How to write a novel like Primal Hunter

#1
It took me much longer than the article on Paranoid Mage - which even the author described as neat in a youtube interview 👀 - to write this one. The reason is that the redundancy prompted a much larger presence of quotes in it. I had to cut around 4,000+ words from it, and it's still a behemoth. 
If you want to read my 10,000 words analysis of the beginning of Primal Hunter, you can find it here!
If you find any part that you believe is wrong/offensive, please report it to me. I was extremely tired when I finished this and even after two re-reads of it, I couldn't figure out if I left some personal comments or if I worded something in the wrong way. 

Re: How to write a novel like Primal Hunter

#3
Hello again. This time you did great, but there are a lot things to improve.

Again, you didn't fully brought out the topic's core which should been used as an strong opener to make things more clear (it looks clear when you already know of it, but it wouldn't for other people). You also strayed a lot from your main topic, which was how to write something similar, and instead ended up in full blown analysis of why first chapters are so good. Despite that, you did a great work so I'll just fill in the few gaps.

Power fantasy is the core of Primal Hunter and countless other top LitRPGs. It entertains readers by providing a sense of satisfaction and superiority, and achieves it through various means. Beware of Chickens for example pulls this off with slice of life awesomness with some violence as ocasional refreshment.

Primal Hunter on other hand achieves this through baiting out emotional investment and fullfiling it. The character is relatable, sure, but it's the situation he's in and small stings that brings out the reader's frustration and popcorn urge for acknowledgement/competence. Something which power fantasy is all about.

While trying to replicate this method, one needs to keep in mind that there are limits, like securing a strong footing in reader's head not requiring a full blown misery porn. Primal Hunter starts off with a situation that everyone could imagine and probably went through, then steps up the game and releases the steam from kettle from time to time so it doesn't blow up (readers having enough and dropping the story).

You also didn't give pointers when it comes to structure of later chapters, and what keeps readers glued through that behemoth of word count. I can't fill that in because I dropped PH long ago.

Anyway, Zoghart will probably will have a good chuckle at how we analyse his work bit too much. If I remember correctly, he said that he wrote this as hobby that happen to work out (those bloody english natives *spits sideways*)

Re: How to write a novel like Primal Hunter

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InfantryTerminator Wrote: Anyway, Zoghart will probably will have a good chuckle at how we analyse his work bit too much. If I remember correctly, he said that he wrote this as hobby that happen to work out (those bloody english natives *spits sideways*)

Zogarth started with a monster backlog because he wanted to try and go pro with it while working his day job. Also, I'm fairly sure he's not English, but Danish. 

InfantryTerminator Wrote: Despite that, you did a great work so I'll just fill in the few gaps.

My man, I swear you are a hell of an arrogant guy. 
And you didn't really fill in any gap. You are just painting a very broad picture without explaining anything concrete.