Re: Feedback Fantasy Adventure/ School Life

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Hey All,
I recently finished the first arc of my story "Rachel Kalos: World Protector." It's a fantasy adventure story focusing on Rachel Kalos as she tries to become the greatest hero of the world. I'm looking for a place to get some feedback- how's my writing, what's working, what's not, that sort of thing. I'd really appreciate any help in improving my writing.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/37158/rachel-kalos-world-protector