story has been rebooted under title Animus Storm! http://royalroadl.com/fiction/3800
go read that instead unless you're dying to find out what got cut from the story
if you're looking at this on the top 50 page, just scroll down further.
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To preface I really hope you continue updating this series weekly as I think it belongs in the top 10 if you give it enough attention.
Besides that I want to say thank you for making such a great fantasy world. I love the amount of races in this world, and also the fact that the protagonist isn't a human. I think his character at this point is really well done as he is quite powerful for someone of his age, but he is not over the top. To top it off he has a great personality that you are continually growing, and the fact that the cast of characters around him keeps growing while each having their own personalities is great. (Keep the harem up)
Your style of writing is very fluent and easy to read, although sometimes the context of the characters talking to each other can be a little confusing as it doesn't address who they are talking to.
The only downside so far is that the grammar in your story is a bit lacking. The structure of your sentences and the usage of your commas/apostrophes isn't always correct, but for this website it's still above average and it doesn't make the story hard to read (I'm no grammar nazi).
I think the story is progressing at a great pace as it gives enough time to flesh everything out without letting it become boring, and I'm really interested in how you develop Nox and the other characters!
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I love the story and characters the MC is a little (sometimes a lot) underpowered.
The characters make you laugh, the story is believe-able, and the grammar is above average for this site. All in all the story is amazing.
I really like the way that the protagonist doesn't keep his memories but instead has his experience pass with him , example his fears. Plus he is one of those protagonists that do whatever the hell they want and has the potential to have a harem. This story also has a good sense of "Mature" humor .Oh and did i mention the boobs.
A good diversity of interesting characters with ofter hilarious interactions and relations.
Often leaves ya smirking at their antics, or outright trying not to fall off the chair while laughing.
Did I mention lots of animal ears, tails, and other goodies?
The only thing that I find a bit lacking, is the lack of details of mc's abilities and maybe experimenting with 'em, but that's doesn't hurt the story in any way. I'd bet it may change if/when he actually gains any serious reason to develop 'em.
The world is interesting, but still somewhat familiar having taken elements from pre-existing mythology and folklore. What really stands out to me though are the characters. They're unique, interesting and entertaining in their interactions with each other.
Only on chapter right now, but so far its incredibly interesting and very funny, the line at the end of ch 1 "later Fuzzy, love ya" had me lmao. please keep up the good work, and thanks for such a wonderful story.
One of my favorite Fan Fics on here! Really well done
I really love this story. The chapters are lengthy and feel impact full and the pace if very good.
Now if only the sister become a bro-con...