant sexy space babes who want to bang our men. But it's surprisingly well written, with quality character interactions and world building that's both well developed and pleasantly conveyed. Nothing new here but it's an entertaining plot with a side of smut. Would recommend.


Soulforged Dungeoneer

A story that seems to be a parody of itself. The plot is non-existent, the characters are all cartoonishly exaggerated archetypes and the mc has essentially no personality. It's only redeeming feature is the lack of spelling errors.

The story opens with the mc having already obtained his abilities which he proceeds to explain over the next few chapters in a classic example of how to "tell not show". Even then there is virtually no context for these abilities or how they fit into the stories world. By chapter 10 the mc still has no idea what he's going to do and ,much like the story itself, is going nowhere fast. Would not recommend.


Katalepsis

Aggressively Gay Lovecraftian Horror

A not so schizophrenic, lesbian college student discovers her hallucinations are real. Set in an Eldritch horror universe, this fiction isn't for everyone but is a treat for those who enjoys it's themes. The author does an amazing job of describing the unknowable and the character interactions are a treat. The main character Heather is a very broken, damaged individual Magic is straight up dangerous, poorly understood and has decent odds of driving you insane. 


Heart of Cultivation

Set in an Xianxia style world this is a cultivation novel where the characters aren't raging man children. It keeps to the usual tropes for sure but the world building and socila interactions are kept to a high standard and reasoned out. Only downside is that it is a little slow and tends to drag on in a few places.


Parasite King

An interesting idea and premise but poor execution. Too much time spent on 'unique' formats and decoration, not enough on actually writing. A subpar story.


Incursions

Interesting premise and possibly interesting setting but 20 chapters in and still nothing of note has happened. Protagonist is kidnapped by mad scientist in the second chap and basically nothing happens after that. Just pointless filled with a scrap or two of world building. For such a great opening chapter it is really a very dissapointing read.


Super Minion

A unique, imaginative read

Written from the perspective from a non-human, ignorant protagonist, the writing style of Super Minion takes a bit of getting used to but is well worth the effort. It takes real talent to write from the viewpoint of a creature that, while intelligent, has abosultely no understanding of humanity or the world around it. The setting of super minion is higly original and very different from our everyday earth. We get to discover more about it organically with our protagonist rather than through unweildy info-dumps. We haven't even been giving a proper explanation of super powers in 15 chapters but most readers could probably give you a basic rundown nonetheless. All in all, Super minon is fun, rewarding story.


Esper:  Search for Power

Well written, but a chore to read

This a well thought out story, a lot of care has clearly gone into it. It's easy to see why it's so popular. That said, it is almost unbearably slow paced and verbose. There's just so much unnecessary details that we don't need to know.

In the opening paragraphs alone we have extensive detail about Dan's grandfather's accent, the legalities of telemarketing and the exact location of Earth. Parts of this like Dans's hypocrisy about law are relevant and funny but all of it could be cut down to size without loss of storytelling. We don't need to know the details of Dan's case, when "it was a complicated case, Dan's favourite" or something similar would achive the same result.

Stuff like this: "He grabbed his favorite mug, which had a picture of a baby lion on it and had been a gift from his Grandma, and filled it to the brim". I mean how much do we need to know about Dan's favourite mug if all things?