Reincarnation, the beginning.

Reincarnation, the beginning.

by Ikiney

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

After a sudden death, a butcher is given a second chance. Reincarnated in another world as a Saurian, a reptilian race, he sees here an opportunity to live his life to the fullest. Using his past life's knowledge, will he become the most powerful man among his race or will he choose to stay in the shadow, living quietly?

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English is NOT my native language. Any form of criticism is welcome as long as it will help me in writing. 

Update: {HIATUS}

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Breeze
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Great story so far! Keep it up! (At time of writing, read till chapter 14) 

Grammar: Ive not noticed any significant mistakes so far that would interrupt the flow of the story.

 

Style: A bit early to tell, since the story hasn't progressed much yet.

 

Character: This is one of the least developped parts of your story, the MC doesn't have a guiding ambition or an overarching goal and seems more reactive than proactive, (we still don't know what colour his eyes are even after we know for sure that they are not normal). The secondary charaters could do with a brush up aswell.

 

Story: I like the concept a lot and am interested to see where it goes!

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bad sentencing,characters have no depth,story's been done before,lack of explanation of things going on, basically this story feels like some one is trying to tell a story but tries to tell it as fast as possible,so it ends up feeling rushed,hope the writer gets better it's hard to put idea's into words but good luck