The Call to Adventure - Taking a Razor to Stumbling into the Plot
General Background: Whosoever first touches the Orb of Hero Magic will become the Hero. (This is the fundamental step that must occur for the hero's journey to begin)
Scenario 1: The Orb falls from the sky in the middle of the night, splashing down into the well of a small village (naturally). Throughout the morning, as villagers draw water from the well, the Orb bobs about the water but is never quite caught. Then, as young Shelby fetches her bucket of water, she catches the Orb and, upon touching it, becomes the Hero.
Scenario 2: The Orb falls from the sky in the middle of the night into the woods far away from the village and is taken by goblins as their new shiny. Young Shelby goes and fetches her bucket of water from the well. On her way back, she runs into slow Janet, whose son fell ill last night and can't run the daily package of sandwiches to the hunter's outpost outside the village. Janet asks for Shelby to do her a favor and run the sandwiches out to the outpost, and Janet will take the budget to Shelby's mother. Shelby runs the packages out to the outpost, but while there, a huge horde of barbarian horsemen come through the valley and attack the village, and then turn towards the outpost. The adult hunters prepare to fight back, but have Janet escape through a child-sized irrigation ditch until she gets to the edge of the woods and can flee inside to escape. She considers traveling east to the next village, but a huge storm is approaching her from that direction, so she runs west to try and find a cave to hide in. She finds the goblin cave, but they are all out on a hunt. Recognizing the threat, she prepares to leave but suddenly catches a glint flashing off the Orb. Despite having no current use for a glinting object, she quickly enters the cave and grabs the Orb, becoming the Hero.
Now, personally, I am far more inclined to Scenario 1. The way it is set up, somebody will become the hero. It could have been Shelby, or Janet, or Bob, or Alice, but there is no doubt that a hero will exist and thus the story can occur (and it's just that in this particular universe, it's Shelby). In order words, while the odds that Shelby became the Hero were small, the odds that somebody became the Hero was near 1.
My problem with Scenario 2 is that it's built upon a long sequence of improbable events. Janet's son had to get sick. Shelby had to pass Janet at just the right time so that it wasn't someone else. The village had to be attacked out of the blue. The sandwich delivery person had to not be an adult so they had a reason not to stay and fight. The sandwich delivery person had to be small enough to sneak out the hunter's post. The storm had to appear just right to blow the person far off track. The person had to be a poor enough tracker to approach a goblin's cave. The goblins had to be missing or the person would be dinner. And the person had to be lucky enough to see the glint and stupid enough to go after a glint when basic survival is at stake. Yes, the odds of Shelby becoming the Hero are low here too (and I'll even generously agree they are the same odds as the well). But in contrast to Scenario 1, in Scenario 2, almost no one other than Shelby (and it has to be Shelby with a lot of luck) could have become the Hero. A single flap of the butterfly's wing, and the Hero wouldn't come into existence for a decade or a century or however long it takes for the Orb of Hero Magic (now a goblin possession) to intersect with a human.
So, those are my thoughts. What about you?
It depends on how its written, and the kind of story it is, but I likely wouldn't read either.
Scenario 1 is just plain uninspired. There are so many ways you could go about having a hero discover their purpose, but to have a literal hero orb fall from the sky? That really sets the tone for the kind of lazy, generic story this will be.
Scenario 2 is the kind of thing we see more often, but that doesn't make it any better. Like you said, a series of improbable events. While such a thing isn't rare in fantasy, I would prefer to avoid it, especially when it's so blatant.
luda305 Wrote: The Orb falls from the sky in the middle of the night into the woods far away from the village and is taken by goblins as their new shiny.
sounds like the goblins are the hero if you ask me.
really though, the orb seems like it comes from a higher power so I would say it would make more sense for it to land in a well. If I make an orb that designates a hero to save the people I look out for, I am definitely chucking it into the middle of a village, or the capital if I am feeling less lucky.
I like very contrived sequences of events as much as the next person, but if it is for an important thing like showing the hero's destiny, sometimes simplicity is better.
But yeah, if it's going to be that convoluted just make them the chosen one and go.
Or make it so that the orb was in the goblin cave for years before it was found putting fate in jeopardy (it's the gods fault they put it in such a trash spot). Like people find all sorts of unlikely nonsense, but it takes time, so as long as it's not quite on such an extreme time line like in the example it could be fine.
I'm not a writer though so eh
Like lets say the orb is found in the well by someone else, but no one touches it. It's brought to the village elder/mayor/sheriff who sends a message to whoever is 'in charge', rumor's begin to spread as to what the nature of the orb is, but they now won't let anyone touch it as they wait for the 'envoy' to pick it up. Goblins then attack the village to retrieve said orb (finding out due to traitor/spy/etc.), and then young Shelby ends up in a situation where she can either run away and save herself, or grab the orb to with the intent of preventing the goblins from getting it, thereby becoming the hero.
Although if the random circumstances is the goal to the beginning of the plot, this entire line of reasoning was a waste of time :P If randomness is required, frankly I don't believe any amount of events needing to take place before they retrieve it is too farfetched, but maybe make the catalyst for that series of events based on a decision Shelby makes, even something as simple as she made the decision to go to the well to draw water when she had the option not to.
But yeah even in those scenarios I think the main character needs to make an active choice of some sort, that leads to them becoming the hero. I think a good story is all about a character dealing with the consequences of their own actions.
For example, Shelby is hiding from goblins that are drawing near her village. She have several options; she can run away, she could call for the guard, or she could ambush the goblins. She doesn't have any weapons on her, but that odd orb she found in her bucket and was on her way to take to the wizard (because only a moron would touch random magical objects) looks really heavy and solid, and she's got a good throwing arm. The leader goblin is nearby and she would be in a much better position if she could smash its head in. She picks up the orb.
