Well, it certainly can't be said that Kane doesn't know how to write a hateable character. Boy, do I hate Kevin in the beginning. But, and this is as of chapter 7, I'm growing to find his antics more entertaining. It's a bit rough to like him, but if you read the story like it's meant to be read, with him as the protagonist, you can kinda accept that he's a jerk, and move on. Though he perceives his situation as naught but a dream for a while, I'm convinced he's become aware that it's his new reality, and that he's merely protecting himself from that harsh truth.
Grammar is okay. There are some mistakes from time to time, as well as a harsh jump from past to present tense narrative, but I'm discussing it with Kane and it will hopefully be amended.
I like the story, though I may be biased because I know a little more of the world than anybody reading it right now, but since it will all become clear eventually, I'm going to use my knowledge to rate it. I give it five stars for the interesting lore and unique Tower Core idea. The way it's written has you asking plenty of questions, and while it answers some early, the big ones are keeping me locked in. Can't wait for next chapter, that's for sure.
I gave this story a five star in character score because of how well the interaction of Jeffery and Kevin is written. Kevin perfectly reflects a real Kevin I know, and Jeffery is such an innocent little guy. Poor thing has to suffer like this. But I'm sure the two will become better friends, as is inevitable in situations like they're in.
Style-wise, I think Kane keeps to the narrative format fine, and his story's quite humorous, so I won't knock any points off here.
Overall, if you're struggling to get through the first couple chapters, or don't like Kevin, keep in mind, he's an idiot. Enjoy the ride.
Well I can tell from the first chapters (up to 0.5) that this story is a hit! There are a few points in the chapters where I've spotted a few typos, but nobody is immune to those little scourges.
[Insert dungeon name here] is a core that was inspired by the ring he adorned to make his dungeon sssssssssnake themed. So five stars, because snakes are awesome. Though ironically, the nameless dungeon core has named his followers.
And it's weird that the author can convey the personalities of simple creatures like rats and snakes with no dialogue. Impressive, to say the least. I've grown attached to the characters in the short amount of time I've known them, and I'll definitely be favoriting this one.
If you're a fan of in-site references, ingenuity, and originality, then this is the dungeon core novel for you. A good start for anybody who hasn't read a dungeon core novel before, too, since it's explained well enough for both beginners and veterans! It's also very well paced, so you don't find yourself getting bored at all. In fact, it makes me want to write my own novel... I'll be back!
Yes, this novel is a fabulous creation. Even if you are unfamiliar with the game (as am I), you'll still be able to understand it. It's fantastic. From here on out, all my time will be dedicated to trolling Sara in discord, and you should too. (after reading, of course)
I love Fang. Chairman Meow is certainly a better name, but Fang doesn't like to be called that. And I respect that. And I fear him. So I'll refer to him as Fang. Being quite the deadly creature, Fang inspires fear in all his enemies, and admiration in everybody else. He is perfectly aware of his superiority, and represents my old house cat near-perfectly.
I'd have to say that the story definitely caught me with its title, and the story is absolutely fabulous. Four and a half stars to grammar just because I noticed a few errors, but I know I always miss those, myself. And they're not too prominent, so it really has no bearing on the rating.
Five stars for the unique idea and original character, as well as how much it makes me miss my old feline friend.