I don't need a review swap but.
Anything is appreciated even yes or no to these questions I've been wondering, please.
Is the story going to fast-paced?
Do the character at least make sense?
Can you follow the story so far?
Do the sentences feel complicated?
If I can get a little bit of critique it would be very appreciated thank you guys.
Quote:What's worse than being blind, deaf, and mute? Not much, but follow along as
the main character(name your character here) obtains a legacy (What does 'obtain a legacy even mean? Sounds like "do good things so people will remember him," but then the next line makes me realize I have no idea what's going on) to make use of his senses, seeing the world and interacting with it for the first time. AtAll the while, he raises raisinghis powers in order to keep his acquired senses from being stolen. (can you add a short bit about who or what wants to steal his powers?)
What's worse than being blind, deaf, and mute? Not much but follow along as Lang, our protagonist, is chosen to obtain the stone of beginnings and is able to make use of his lost senses to interact with the world. All the while raising his powers in order to keep his acquired senses from being stolen from those who wish to become the beginning, The Observer.
Does that seem better?
> Not much, but follow along (add a comma after the introductory phrase)
> our protagonist, (we know he's our protagonist, because you're talking about him in the blurb)
> Stone of Beginnings (this sounds like an important artifact, so should be capitalized)
> from being stolen