Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Waytocool Wrote: Yea, that one is an example of vrmmo done right!
:)


one idea i like the most in a story is the mc who rely on his skills and strength at most part, and not luck to overcome his obstacles. i had a thing for clever mcs, especially if they're on the shameless side.

never really liked righteous mc that helped others without expecting reward tho. i prefer them to be more selfish and pragmatic. even if they didn't give a damn about morals and basically extremely cruel it's also fine if I undersand why they act that way (even if it's just for the lulz).

as for hard working vs lazy mcs, i actually prefer the lazy/carefree ones who could use their clever thinking to make the task at hand easier, rather than the masochistic workaholics which gave a message that 'willpower can make you achieve anything'. i don't think it works for me at all since i'm also a lazy bum and one things i hate the most is pushing myself too hard when i didn't feel like doing it xD

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#505
Wrote: Hello I am alive and stuff. Inktober ate me but I'm back! And I hope to use NaNo to get more of my short story collection done, among other things. Anyone else participating?

And Happy Halloween!


Welcome back, and happy spooky Halloween.

Unfortunately, I'm not participating in NaNo, but I think there is someone here that is participating in it.

Can I see some of your art for the Inktober? I would love to see it.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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I'm not exactly new to trying to be an author, but I'm only recently working on self publishing. Full disclosure... My current web fiction project, Legends of Lost Fallow, might not really be cut out for stand-alone publishing, because it started as a world building project. I've worked out a way to interlink characters and plots across a couple hundred years of lore, but I'm not sure how interested any readers are in that kind of structure. I have to be honest, even I think it's starting a bit slow, but I'm comparing that to what I know is coming. 

I'll take any kind of feedback, even the blunt force kind.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/21286/legends-of-lost-fallow

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Keyboard Wrote: I'm not exactly new to trying to be an author, but I'm only recently working on self publishing. Full disclosure... My current web fiction project, Legends of Lost Fallow, might not really be cut out for stand-alone publishing, because it started as a world building project. I've worked out a way to interlink characters and plots across a couple hundred years of lore, but I'm not sure how interested any readers are in that kind of structure. I have to be honest, even I think it's starting a bit slow, but I'm comparing that to what I know is coming. 

I'll take any kind of feedback, even the blunt force kind.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/21286/legends-of-lost-fallow


I looked at it, and the only issue I found is that it seems, sticky or slow.

Although, I am half asleep.

Wink

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Waytocool Wrote:
Keyboard Wrote: I'm not exactly new to trying to be an author, but I'm only recently working on self publishing. Full disclosure... My current web fiction project, Legends of Lost Fallow, might not really be cut out for stand-alone publishing, because it started as a world building project. I've worked out a way to interlink characters and plots across a couple hundred years of lore, but I'm not sure how interested any readers are in that kind of structure. I have to be honest, even I think it's starting a bit slow, but I'm comparing that to what I know is coming. 

I'll take any kind of feedback, even the blunt force kind.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/21286/legends-of-lost-fallow


I looked at it, and the only issue I found is that it seems, sticky or slow.

Although, I am half asleep.

Wink


Yea I can understand that. Played with point of view a bit, thought that character would be a little more purple in terms of prose. No contractions, deliberate and thorough thoughts and feelings. Might have been a mistake.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Keyboard Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote:
Keyboard Wrote: I'm not exactly new to trying to be an author, but I'm only recently working on self publishing. Full disclosure... My current web fiction project, Legends of Lost Fallow, might not really be cut out for stand-alone publishing, because it started as a world building project. I've worked out a way to interlink characters and plots across a couple hundred years of lore, but I'm not sure how interested any readers are in that kind of structure. I have to be honest, even I think it's starting a bit slow, but I'm comparing that to what I know is coming. 

I'll take any kind of feedback, even the blunt force kind.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/21286/legends-of-lost-fallow


I looked at it, and the only issue I found is that it seems, sticky or slow.

Although, I am half asleep.

Wink


Yea I can understand that. Played with point of view a bit, thought that character would be a little more purple in terms of prose. No contractions, deliberate and thorough thoughts and feelings. Might have been a mistake.


I actually liked it. Yes there's purple patches all over, but it's fine if you keep your style consistent throughout the novel. At that point it's just a matter of taste.

The biggest "sin" I found was your overuse of -ly adverbs, which can sometimes get confusing and occasionally doesn't work at all. Like here:

Quote: Aarik, too proudly, swallowed his cry and held his tongue, so the whip hissed and cracked again. This time his cry came freely...


Apart from that I really liked it. Followed.


Also, hello @Fay Voss. I'm doing NaNo too this year, though I'm trying more of a discovery approach, which is unusual for me. Let's see how it goes. :D

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Wrote: Hello I am alive and stuff. Inktober ate me but I'm back! And I hope to use NaNo to get more of my short story collection done, among other things. Anyone else participating?

And Happy Halloween!


I took the fall and submitted World War E as my NaNoWrimo project. I'd orginally meant for it to be part of The OmNimbus, but decided to turn it into a full length feature. Good Luck with your project!

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Waytocool Wrote: Hey guys, "Constant Combat" is now up.

It only has the prologue and the first chapter but i'm working on chapter two!

Feedback would be nice, and I would like it to be put in the comments but beggars can't be choosers!

