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#21MyMixTapeHasAWordCount Wrote: Gotta admit to also feeling the need to touch my first line up (ignoring the prologue of course) and really liking the result.Had the same feeling after looking at mine again - in the context of this post.
Quote:A dream is lost before it can even be remembered, thus Seth can only open his eyes to the sound of a deep thud ringing his ears.
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#22
Book 1: "The sun ascended from the depths of the sea, welcomed by the sad cries of seagulls."
Book 2: "Thick smoke rose to the sky in tall, wavy columns."
Book 3: "For hours, strong gales raged over Limris."
And those three quotes are the best example of why one should not judge a story by its first sentence.
Book 2: "Thick smoke rose to the sky in tall, wavy columns."
Book 3: "For hours, strong gales raged over Limris."
And those three quotes are the best example of why one should not judge a story by its first sentence.
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#23
Here is a teaser for the prologue of book two, mainyl because I shared the first sentence of the current one already in another post.
"Broken eggs weigh the most."
Which, now that I think about has similarities with the first prologue:
"Kalvin pulled his bounty closer to his chest, cradling the large egg like a mother her child, or a thief his bag of gold."
"Broken eggs weigh the most."
Which, now that I think about has similarities with the first prologue:
"Kalvin pulled his bounty closer to his chest, cradling the large egg like a mother her child, or a thief his bag of gold."
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#24
For Rhett Remington: The Monster Bounty Hunter I really wanted to set Rhett in her element. So of course she is stuck sitting in her car on a stake out.
“I’m cracking a window,” I reached for the slider, gagging at the rotten smell.
“Boy, that shit stinks,” I said as Marv stuffed another Kimchi-Cheese fry into his greasy maw and looked confused.
“You don’t like fries, Rhett?” he said around a mouth full of grease, then grabbed his soda and slurped loudly.
“I don’t like rotten cabbage. Why would you eat that crap? For that matter, you had it for lunch, why would you do it twice?”
The stakeout had been a disaster.
“I’m cracking a window,” I reached for the slider, gagging at the rotten smell.
“Boy, that shit stinks,” I said as Marv stuffed another Kimchi-Cheese fry into his greasy maw and looked confused.
“You don’t like fries, Rhett?” he said around a mouth full of grease, then grabbed his soda and slurped loudly.
“I don’t like rotten cabbage. Why would you eat that crap? For that matter, you had it for lunch, why would you do it twice?”
The stakeout had been a disaster.
Rhett Remington: The Monster Bounty Hunter (Game lit) |
The morning after blowing the brains out of a half-dressed Succubus, I woke up on my couch with a full time hacker and part time Lyft drive making me coffee, a Court Bailiff at my door with a contract I can't refuse, and a whole lot of unanswered questions.
As it turns out all those monsters from the spooky stories are real. From your blood sucking vampires to the occasional big foot, there are a thousand different things that go bump in the night, and most of them want to kill you. Officially a secret, some of them are as evil as Satan himself, others just want a long-pig dinner, but either way you can be sure if you see one, it won't end well.
On the other side is the the S.C.P Bureau, the people who secure, contain, and protect the mundane society from the worst of them, or at least that’s what’s on their business cards. Then there are contractors, the Bounty Hunters, and that’s where me and my new team come in as their newest recruits, but if I fail the paranormal interview by fire, I die.
Welcome to my world.
I’m Rhett Remington, The Monster Bounty Hunter.
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#26
"Mariana shot off from her resting place when I opened the door."
Then the paragraph follows with both of them falling downstairs and dying.
Then the paragraph follows with both of them falling downstairs and dying.
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#27
I am going to fail this one, my first sentence is boring as heck:
" Whether mortal or not, anyone could find magical creatures wandering the dense forest of Faeriewood - a dark landscape at Tarsag'Itus with a starry night hovering between branches and leaves. "
" Whether mortal or not, anyone could find magical creatures wandering the dense forest of Faeriewood - a dark landscape at Tarsag'Itus with a starry night hovering between branches and leaves. "
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#28
The first words in the chapter aren't really a sentence tbh. My real sentences is:
"In the boundless white of Vexal Prep's standard EC-room, Val witnessed the gleam in her opponent's gaze and turned tail."
