Taykaim Wrote: I'd love to hear what you have to say about my story.

I assume I'll be at the back of the back of the back of the long line.

Yeah. You've got a Nimbus review, so you'll be in the back line. But you are in line.

Tana Wrote: Aaand done. Really, all you need to do is get some editing cleanup and make some conflict (not necessarily violence, just conflict) happen, even just a sub-arc. You've got the pieces there for good character drama if you use them.

Thank you for taking the time! Your note about the lack of conflict rings very true. I will try to improve on the points you and others have listed!

Burn me! :D

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/30739/legends-of-regalia

Been working on my first story for a bit, re-re-re-writing it for a while yet expecting the worst at times. Hard to really judge your own work :P

Talo Wrote: I'm a new author with a new book, it is not a fantasy, it has no reviews, I think a few people read it all the way through. I really have no idea, no comments, no feedback. Perhaps I came to the wrong site. Milo by Talo Segura

It's not often that I find a story to compare to Catcher in the Rye. By which I mean 'almost never'. You have, by accident or intent, done an excellent imitation of Salinger's voice, and I encourage you to keep at it. A cult classic is still a classic.

However, your pacing is exceedingly weak. Granted, that's the only real flaw in the story (plus a handful of barely-noticed typos). As I said in the review... cutting the adult perspectives out in the edit should improve the story significantly.

ZZZX Wrote: Burn me! :D

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/30739/legends-of-regalia

Been working on my first story for a bit, re-re-re-writing it for a while yet expecting the worst at times. Hard to really judge your own work :P

Aaand added. 

The queue is long and we must stay 2 metres apart at all times. 

The story is in my sig, no rush to get to it but it would be nice to get a review that isn't a bribe for more chapters. 

I would be grateful to be added to your queue :-) 

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/30931/the-musclewood-sisters

I'd appreciate a review of my story, Ascendant Legacy

Take your time!

Thanks for doing this.
I've got one here
A Storm in the Fall

I know it's a Fan Fic, but please don't give it leeway for that. I would like to know how it measures against the quality we want from OFic.

Hi :)

Would you like to review my story Ragna?

Thanks in advance.

Tana,

I would love some feedback and critique as I am always perfecting and rewriting.

I made a major change splitting up my book into three. Let me know if you're interested. 

Hey there! If you're still taking new requests, I would love it if you could take a look at mine!

Everyday Normal Violence

I'm coming to the end of the first novel and it'll all be posted on May 25th! It would be really cool if you could take the time to take a look! Thank you so much for doing this, it's really cool of you.

Is there a way you could review mine? I just got my first 0.5 and it tanked my average by a whole star; looking for some objective feedback to balance it out.

Can I replace my request to review Dirge of Apocrypha with a new piece I’ve started? I’ve got more than 10k words (been releasing chapters almost daily) and feel like it’d worth a look at since it has nothing atm as far as reviews.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/31988/requiem

Hi! I’d love to know what you think of my story, The Wings of Storm ^^! I’ve only had two reviews so far, and it’s been edited a lot since then.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/22392/the-wings-of-storm

Throwing in my lot. It's an urban fantasy, so if that's not your thing, feel free to pass: The Dark Places

Book 2 is coming June 1.

Tana Wrote: part of this is my hope to help newer or more obscure writers get their first bump in visibility. As best as I can help, at least.

Did Dobby hear "first bump in visibility"? =D

Here's my first foray into web serials, if you please!

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/32123/just-a-bystander

Hi! I heard about you from Nimbus for never pulling punches and would appreciate if you tore into my story. It's rather below average and I would greatly appreciate if someone helped point out its many flaws. 

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/24834/mycology