Re: Honest Review/Feedback for Grimdark Fantasy (Ongoing, 100+ pages, 30k words)

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Hello, 

Looking to see how my story can be improved, any critique is welcome! 

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/31803/among-monsters-and-men/chapter/484242/chapter-one--a-kings-death

Countless generations ago mankind settled the world of Orr. Its native races fought in the Great War against them, but was brought to a stalemate for millennia. The King, assassinated by the natives, has reignited the eternal war. Can his son, the Crown Prince, avenge his father and bring peace to the land?