The Breath of Creation [DROPPED]

by lightningwarrior21

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Magic Martial Arts Multiple Lead Characters Reader interactive Reincarnation Strong Lead Summoned Hero Supernatural Wuxia

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Sometimes, the multiverse needs expanding. That's where I come in. But, unfortunately, being a deity isn't all fun and games (and is incredibly complicated), as there are always things working against you. Not even the God of the Multiverses can change that. 

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Twelve souls were chosen to expand into the void surrounding the known universe(s), and were given a grace period in which they would experience a relatively safe expansion of their domains. Once that period is up, however, they are free to interact with each other...and what lurks in the depths of the Abyss, the Void, and the Primordial Chaos. I am one of those souls. And let me tell you, this shit ain't easy. Between trying to raise mortals into an immortal army, with which I can defend my domain, dealing with my children, and trying to maintain the balance between all realms of existance, I have my work cut out for me. Sigh. Now I know why, back on Earth, gods worked in mysterious, invisible ways. There's just too much to be done. 

Formerly called RE: Deity

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
And He Said... ago
The Four Realms ago
The Importance of Names ago
The Birth of the Fae ago
The Path to Immortality ago
Deities and Sentient Races ago
The Truth of Cultivation ago
How DARE You?! ago
Buckling Down to Work ago
The Path of Dei ago
Power Versus Force ago
The First Clash ago
Fate ago
Immortals ago
The Awakening (Nine Thousand Years) ago
Starting the Battle ago
This Is How High the Heavens Are ago
The Fate of the Realm Sun ago
Aftermath ago
Tian ago
Dragons and Draconians ago
On Domains and Lessons ago
Just a Bit Further ago
Learning of Hearth and Home ago
Speaking With the Creator ago
Unexpected Events ago
The Wedding ago
Whoever You Are ago
The Mad Scientist and The Meeting ago
Introductions (Names and Domains) ago
Comparisons ago
The Nine Heavens ago
The Wheel Realm ago
The One World ago
Paragon of His Species ago
Big, Happy, Family ago
Welcoming Change ago
Farewells ago
Side Story: First Contact ago
Like Parent, Like Child ago
The More Things Change... ago
...The More They Stay the Same ago
The First Dimension ago
A Long Day for Everyone ago
The Song ago
Names are Hard ago
Revisiting Old Faces ago
Mortality and Destroying Faith ago
CH-CH-CH-CHANGES! ago
Character Glossary ago
And the Music Began to Play ago
The Rise ago
Playing with Trees ago
So Far Away ago
The Rising Sun ago
A Coming Break ago
Interlude: Various Perspectives ago
Dancing In the Moonlight ago
Little Heart ago
The Calamitous Calamity ago
Together, We Are Strong ago
Starman ago
New Additions ago
Pillars and Empire ago
Advancements ago
The Ancients ago
Bombshell ago
Realm War I - Conclusion ago
Start of a Competition ago
Competition ago
Announcement ago
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loregram
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Well written story which draws you in

Overall, this story is quite well done. The author succeeded in blending Xianxia/Xianhuan concepts (i.e. IET's works and general constructs of the genre) with more western conceps as well as concepts from major religions around the world (e.g. reincarnation, God, agents of God, etc.) . In addition, the author took these small parts of other's ideas and mixed them together and made a unique world. In doing this the author managed to avoid expounding on something they didn't understand well which would make them sound facile, and instead made up something of their own so it can be colored in the author's own way.

The MC acts as a what I think many have hoped to see, a god who does what they must with exceptions (rather than being absurdly whymsical => too far removed from reality) without being a complete control freak, "I'm better than everyone else" and the general psychosis you see in MCs in Xianxia.

The only real lack that I have seen so far is that while character's have been given names (and what they represent), so far they have not been fleshed out too much, though I suppose there is plenty of chapters left for that to be filled in.

Jormungand
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Such beautiful and profound story

this is how or what god should be.. not some lame childish ass kicking feeling melodramatic god that we could read in a lot novel... THIS is much more!! the concept of a being and the gods and itus own people.. chaos and all!!! such a great concept!!! please do continue on!!!

Argidoll
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Well thought out and executed

The story is great, the idea is original, there was obviously a lot of thought put into these characters and settings. Well written, no glaring issues, but it might be better to slow down the pace a little, as the story glosses over a lot of interesting stuff. For example, the whole city of cultivators doesn't get filled in much, and the pacing skips a bunch of character development. I kind of want more of the minor dieties to at least have names to associate with their domains, instead of jus being referred to as "the other gods". Slow down the pace a litle, flesh out the characters a little more, there's no rush, right?

admira
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Complex world-building...in both respects.

Okay, excuse the poor pun. But this story has world-building not just from a mechanical point (the MC is a creation deity) but also from a literary point. This isn't the only story about such a thing, but it certainly handles it the most gracefully.

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The characters makes sense, and it doesn't feel like the design decisions were made superficially. (Example of superficial decisions: reincarnation trope when the MC only uses past knowledge to kickstart a sweets empire and gather a harem.)

Information is handled without hideous infodumps. Grammar and spelling are great. Give it a read; even if it isn't your cup of tea, it's still an interesting start.

