Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

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Waytocool Wrote: I have decided to start a new story, but don't fret I will be continuing my first story.

This one is a whole lot less ambitious than my first one and, in my opinion, has a better plot.

It's about this guy named David who is sentenced to forever face wave after wave of foes, each wave harder than the last.

But for each foe he kills he gets points to spend at a shop.

Like zombie mode in CoD!

However, this one will be in third person and I will be using a more.... user friendly style this time.

Also if you guys ever need ideas just PM me, I really have a lot of plots in my head but I lack the skill to write them.

I just don't want to feel like a leech. 

Toodles,  <3


the premise sounds like god and devil world novel. the difference being, yours use guns :D

it might be interesting if the story's about your mc trying to find the way out their predicament.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#482
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote: I have decided to start a new story, but don't fret I will be continuing my first story.

This one is a whole lot less ambitious than my first one and, in my opinion, has a better plot.

It's about this guy named David who is sentenced to forever face wave after wave of foes, each wave harder than the last.

But for each foe he kills he gets points to spend at a shop.

Like zombie mode in CoD!

However, this one will be in third person and I will be using a more.... user friendly style this time.

Also if you guys ever need ideas just PM me, I really have a lot of plots in my head but I lack the skill to write them.

I just don't want to feel like a leech. 

Toodles,  <3


the premise sounds like god and devil world novel. the difference being, yours use guns :D

it might be interesting if the story's about your mc trying to find the way out their predicament.


He will be, though first he has to get strong by grinding.

Plus he will not be in a whole new world, he will start in a empty white void.

If he wants some scenery then he has to buy it from the shop.

If he want other people in the world he has to buy it from the shop.

If he wants anything, and I mean anything, he has to buy it from the shop.

Do you get what i'm putting down?

EDIT: The only things he gets free is the gun he was cleaning before he was teleported, enough air for 12 hours, and he gets fully healed after every round, this is so I can nearly kill him every time and get away with it.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#483
Waytocool Wrote: He will be, though first he has to get strong by grinding.

Plus he will not be in a whole new world, he will start in a empty white void.

If he wants some scenery then he has to buy it from the shop.

If he want other people in the world he has to buy it from the shop.

If he wants anything, and I mean anything, he has to buy it from the shop.

Do you get what i'm putting down?

EDIT: The only things he gets free is the gun he was cleaning before he was teleported, enough air for 12 hours, and he gets fully healed after every round, this is so I can nearly kill him every time and get away with it.


i understand the gist though.

what about his rest time though? it'd be hell if it'd be continuous rounds without any rest. maybe you want to add on the details about bathroom breaks or so.



Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#484
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote: He will be, though first he has to get strong by grinding.

Plus he will not be in a whole new world, he will start in a empty white void.

If he wants some scenery then he has to buy it from the shop.

If he want other people in the world he has to buy it from the shop.

If he wants anything, and I mean anything, he has to buy it from the shop.

Do you get what i'm putting down?

EDIT: The only things he gets free is the gun he was cleaning before he was teleported, enough air for 12 hours, and he gets fully healed after every round, this is so I can nearly kill him every time and get away with it.


i understand the gist though.

what about his rest time though? it'd be hell if it'd be continuous rounds without any rest. maybe you want to add on the details about bathroom breaks or so.


Good point, how about with each round he gets more time or he could buy more time?

:D

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#485
Waytocool Wrote: Good point, how about with each round he gets more time or he could buy more time?

:D


it's probably too cruel for the poor mc lol

at least make it a permanent extension so the rest time would always be longer (or was this you're getting at?). but as in tower defense games, you could make it so he call an early wave whenever he's ready to gain substantial bonuses.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#486
Waytocool Wrote:
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote: He will be, though first he has to get strong by grinding.

Plus he will not be in a whole new world, he will start in a empty white void.

If he wants some scenery then he has to buy it from the shop.

If he want other people in the world he has to buy it from the shop.

If he wants anything, and I mean anything, he has to buy it from the shop.

Do you get what i'm putting down?

EDIT: The only things he gets free is the gun he was cleaning before he was teleported, enough air for 12 hours, and he gets fully healed after every round, this is so I can nearly kill him every time and get away with it.


i understand the gist though.

what about his rest time though? it'd be hell if it'd be continuous rounds without any rest. maybe you want to add on the details about bathroom breaks or so.


Good point, how about with each round he gets more time or he could buy more time?

:D


How about adding an opposite sex character? They don't need to be in love. Maybe he bought a girl accidentally and then she followed after him like a golf caddy, got scared by the enemies, and tried to help him fight afterward.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#487
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote: Good point, how about with each round he gets more time or he could buy more time?

:D


it's probably too cruel for the poor mc lol

at least make it a permanent extension so the rest time would always be longer (or was this you're getting at?). but as in tower defense games, you could make it so he call an early wave whenever he's ready to gain substantial bonuses.


That wave idea sounds nice and yes time extensions will be permanent, as much as it hurts my heart I can't be too mean or no one would read it!

:P

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#489
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote:
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote: He will be, though first he has to get strong by grinding.

Plus he will not be in a whole new world, he will start in a empty white void.

If he wants some scenery then he has to buy it from the shop.

If he want other people in the world he has to buy it from the shop.

If he wants anything, and I mean anything, he has to buy it from the shop.

