Re: i have an idea or semi plot for a novel.

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its basically an other-world summon novel, mostly focusing sci-fi and fantasy both.
two protagonists, a boy and a girl studying in the same school.

boy's father is in military, trains him occasionally, but boy interested in scientific nerdy stuff.he goes to girl's father who is a scientist working on government's 'secret project' to learn science, meets girl. girl wants to learn martial arts so the boy teaches her.

two start liking each other, boy comes to confess to girl on school roof. girl gets summoned in front of him before or after the confession depending on the impact you want to create.

confessing to her would give heavier responsibility vibe and a bond. while before confessing would give lighter responsibility vibe with little strings attached to each other(greater chance of seduction by another) with only some expectation on both sides. personally, i prefer the after confession choice since it gives the characters drive. also creates darker tone.
anyway, boy is depressed, goes to girls father to ask him to do something since he s a scientist.

 the father reveals secret to him about government research being other dimension research previously unsuccessful, but now retrieving some dimensional clues from summon site, became successful.  nothing can go through as of now, but boy might be able to go through, having some magic power rubbed off of him during summon.

but transfer is unstable, not able to pinpoint the location of the world the girl went and might jeopardize his life. the boy of course still goes(otherwise whats the point of being protag), ending in a different world, nearly losing his life to come back. he doesn't give up, trains and searches for the girl through many dimensions, becoming strong and battle-hardened the normal way(no levels or magic for him, maybe sci-fi gadgets and stuff).

girl in the meantime has levels and magic, becomes op, defeats demon king or dark lord or evil dragon or all of them within a few years. (main focus should be the boy with some occasional glimpses of the girl's swords magic advancement)

the empire or kingdom that summoned her placed curse to control her, forcing her to become the prince's fiance(they did soft and hard tactic, revealing the curse when she disagreed) gaining overwhelming popular support from the people of the world who were saved and don't know about the curse.

the boy finally arrives, learns of this. gaining level and magic (or not if you want)and powering up with unprecedented speed due to the experiences of many universes, fighting against the kingdom finally rescuing her going against popular sentiment. the girl might hesitate due to the people or not.

the boy convinces her anyway and brings her home. or if you like torturing protags and are an 'S', you can go the NTR route or make the girl suicide and boy driven to anger, destroying the kingdom or empire. I personally don't like that kind of ending though.

if you go the heavy route(after confession) don't make the boy a typical Japanese mc "don't kill" pussy, won't fit. it needs someone cynical, brooding type(though would have some ideals of sticking to one girl and taking responsibility for one's actions) who does what's necessary, killing where needed.

that being said I wouldn't mind multiple authors(if anyone at all is interested) writing from different viewpoints. exploring all the possibilities.

BTW. this is just an idea for a novel and I claim no rights to it. how I presented the whole plot is how I would write it if I did. but if anyone finds the premise interesting, they can write it however they want, change it to their heart's desire and make it their own.
the only reason I don't write it is it's not a type of story I would write. I would perhaps read it, but I don't think I create the proper vibe that can give it life if I wrote it.


Re: i have an idea or semi plot of a novel.

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Hey,


I know what you mean, reading something and actually writing it is really different.

I like sci-fi but honestly, your plot doesn't sound like something I would read. But to come to the point on why I am leaving you a reply, I think, if you like the plot, if it doesn't leave you alone, if you can’t stop thinking about it, just write it. Or maybe just write some of the scenes you imagined in your head. That may help to decide it this is something you want to continue.

Also, about the writing, I have the same thought often, whether it be the "vibe" or the portrayal of a character or anything really, what helps me is, I try to imagine what I would want to read, what I would enjoy and it becomes a bit easier writing it. And maybe practice helps?

I hope I could help you at least a little tiny bit :)

(Also, english isn't my first language, so sorry for mistakes)

Re: i have an idea or semi plot of a novel.

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april18 Wrote: I would  really appreciate it if people could share their thoughts on the plot. If it's a good one, bad one, if something like this's been done before, anything would be nice.


You put more thoughts into the preliminary plot outline than a lot of people, so, kudos. I would say that seeing that the emphasis is on the parallel adventure through worlds, you can eliminate the high school overhead, and the dad portion, as this does not really play in the plot & just creates an extra character to develop that will be abandoned very fast.

Instead, I would suggest making the young man a scientist himself, and meet the young lady in the martial arts training center they both attend. The young lady can also acquire a decent profession. 

This change allows you way less boring school fluff before you get into the fun part of the adventures, and your characters will have far more degrees of freedom and more personality than the standard teen MCs at the onset. 

imo it would be better not to use the trope of an arranged marriage (which I am guilty of myself, but my MC has no other options at the point of the story when it occurs) because your female lead sounds like she has agency, and it just does not sound right for her to be influenced like that & way too contrived. This way, the romantic arc could occur wherever they cross path and eventually culminate in your conflict.

In terms of laying waste to the fantasy Kingdom or Empires, I would leave this decision for the 'at the later date' when you could see if you have created a world vibrant and dear enough for the reader to actually give two figs about its destruction.

Finally, from my experience, if you love an idea of a project, it is better to do it yourself. 

Good luck with your story!

Re: i have an idea or semi plot of a novel.

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Thanks!

My intention mostly was going for more of an emotional struggle between the two rather than focusing on only the action aspect. Though there would be action but not without the proper motivation to come back from lifethreatning situation for reaching each other. A little on the romantic side I guess. But I don't really portray emotions very well. 

I also wanted to try displaying the struggles of someone with a leveling system or mystical powers and someone with none struggling against supernatural situations, and focusing more on the ordinary person is more up my alley(i guess I've always liked Batman more).

And the last part of destroying kingdoms or empires is not really a direction I wanted to aim for. I wanted to show the defiance of social norm or popular sentiment with that. 

As per your suggestions, perhaps I would write it in the future, the main reason I wrote about it because most stories are about the summoned. I wanted to see stories about the ordinary loved one of the summoned who is left behind struggling to reach them, presuming the road isn't a dead end. 

Re: i have an idea or semi plot of a novel.

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april18 Wrote: Thanks!

My intention mostly was going for more of an emotional struggle between the two rather than focusing on only the action aspect. Though there would be action but not without the proper motivation to come back from lifethreatning situation for reaching each other. A little on the romantic side I guess. But I don't really portray emotions very well. 

I also wanted to try displaying the struggles of someone with a leveling system or mystical powers and someone with none struggling against supernatural situations, and focusing more on the ordinary person is more up my alley(i guess I've always liked Batman more).

And the last part of destroying kingdoms or empires is not really a direction I wanted to aim for. I wanted to show the defiance of social norm or popular sentiment with that. 

As per your suggestions, perhaps I would write it in the future, the main reason I wrote about it because most stories are about the summoned. I wanted to see stories about the ordinary loved one of the summoned who is left behind struggling to reach them, presuming the road isn't a dead end.


It sounds like you have a plan, and as far as not handling emotions in writing well, practice makes perfect, so tackling a book that focuses on it may be a great learning experience. :) good luck with your story.
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