Indistinct Instinct

Indistinct Instinct

by Reiders

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

They say Kaiser is more beast than man.
They say he fought two armies at once by himself and forced them to retreat.
They say he cavorts with witches and demons.
They say he has a thousand lovers, each more beautiful and deadly than the last.
They say the Night Goddess adores him, shrouding her beloved in her dark embrace.
They say that blood still stains the Wyrm King's throne.
They say, They say, They say...

They say a lot of things. Rumors and myth surrounding Kaiser float through Gods' Nature like the wind through the trees, but sometimes, the truth is stranger than fiction.

*Chapters will be released on Mondays to Patrons and here Saturday.*

*Warning, this story has a slow start as I build up characters and the world. If you are looking for something that dives right into action then this is probably not the fiction for you. If you want a believable plot, good development, and character growth, then I welcome you.*

*This work is under constant improvement. Volume 1 now finished.*

 

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Fighnjaci
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Potential to be the best.

If I could judge a story by only it's first chapter,this would take the very top.

 

I will say right now that if this story is continued properly it WILL be among the top fictions for a very long time,if not the best on the site.

 

That said,only if the rest of the story is as good as the first chapter.

Sagen
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Amazing to the point of no return

Extremely well written. I have only read the first two chapters and I am hooked. Love it!!

Cym
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Well thought and refreshing

Finally! A really good surprise to see this story start again! The beginning is really good, the MC is really atypical and doesn't care much about anything, it's refreshing!

The story is supposed to span over a century, I hope the author will be able to keep the big picture clear and not go into too much detail or else this story will over a thousand chapters! (well, it wouldn't be bad either...tongue-out)

King_of_Deuces
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A new take on a used genre. The story is very good and interesting. It's also part of the Pledge which makes want to read it even more.

Only bad thing is that Nero focuses a little too much on the smaller details. Also please don't make him have a relationship with his sisters 'who aren't related by blood' which makes everything okay. 

Other than that, great story! Keep it up :)

abuafridi
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 Grammer and plotline is good. The characters and mystery is great. Has great potential. Cant wait till the next chapters.

Azreal
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Only made an account to comment on this, i've read so many awesome ff on this site, but this truly is by far the one i'm looking forward to the most. keep it up dude

th30dor
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Extremely slow, nothing happens

Extremely extremely extremely slow going novel. A high number of words, and very big chapters, but not a lot going on. We get to read in excruciating detail about MCs very mundane chores. Kinda like reading about work.

Grammar and style are very good, and that kinda fools into reading some more, thinking that the next chapter is the chapter with the action. But its not, and you skip/skim some more,  and you hope,  and it kinda goes on. But the novel is, at its core, boring. 

MC is like a robot. No signs of emotion whatsoever. A lot of telling, not a lot of showing.

criticalmind
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Only 5 chapters up, but looks good. Still, the author isn't being efficient with his words. 130+ pages and the MC is a noob who hasn't even started training yet. Half of the stuff is a prologue from the future that basically spoils the whole story. I'll probably update this in a year or so when the story starts moving

Humanprototype
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Style- Verbose, overly detailed on unimportant things, poor word economy in general.

Story- Standard setting but has enough depth that it works. Lore and world-building manage to be interesting and not turn into fantasy babble.

Grammar- Good

Character- MC is robotic and the supporting cast is better but still pretty one-dimentional.

Darkerby95
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based on the fist chapter.

 It just screams read me. Please oh please oh please keep writing and never stop until the story is as long as Robert Jordan’s Wheel of Time.