Now, she COULD run. She COULD stay hiding. She COULD call for the village guards. But she chose to fight. Becoming the realms one and only chosen hero is not a logical consequence to deciding to smash in the head of a goblin, but it IS a direct consequence of a choice she made.
Scenario 1: The gods need anybody, really any random person, because the Hero Orb will give that person the power they need. It may be the 3-year-old kid fetching water for mommy (the Hero Orb will make them grow into a strong and powerful teenager, making them easily learn all the skills a hero needs in the meantime. Condition: hero is not needed instantly) or the 80-year-old senior with his rheumy joints (the Hero Orb will give them back their vitality/youth. They might already have the necessary skills, or the Orb will awaken the desire to live an adventurous life so they can learn them). Shelby is RandomVillager#38416.
Scenario 2: The gods need somebody special. Very special, because being a hero is not for everybody. Only very very unusual circumstances will lead that special person to the orb, weeding out the weak, the cowards, the stupid. The 3-year-old kid will not do, too young to go out into the woods. The 80-year-old senior will not do, his times of leaving the village are long past. Only Shelby has what it takes: A hero helps those who need help, Shelby takes up Janet's quest; A hero is physically able enough to make a trip to the wilderness, Shelby can run to the outpost; A hero needs to be ressourceful, Shelby knows a cave is better that death by lightning; A hero needs to be smart, staying in a goblin cave as a youth is dangerous so Shelby leaves; A hero needs curiosity, Shelby sees a strange glinting object and decides yes, I will take that with me (not smart enough to keep your hands off strange orbs, apparently); A hero needs courage,
Both versions are okay, but these two stories will be completely different. In scenario 1, Shelby finding the Orb is chapter 1, paragraphs 1-4, now the hero is decided, start of story. In scenario 2, Shelby finding the Orb is the prologue or first few chapters. The author is later able to do worldbuilding by telling "Interlude 1: Snotnose Finds a Shiny", "Interlude 2: A Day in the Life of Glitterwing, Butterfly Extraordinaire", "Interlude 3: Urgu's Rites of Passage" (Part 1: The Divination. Part 2: The Raid on Shelbyville. Part 3: Attack on the Outpost & Urgu's First Kill. Part 4: Victorious Return & Becoming a Man Ceremony"), "Interlude 4: Where's my Shiny?" (Snotnose leaves the cave alone in search of his missing shiny and becomes Shelby's first kill). The Life of Urgu could even be a complete book with the last chapter "Fighting the Hero" (famous War Leader Urgu's death many years later, when the Hero finally ends the Barbarian Wars), or a prequel book (Urgu, who decided to go on a journey after becoming a man, meets the fresh hero and joins Shelby's party).
Why do you think scenario 2 is worse? It clearly isn't, it's just different. If the gods suddenly need a hero at this moment, they will use scenario 1. If the gods need a hero somewhere in the future, either next week or in a hundred years, they can use scenario 2. If there are no gods, Fate will use scenario 2 and set each little prerequisite subplot in motion at the right time, days and weeks and years before the start of the story.
Sereminar Wrote: Or make it so that the orb was in the goblin cave for years before it was found putting fate in jeopardy
Maybe. Or it was in the cave for years because Fate has been planning this for a loooong time, instead of doing everything in the last minute.
luda305 Wrote: My problem with Scenario 2 is that it's built upon a long sequence of improbable events
Read up on the life stories of some people, there are some really crazy sequences of improbable events (not everything might be true, but there are enough verified ones). How now -famous people got where they are ("was working a dead-end job, didn't feel well and left early, met a certain person on the bus, we talked, they later introduced me to the producer/agent"), how people survived the holocaust ("gestapo guy was a birder and was distracted because a rare bird flew past so he followed the bird instead of looking into the shed I was hiding in"), or fighting in wars (the famous "bullet caught by bible/grandpa's old watch in the front pocket"). With 7-8 billion of people on this world, at least a handful won 1 in 1000 chances three times in a row.
I read a book as a youth from my parents' friend's dad and his time as a soldier, it left a mark. If I remember correctly: 1) It was winter, they were on a train. Author had a warm coat and took pity on two privates who were freezing because they only had thin jackets, he let them take his place in the warm cabin at the front of the train (he was an officer so he had the good spot on the train) *beat* Train hits a mine, front of train destroyed, privates dead, author survived. 2) Everybody sitting in their foxholes, enemy tanks arrive, bullets everywhere. Other soldier does something (don't remember what), author runs to that guy's foxhole, now two people in a one-man foxhole *beat* shell directly hits original foxhole, unsurvivable, author survived. 3) Later, now POW, threw away his officer insignia because rumor that enemy will kill officers. Grunts don't get much food, everybody gets weaker, officers are treated better and get more food. Finally goes to the guards, says "I'm an officer but I can't prove it, please don't let me starve". Guard officer comes, turns out he was their prisoner some while ago and remembers that the author was the guy who let him escape instead of executing him like the orders said. Author survives.
There are many stories like that. Of course, for every crazy survival story there are 999 people who did not survive. But those that survive are the ones who can tell their tale. They are the same ones who might be called heroes later, even though it was mostly luck. Janet's boy in scenario 2 is one of the 999, he's dead from barbarian attack now and will only be remembered in half a sentence of Shelby's prologue (and their neighbor will not even get that much). Hero = survivorship bias. Five years ago in another barbarian raid, the other potential hero took a different turn after running from the outpost and was killed by barbarians/lightning/goblins.