If you have time, review my story : Cold Sun https://royalroadl.com/fiction/17617/cold-sun
It's only three chapter now but I would appreciate if you point out characters and background pacing, to be sure it doesn't start in bad rythm.
Thank you for your time!
(i like it kinky)
I really need a brutally harsh review, please
Title: Secret of the Two Kings
Genre: Historical Fiction
Have a look at mine when you get a chance.
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