Do you get what i'm putting down?

EDIT: The only things he gets free is the gun he was cleaning before he was teleported, enough air for 12 hours, and he gets fully healed after every round, this is so I can nearly kill him every time and get away with it.


i understand the gist though.

what about his rest time though? it'd be hell if it'd be continuous rounds without any rest. maybe you want to add on the details about bathroom breaks or so.


Good point, how about with each round he gets more time or he could buy more time?

:D


How about adding an opposite sex character? They don't need to be in love. Maybe he bought a girl accidentally and then she followed after him like a golf caddy, got scared by the enemies, and tried to help him fight afterward.


or only slowing him down and keep putting himself in more danger by helping her. If you want to torture her, just like an escort mission. God i hate escort mission.

Torture him more with a water level, give him a small boat to defend, while thousand of jaw like creture tore his boat apart.

And hello.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#492
MrZombie Wrote:
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote:
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote: He will be, though first he has to get strong by grinding.

Plus he will not be in a whole new world, he will start in a empty white void.

If he wants some scenery then he has to buy it from the shop.

If he want other people in the world he has to buy it from the shop.

If he wants anything, and I mean anything, he has to buy it from the shop.

Do you get what i'm putting down?

EDIT: The only things he gets free is the gun he was cleaning before he was teleported, enough air for 12 hours, and he gets fully healed after every round, this is so I can nearly kill him every time and get away with it.


i understand the gist though.

what about his rest time though? it'd be hell if it'd be continuous rounds without any rest. maybe you want to add on the details about bathroom breaks or so.


Good point, how about with each round he gets more time or he could buy more time?

:D


How about adding an opposite sex character? They don't need to be in love. Maybe he bought a girl accidentally and then she followed after him like a golf caddy, got scared by the enemies, and tried to help him fight afterward.


or only slowing him down and keep putting himself in more danger by helping her. If you want to torture her, just like an escort mission. God i hate escort mission.

Torture him more with a water level, give him a small boat to defend, while thousand of jaw like creture tore his boat apart.

And hello.


Or, this is even better, both!

However, I don't know how people will respond when she eventually dies. 

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#493
Waytocool Wrote:
MrZombie Wrote:
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote:
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote: He will be, though first he has to get strong by grinding.

Plus he will not be in a whole new world, he will start in a empty white void.

If he wants some scenery then he has to buy it from the shop.

If he want other people in the world he has to buy it from the shop.

If he wants anything, and I mean anything, he has to buy it from the shop.

Do you get what i'm putting down?

EDIT: The only things he gets free is the gun he was cleaning before he was teleported, enough air for 12 hours, and he gets fully healed after every round, this is so I can nearly kill him every time and get away with it.


i understand the gist though.

what about his rest time though? it'd be hell if it'd be continuous rounds without any rest. maybe you want to add on the details about bathroom breaks or so.


Good point, how about with each round he gets more time or he could buy more time?

:D


How about adding an opposite sex character? They don't need to be in love. Maybe he bought a girl accidentally and then she followed after him like a golf caddy, got scared by the enemies, and tried to help him fight afterward.


or only slowing him down and keep putting himself in more danger by helping her. If you want to torture her, just like an escort mission. God i hate escort mission.

Torture him more with a water level, give him a small boat to defend, while thousand of jaw like creture tore his boat apart.

And hello.


Or, this is even better, both!

However, I don't know how people will respond when she eventually dies.


Don't make her die. Torture her and make her bring him poor fortune like the troublemaker like the Handler in monster hunter world game.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#495
Waytocool Wrote:
Wrote: Don't make her die. Torture her and make her bring him poor fortune like the troublemaker like the Handler in monster hunter world game.


Oh, just assume that when I say die I actually mean slow torture.

She might just slowly get nibbled down by baby sharks, only to wash up on shore and get digested alive in a giant snakes stomach!

:P

Then the mc pays for her life and revives ger back just to be eaten again.

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#496
Wrote:
Waytocool Wrote:
Wrote: Don't make her die. Torture her and make her bring him poor fortune like the troublemaker like the Handler in monster hunter world game.


Oh, just assume that when I say die I actually mean slow torture.

She might just slowly get nibbled down by baby sharks, only to wash up on shore and get digested alive in a giant snakes stomach!

:P

Then the mc pays for her life and revives ger back just to be eaten again.


Beautiful!

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#498
Wrote: Maybe, you can add some special ability to the girl that make her indisposable for the mc. For example, super herculean which make her able to carry a ton of arms and amory.

If he wants another helper like her, he must play another gachapong with drop rate 0.01% or something.


I'm thinking about giving her the ability [Monster knowledge]!

She knows all the monsters weaknesses, but she is super weak!

However, she only costs 1 point to revive.

Though the effects of constant death and revival on the mind would be quite interesting.

:P

Re: The Huddlers ( Dedicated Thread for newbie authors. )

#499
Waytocool Wrote: I'm thinking about giving her the ability [Monster knowledge]!

She knows all the monsters weaknesses, but she is super weak!

However, she only costs 1 point to revive.

Though the effects of constant death and revival on the mind would be quite interesting.

:P


๋Just weak is not enough! Make her gets easily scared like a scared rabbit. It will make a contrast to the calmness of mc. Right, adding a pair of rabbit ears is also good! lol