I need some more coffee.

:s:


hmm, personally i'd prefer it each chapters are much longer. at least 1000 words or so. you can try chiming in all the short chapters and summarize what happened in all of them in a title, but that's just me.

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as for nanowrimo, i think about just writing the draft for my current project, just throwing ideas left and right, making use of what fits after the nano is complete. nothing that ambitious.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Wrote:
MrZombie Wrote: Welcome back, and happy spooky Halloween.

Unfortunately, I'm not participating in NaNo, but I think there is someone here that is participating in it.

Can I see some of your art for the Inktober? I would love to see it.

Thanks!

If you wanna scroll through all of it, I have it on Twitter but here's today's:
Spoiler :
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I love it. Man, I'm a sucker for any type of art.

Keyboard Wrote: I'm not exactly new to trying to be an author, but I'm only recently working on self publishing. Full disclosure... My current web fiction project, Legends of Lost Fallow, might not really be cut out for stand-alone publishing, because it started as a world building project. I've worked out a way to interlink characters and plots across a couple hundred years of lore, but I'm not sure how interested any readers are in that kind of structure. I have to be honest, even I think it's starting a bit slow, but I'm comparing that to what I know is coming. 

I'll take any kind of feedback, even the blunt force kind.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/21286/legends-of-lost-fallow


Nevertheless welcome! Give me time to read it, I'm a slow reader.

Wrote: HUDDLERS DISCORD IS LIVE. 

All ya'll got PMs, or should have... I hate RRL's PM system.


I didn't get any PM or should I PM you? Why not just post the link at the front of the forum page?





Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/11440/noli-me-tank-in-a-mall

this is also really nice :D

the Author also seems to put a lot of thought and research to this, which I appreciate.

God dang it this quote is gold

Spoiler :

To you who stand there at the end of time, the benefit of hindsight is immense. But I ask you to imagine as I feel who stand here at the crux of history. God has given us free will. Yet we scream to the Almighty – Lord! Tell us what to do. Lord! Grant me strength. Lord! Grant me luck in all my endeavors! I surrender myself to you, oh Lord, or to your anointed, that I may have the peace and surety of not having to bear the consequences of my own decisions.

The priests say, do not seek to learn too much, for it will take you away from God. It will encourage skepticism and materialism, and what does it merit to gain the whole world but lose your own soul? I say, too much knowledge can indeed be a frightening object. It is not just there are things man is not meant to know, but that man is a finite existence. The terror of free will and the consequence of mortality is that you cannot try everything.

Too many valid choices only lead into paralysis. The future, I can shape, but in what manner? These lives I can influence, but who is strong enough to carry their fate? Ideas blaze between my ears, one after the other, flickering like fireflies.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Wrote: HUDDLERS DISCORD IS LIVE. 

All ya'll got PMs, or should have...i hate RRL's PM system.



I didn't get anything? How to fix that problem, that's the question here.

Quote:https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/11440/noli-me-tank-in-a-mall

this is also really nice undefined

the Author also seems to put a lot of thought and research to this, which I appreciate.


This looks like an interesting take on the alternate history genre. Just unfortunate that the author apparently stopped updates.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Wrote: This looks like an interesting take on the alternate history genre. Just unfortunate that the author apparently stopped updates.


it might be unfortunate we won't see the story's end. in the meantime i can still enjoy a good read since i'm still in the beginning part.

wow this is beautiful. the style takes a while to get used to but when i'm into this, the text really drew me in.

Spoiler :

“… a monomaniacal focus, I believe. A shameless curiosity and a hoarder’s instinct for trivia. Of my fellow students in Madrid, I have seen no few forego friendships and luxuries and leisurely pursuits to advance their studies. But it is my mestizo heritage” here I breach the topic he obviously wants to discuss “that allowed me to see that marks and accolades from academia were only temporary badges.

Knowledge is more than just names and figures and explainable concepts. Knowledge… true knowledge, is a recognition of *patterns*. Too often we think of each discipline as worth focus in themselves, that it takes too much effort to be good at everything… better to be a master at one than to have reliable expertise in none.


But if you think about how advances in one discipline can further assist another, the patterns will begin to lock in. In truth, it was really was submarines that captivated me. A complex machine, a confluence of disciplines, both mechanical and martial.” Here he snickers, for during our conversation at the table, I had not disguised the childlike love I had for the concept of submarines. “A fleet of them would require less metal than a battleship, yet each of them a threat to the strongest of capital ships. And to fight them, the only thing you can do is to make small torpedo-boat and submarine destroyers that have to be fast with light armament and practically no armor… for you need a great many of them to escort and screen your battleship.


Thus the mere *existence* of your submarine threatens your enemy to spend greatly on ships, draining their economy. It is a magnificent counterforce. And I thought, how could I build one? How could I own one? I cannot join the Navy, I have my responsibilities as a future landowner… as I learned more about the difficulties, I fell into despair.


But every piece of knowledge fits into something in the larger pattern. Even useless bits of knowledge can give insight into a person’s mind. It was the knowledge that we had no industry here, a mostly unskilled labor force, that prompted me to look deeper into simpler means of manufacturing and the practical knowledge of how to craft engines and simple labor-saving machines.

And I thought; there is no harm in this. Technology such as this could make money.”