Re: Thedude3445's Weekly TheReviews3445 Thread (No Swaps, Don't Stop)

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Seerica Wrote: I almost forgot that I asked for a review here. Looking forward to it, unless somebody joins the Shill queue. peoeyesparkle



If I have the date set for a review on the OP, unless something changes, I'm gonna review it around that date. So you're in luck, because Draphy_Dragon posted a review and got added to the queue! 

Coincidentally, I also realize I didnt add Draphy_Dragon's story to the queue originally... If I missed anyone's story, please make sure to let me know! 


hi&hello Wrote: Thank you, your review really highlighted some areas to work on: like romance I really didn’t mean to imply any romance since I’m completely oblivious to it 



You're welcome. Keep on writing and keep on making readers happy.

Re: Thedude3445's Weekly TheReviews3445 Thread (No Swaps, Don't Stop)

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ManeReader Wrote: I'll take a review. Slightly more than 100 pages. 

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/31363/unbridled-a-king-in-the-clouds

OK! Though I would like to mention that by this point, with this story as the 19th story in the total queue right now, the date for this review (assuming nobody abandons their story and nobody jumps ahead in the Super Shill Queue) is around September 20th. It could be a long wait!

Re: Thedude3445's Weekly TheReviews3445 Thread (No Swaps, Don't Stop)

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Hello there! Fiber Optics and all that.

I'm going to be starting Stories from the Retrofuture this morning with an eye to reviewing it. I'd love to go into the Super Shill queue.

My story is new but looking at your schedule it'll be old enough by the time you get to it. It's Capo: Rise of a Gang Lord and it's Gangster Gamelit. Set in an alternate version of Los Angeles in 2020, but computers didn't happen, so there are no smartphones, Internet, etc. 

Anyway, I'm terrible at off the cuff blurbs. I hope you'll give it a review. 

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/31963

Re: Thedude3445's Weekly TheReviews3445 Thread (No Swaps, Don't Stop)

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TheWitchOfTheRock Wrote: Fiber Optics~!

I would love you to review my story, Synth  ^_^ 

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/31367/synth

I might have already reviewed yours.  Getting off of a review minedrame, I just gotta say I LOVE the tone of your story and the voice of the main character! I feel bad for Morgan - I  feel what he's feeling hard :(



Oh! I was actually planning on reading your story in the near future anyway lol. I'll go through it sometime in June!

Re: Thedude3445's Weekly TheReviews3445 Thread (No Swaps, Don't Stop)

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Hello :} 

I am relatively new, but I noticed the queue line is pretty long, so I figured by the time you made it down to me, I'd be the required/requested age lol 

Did have a quick question though, with your mention of the 'outright/graphic assault' part of your post - Are you mean any mention of the act in general or an actual in-depth blow-by-blow of the actions as they play out?  In mine there's mention of it about to happen, then reference to it after the fact, but I don't go into the act/scene itself. (At least not the one with Faline, the one with Kierra I consider more of a fight scene, but it is an assault happening as well) 

The story as a whole is rated mature, Dark Fantasy - Werewolf/Vampire theme but not romance 


Fiber Optics

The link: https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/32263/shy-walking-shadows-book-1-of-the-blood-moon-series 

If you have any questions, please do ask :}

Re: Thedude3445's Weekly TheReviews3445 Thread (No Swaps, Don't Stop)

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Seerica Wrote: Every time I think that I improved enough to move on, I see that I have more to improve. Thanks for the review.
But I'm curious. If you compared the early fights with the fight from the last chapter, is there improvement?

Oh yeah the fights in the most recent chapter are better. There is still room for improvement with description and clarity but it's better than the first story arc for sure.