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Now for the long version... (1/2 for the author, 1/2 for fellow readers)

Story Elements

You don't have to be in the know for any sort of niche culture (reincarnation stories, cultivation, etc.) to enjoy this story. If anything, I've appreciated the very lack of references to "otaku" pop culture. 

There are, of course, elements in common with other series. For example, the "blue boxes" or the idea of realm-building on a timed schedule. However, they are addressed in a way that's unobtrusive and fresh. 

 

Characterization

I especially appreciate the fact that the main character is neuter, and it actually fits. This isn't some macho-acting, technically androgynous being whose subplot revolves around getting functioning equipment for its harem. As for what the feminine version of that would be, I'm not even sure. 

Moreover, this is "powerful" done well. The MC is powerful, definitely in the "OP" bracket of things. However, this doesn't prevent conficts in the story from happening. It also doesn't cause horrible power creep (yet) that is so common. The reasons behind the MC's actions and inactions are belivable. 

Partially to make up for this, the story also focuses on other characters. I'm normally not a big fan of this, even when it's handled well(ish). However, the various characters are both unique and memorable. I had some trouble as the number of characters increased. For the most part, there were enough casual mentions (in narration or dialogue) to recall, "Oh, right, there was ___ too."

 

Information Delivery

Then, there's the info delivery. I have read very few non-published stories that deliver that much information so well. There simply aren't infodumps. Part of it is the fact that we, the readers, are there many steps of the way as the world itself is created. 

Information about things outside the world, such as the MC's past, are also delivered in small amounts. You get to piece together scraps of information to answer questions along the way. This is one series where I'm not left wondering about plot holes. 

 

The Name

The #1 thing I'm unsatisfied with is the novel's name. Re: Deity is just so...generic. As a rule of thumb, I stay away from anything with "Re:" in the title (excepting the original, Re:Monster). Even calling it "Stratera Luotian" would be better. 

 

Conclusion

And...that's it for now! My verdict is a shocking 5 stars--and I hate giving 5 stars--because I can't find any real flaws in the story. Usually, I don't even like kind, benevolent MC's. Yet the main character's personality fits perfectly as a benevolent (yet also carefree) creation deity who isn't entirely without flaws. 

+Follow, +Fave :3

Kilo Magno
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(Review up to chapter 42-...The more they stay the same)

The beginning of this story is really good and captivating, the protagonist is very likeable and enjoyable, the descriptions are well done and pretty helpful. The whole "creating an universe" is simply full of potential that at first made me crave for more with curiosity. Alas it was only until I realized 

About the grammar I can't say much other than it is up there with some of the best I've seen in RoyalRoads, I hardly ever stopped my reading or got confused about something because of some eye-catching mistake. Do take into account that I'm far from being an expert on the subject as my on is not all that great. (and honestly i can put up with bad grammar as long as there is no mix up with there/their, were/we're, your/you're...)

The character are generally decent, but they could be much, much better if only there was some more focus on their development. As is they are pretty shallow (again because of the lack of focus.)

There are too many POV changes, making it impossible to actualy care about the character, nothing is ever in the spotlight long enough to matter. Everything seem rushed and thrown together haphazardly without care or a decent explanation as to why it's there. There are many other reviews saying how "well thought out" it is while what I got from this story is quite the opposite.

Two porly done aspects are the time skips and 'foreshadowing' (or as I see it 'that one paragraph at the end of some chapters saying that something bad is coming'... I think it would be better if there wasn't any.)

We get 5 chapters of build-up to this one specific thing that even the protagonist is eager to see, making this thing appear as super important... just to get a time skip and a single line of text about it... This just makes everything seem a little bit more meaningless, without purpose, they are there just to fill the list of stuff from every type of story that needs to be here "just cause". (and honestly, I don't understand half of whats happening now)

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

I would describe this story as rushed and shallow.

STILL... Even with all this flaws I would recommend you to check it if only to see the "Deity creating universe" thing, wich in my humble opinion was a pretty bold move and is a breath of fresh air in this infinite tide of LitRPG e reincarnation storys. Just don't expect a deep and meaningfull story in a world that actually makes sense...

BakaLich
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One of the most FANTASTIC universe building story I have ever read

TheLoserEllimist
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Such an incredible story. Really wonderful!

Even without considering the epic amount of shitty writing hosted on this site, this novel stands apart from cultivation and fantasy novels in just about every way. This story is beautiful in whole and in all its parts. Thank you. 

kvothe1
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I didn't think I'd like the premise, gave it a chance anyways and was pleasantly surprised at how well the author makes it work. If you enjoy dungeon novels then this novel is for you, it gives a macro version of dungeon novel style creation, along with elements of a LITRPG in the form of first person stories about some of the side characters. Overall very well executed and I recommend that everyone try it out.

Bee Bumble
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The overall story is quite good, the variety of different characters is quite welcome, and the style pretty much fits. The only problem I have is sometimes there will be a misspell or a sentence that I have to read a decent amount of times to understand what the author is trying to say.

Aapjuh
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I tried to give it a go... i just can't anymore

I tried to get into this story and at first it was fairly exciting and i was able to follow the early creation part of the story.

But the gibberish mumbo-jumbo just got more and more unintelligible to me, this is just not for me and therefore give up on this story.