Dark Paladin: The Beginning by Vasily Mahanenko

by boblak

Original HIATUS Action Fantasy Cyberpunk LitRPG Magic Martial Arts Virtual Reality

Is it easy to survive in the game world? You could say yes, if you didn’t know what the additional conditions were. They are unusual: it’s the real world in which you have lived all your life. The enemy, craving to destroy you. Your own class who couldn’t care less about you. Are you still sure that survival is easy? Then welcome to THE GAME! It will prove you wrong.

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Character Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Total Views :
  • 12,749
  • Average Views :
  • 1,821
  • Followers :
  • 93
  • Favorites :
  • 7
  • Ratings :
  • 16
  • Pages :
  • 325
Advertisement
Remove
Go to Table of Contents
Rate it
Report
Advertisement
Remove
Author
boblak

boblak

Achievements
3rd Anniversary
Good Commenter (III)
Word Count (IX)
Toplist #1000
Group Leader (III)
I Am Ascending (V)
Advertisement
Remove
Reviews

Leave a review

Wronie
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

I very much wanted to like this book. It was mostly because I 'm still searching for a good LitRPG book that wouldn't develop in op-fest.

And this one was promising me just that. Disapointment followed.

There is no logic behind the game system. It just doesn't work. Its incoherent to the extreme, there are several rules that were created just for MC, and woulnd't make any sense whatsoever.
The "Academy" is also flawed in its design. It's rules and enviroment are created just for MC to further his story. Everyone in academy, everything that happens there is always about MC.


Bullshit characters with bullshit motives behind their actions. Which results in bullshit story. I get that the "MC" has to be hated from the start, to provide enough "reason" for it to be badass later. But this is just too much.

Style - fine, not much to talk about.
Grammar - good, with occasional mistakes.

 

Conclusion; it hurts my brain to think about the world presented in this book. Its lack of logic, incoherency and ammount of "coincedences" is too much to be acceptable. It needs clear rules, and logic.
Characters also need normal reasons behind their actions. As it is right now, they all seem as they were created just to further the story (because they were).