So I would recommend this story if you are into fantasy romance novels. It is heavy on the romance. The story does a good job keeping you on your toes by hiding the bigger twists in the shadows of the obvious twists. Has good pacing overall, which is something I know a lot of RR stories, even the popular ones, struggle with.
The one thing I did struggle with was Meya, but she does experience a lot of character growth overtime. For most of the story, she had been selfish and even hypocritical at times, which is why it was very welcome that in the later chapters some serious self-reflection occurred after other characters called her out on her bs
I made it to Chapter 40 before throwing in the towel for this one because of all the hype surrounding this story. Victor is the average 30 year old something guy from an isekai story, who was a virgin in his previous life and is now looking to "breed" to have no regrets this time around (an ongoing joke throughout the story). This small snippet should be enough for you to stereotype him and understand his drives and the type of character he is. What is supposed to be a reversal on the ever popular trope falls flat for me and makes for a character that doesn't feel real in anyway. He is annoying and replaceable, but in the end, is really just a name with three defining traits.
Unfortunately, Vanquier doesn't see him that way with Victor being his chief of staff, the most important one of his minions. The premise for this story is unique and draws you in at first, but that glimmer fades rather quickly. While Vanquier is much more interesting, his character can be reduced to the greedy and arrogant dragon that values his pile of coins. He was actually starting to get some character development after 30+ chapters, but it wasn't enough for me to keep reading.
Maybe the issue is that I didn't find this story funny unlike many others. The premise is interesting and somewhat amusing, but unlike other reviewers, I never once laughed. I came here after reading 1300+ pages of Perfect Run (also written by this author), and it appears writing this story gave him the practice to make that diamond. The Perfect Run is a 5/5, and the humor in that novel is fantastic. So, maybe the jokes get better later on in this one.
This story is phenomenal, and you should seriously just read it. I tried picking up this story several times, but never made it past chapter six or so because I just couldn't imagine reading several hundred pages with this main character character archetype. The problem is that I've seen it done wrong so many times such as in Vaudevillian, so I subconsciously wasn't expecting any real character development to happen. I was expecting a static character that is put into at first new scenarios that quickly become repetitive as the story loses focus. The characters really grow on you in this story and Quicksave is no exception: he will grow on you and his character growth arc is great.
So this story follows all the magic school tropes to a tee but is still great. There are the typical familiar character archetypes: what you're thinking right now is almost certainly correct. Regardless, this familiarity doesn't inhibit my enjoyment of the genre. If you like magic school stories, this one is a great pick. I do wish some of the characters diverged a little from their archetypes--specifically the rival characters, but it doesn't severely impact my enjoyment of the story.
Really enjoying this so far. I gave this story a 5 review before the rewrite, and it's even better now. One issue potential readers might have with this story is the MC being a Gary Stu, but I would say 90% of popular RR stories feature one anyway. And unlike other Gary Stus, who suffer from poor characterization, Dimitry makes for a fun reading experience. No other complaints, and even that complaint isn't really a downside for me. The side characters and world building are great. The pacing is a breath of fresh air with so many stagnant plots here on RR.
So this is really good. RoyalRoad quality seems to be improving every year. Grammar is fine. I knew based on the synopsis this would either be terrible or an awesome addition to RoyalRoad--thankfully it's the latter. MC is rational but also not a robot. The side characters all have a lot of personality and are both memorable and distinct (Angelina all the way).
The first few chapters have a forced quality that is hard for me to describe due to their purpose as a info-dump where he is writing in his journal to his semi-sentient journal. Things get smoother once the loop starts. I love loop stories, and if you do as well, there's no reason why you shouldn't read this one.
Some of the explanations for the way the magic works are confounding and pseudoscience-y in multiple paragraphs of nonsense. If you're OCD about having to understand every sentence in a book with perfect clarity, this isn't the book for you. I know this sounds like I'm being critical of the system, but on the contrary, I like the soft elements and the lengthy multi paragraph essays on the way the magic works. I'm not able to discern all of it, but I can understand the general jists. Less info dumps would be better, but I understand they are necessary when developing complex magic systems. This is a hard magic system with soft elements.
The main character is a lot of fun and a rarity in published works (less so on RR). He is an intelligent, bookish guy, who is a magician at heart. He doesn't want to learn how to punch things harder, or learn how to become another magic swordsman in the already huge swathe of them on RR. He is a true mage that develops his own creative spells to handle the brutes. I like this.
The side characters have a lot of potential for development, and the author does a good job with them playing off the xianxia over-the-top tropes without it being excessive.
Never any dull moments. The story continues to unfold at a good pace. Interesting events happen that keep the plot rolling. The only thing worse than a story with zero plot development are when the driving plot events are frustrating and just plain bad.
This story doesn't stagnate with the MC just hunkering down to cultivate for endless amounts of chapters. I think what this story does right is that there is always something interesting going on while he's practicing his magic. For example, instead of training alone inside a mountain cave for weeks until the next breakthrough like in some novels, he's actively involved with training his little apprentice into teasing her helicopter father for him WHILE he is practicing his craft. The dialogue can be pretty funny at times. Small bouts of isolative training would be okay, but I dislike when stories have the huge slog where we as the readers have to grind chapters for them to grind their experience points/cultivation.
I like his writing style. I HATE when books become reduced to American Colloquialisms. This story doesn't have that problem. Beyond that, I'm not qualified to comment on anything regarding style.
The grammar is good. I'm not an editor, so I can't really go too into detail here. I can say grammar won't impair your enjoyment of the story.
Ignore the prologue. Read to chapter 8 before making a decision on dropping it.
I almost dropped the story after reading the prologue and first few chapters. The prologue holds implications that aren't self contained because we know by its sombre tone how certain relationships probably play out in a negative way. DON'T READ THE PROLOGUE.
The story has a slow start that really ramps up around chapter 8, and boy, the quality really starts to shine through. The slow start has an excellent pay off as it increases the overall investment in the story. If you like MoL, you will almost certainly like this story after making it past the first few initial chapters.
Here is the quick rundown on what makes the story so good. The new take on the 'time loop' genre is interesting, and it keeps the story interesting. So far, the time loop operates like the check points in a video game. Honestly, this approach is refreshing, and it also keeps the story from being a totally foregone conclusion. There can't be a "perfect" run so to speak, and keeps some of the suspense that's normally not there in a time loop story (assuming you don't read the prologue).
The MC is also great. He is flawed, and his development in capabilities and personal growth is enjoying to read about. He's also rational without being a sociopath. The story seems to hint at a potential romance, but I have a feeling it'll be more akin to traditional fantasy novels like the Name of the Wind rather than RR Harems. The prospect of a story featuring a light romance like in traditional fantasy novels is a plus.
This story is way better than it has any right to be. I'm so happy I picked this up despite being extremely offput by it being Pokémon fan fiction. It is very much at minimum an 8/10, and it is well worth the read. Trust me, this story isn't trash like you probably think it is.