They say start with a question-provoking sentence so...
"In the boundless white of Vexal Prep's standard EC-room, Val witnessed the gleam in her opponent's gaze and turned tail."
They say start with a question-provoking sentence so...
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#29
I wasn’t born anywhere.
*New* Post-Writathon Chapter Release schedule will now be every Friday, Saturday, and Sunday!
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#30
For as long as there have been Partisans, our stories have been shared across the six territories of Auditoria.
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#31
Book 2 of 'A Nation of Distances' starts rather depressing:
'Michael sat on the unmade bed and stared at the wall, his heart full of shame and despair.'
'Michael sat on the unmade bed and stared at the wall, his heart full of shame and despair.'
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#32
"The capital of the Izan Imperium, Izan’Larai, was often considered a crowning jewel of commerce, trade, and beauty, beyond compare."
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#33Quote:An inn sat on a small, wooded hill right outside a town by the name of Salcret.
It had been getting harder not to feel lonely around the Hare’s Retreat lately. Harold had inherited the inn just six months ago, when his father passed away.
The first sentence doesn't say much at all, and I really doubt anybody drops it THAT fast, haha. Unless they were going to anyway.
That said... 3 lines? Yeah, Time to unfollow if it sux!!!!
As you can see I try to set up the location and character we're seeing right off the bat, while including some background and its influence on him.
https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/55869/rise-of-the-business-class
A LitRPG Fantasy adventure story about a Guild, friendships and magic!
A LitRPG Fantasy adventure story about a Guild, friendships and magic!
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#34
I have gone back and forth over my story start more than once. I think I am settling in on the idea of starting two years in, instead of at the very beginning. Which makes the first line--
"The bag squished and bulged out from beneath the seat with every bump of the cart over the road stones, but thankfully it had not yet leaked."
I am still not sure on it. But that is where the draft stands at the moment.
"The bag squished and bulged out from beneath the seat with every bump of the cart over the road stones, but thankfully it had not yet leaked."
I am still not sure on it. But that is where the draft stands at the moment.
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#35
Here goes:
Dry, stale air gently brushed her cheeks as Anne slowly walked down the dark concrete corridor. The dead silence was only disturbed by the soft crackle of dried blood beneath her feet.
Technically it's two sentences... bite me. :P
Dry, stale air gently brushed her cheeks as Anne slowly walked down the dark concrete corridor. The dead silence was only disturbed by the soft crackle of dried blood beneath her feet.
Technically it's two sentences... bite me. :P
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#37
The flesh of his brother was the sweetest he had ever tasted.
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#38
"Wake up, dear. We have things to do."
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#39
“Tell me a story,” Eleanor says, but I can’t think of one--at least not one with a happy ending.
From Rising Star All The Lonely People.
From Rising Star All The Lonely People.
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#40
“Missy,” Jeremy Thornton called from the other room, “Where are you going Mellissa?”
”Santa Stories is really a bad name. SS. Anyways. ST Santa tales. Which is a spin on “tails, “tall tales” and other “tale” ideas.”
“The skeleton in that scarecrow,” John heard an elderly woman say as he walked by a cemetery, then he thought ‘A lilac dress… I should know this…’ brushing the feeling away with “dejavu” he continued his walk through the dusty road looking for ‘...something.’
”Santa Stories is really a bad name. SS. Anyways. ST Santa tales. Which is a spin on “tails, “tall tales” and other “tale” ideas.”
“The skeleton in that scarecrow,” John heard an elderly woman say as he walked by a cemetery, then he thought ‘A lilac dress… I should know this…’ brushing the feeling away with “dejavu” he continued his walk through the dusty road looking for ‘...something.’
