The Arcane Emperor

by Aternus

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Comedy Drama Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Harem LitRPG Magic Male Lead Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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Rainer, an amateur arcanist and college student, sought to create a new spell far surpassing the magic of the few he inherited from his grandfather. Yet the interference of an unknown event during the casting of his spell led him to be thrown through space and time.

Where status screens were accepted as normal and class distinctions were quite clear. Leveling and achieving a class beyond a simple farmer or peddler was an affair of life and death combined with years of hard training. Goblins were not the fodder that they should be, orcs filled bedtime stories in order to scare children into behaving, and a dragon? You might as well pack up and move to another country.

He, however, enters this world with the rare and powerful class of the Arcanist. How will the recently ardent seeker of magic find greater heights, or will he land in deeper depths?

Additional Tags: Game elements, Another World, Mature Themes

Cover Art: by NGT http://forum.royalroadl.com/showthread.php?tid=83944

Current Word Count: 413,193
Weekly Schedule: Long Chapter(s) Every Saturday Night EST

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: New Beginnings ago
Chapter 2: I'm Sorry I Doubted you Grandfather! ago
Chapter 3: The Arcane Scholar ago
Chapter 4: A Fairy and a Broken Seal ago
Chapter 5: Fae Contractor ago
Chapter 6: Run with the Wind! ago
Chapter 7: Resistance ago
Chapter 8: The Arcane Elementalist ago
Chapter 9: Monster Hunters ago
Chapter 10: Winter's Guardians ago
Chapter 11: The Dungeon's Entrance ago
Chapter 12: The First Step ago
Chapter 13: Fallen City of Nalmar ago
Chapter 14: A Change of Scenery ago
Chapter 15: The Fog ago
Chapter 16: An Unexpected Addition ago
Chapter 17: Arcane Power ago
Chapter 18: A Vanquishing Spear ago
Chapter 19: The Horde ago
Chapter 20: Soar ago
Chapter 21: Deliverance ago
Chapter 22: Wyvern's Roost ago
Chapter 23: Domain ago
Chapter 24: Rising Caverns and Falling Flames ago
Chapter 25: Descent ago
Chapter 26: The Return ago
Chapter 27: A Temporary Home ago
Chapter 28: The Hunt ago
Chapter 29: Back to Where it All Began ago
Chapter 30: Standardization ago
Chapter 31: Final Preparations ago
Chapter 32: Advancement ago
Chapter 33: Fruit of the World Tree ago
Chapter 34: A New Wind Blows. ago
Chapter 35: The Low Road ago
Chapter 36: Toward the Tower ago
Chapter 37: A Familiar Sensation ago
Chapter 38: The Mana-Well ago
Chapter 39: Voidwalker ago
Chapter 40: Maiden Elru ago
Chapter 41: A Trade ago
Chapter 42: A Ring's Value ago
Chapter 43: Flame-Touched ago
Chapter 44: Of Mages and Arachne ago
Chapter 45: A Message ago
Chapter 46: Arcane Presence ago
Chapter 47: Druidic Magic ago
Chapter 48: The Ice Wolf Queen ago
Chapter 49: Not Even a Footnote ago
Chapter 50: Arcane Invigoration ago
Chapter 51: Devil King Agmar ago
Chapter 52: An Unexpected Destination ago
Chapter 53: A New Arrival ago
Chapter 54: The Arcane Order ago
Chapter 55: Frozen Sun ago
Chapter 56: Tiers of Magic ago
Chapter 57: The Ball ago
Chapter 58: The Soul ago
Chapter 59: Call of the Void ago
Chapter 60: Abyssal Plane ago
Chapter 61: Creeping Darkness ago
Chapter 62: The Mind ago
Chapter 63: A Serpent's Cry and A Dragon's Help ago
Chapter 64: Lords of the Void ago
Chapter 65: Plunging into Water ago
Chapter 66: The Second Trial ago
Chapter 67: Abyssal Elf ago
Chapter 68: A Difference of Time ago
Chapter 69: Death's Thief ago
Chapter 70: The Memories of a Soul ago
Chapter 71: Arcane Revelation ago
Chapter 72: Another gift from the Divine ago
Chapter 73: Home ago
Chapter 74: To New Horizons ago
Chapter 75: Magus of Cursed Lightning ago
Chapter 76: Of Enchantments and Dragons ago
Chapter 77: White Void ago
Chapter 78: A Broken Soul ago
Chapter 79: Sacrilege ago
Chapter 80: Gateway ago
Chapter 81: Void-Step ago
Chapter 82: Bard of the Moonlight ago
Chapter 83: Arcanum ago
Chapter 84: Threads of Aura ago
Chapter 85: The Wolf King ago
Chapter 86: Changing of the Guard ago
Chapter 87: Moonlighting ago
Chapter 88: Neutral City ago
Chapter 89: Blood on the Walls ago
Chapter 90: Creature of Shadow ago
Chapter 91: Manipulator of Reality ago
Chapter 92: First Impressions ago
Chapter 93: Elemental Awakening ago
Chapter 94: Of Arcane and Frost ago
Chapter 95: Avatar ago
Chapter 96: Weaknesses ago
Chapter 97: To the Land of Demons ago
Chapter 98: Demonic Dungeon ago
Chapter 99: A Split ago
Chapter 100: Destination ago
Chapter 101: Opening the [Sleep Learning] Space ago
Chapter 102: A World of Mana ago
Chapter 103: Frontline ago
Chapter 104: Reunion ago
Chapter 105: Matters of the Soul ago
Chapter 106: The Strength of the System ago
Chapter 107: Balance ago
Chapter 108: Ready for War ago
Chapter 109: Borrowing Natural Laws ago
Chapter 110: A New Energy ago
Chapter 111: Blade of the Void ago
Chapter 112: Void-Being ago
Chapter 113: Auction ago
Chapter 114: An Unassuming Chosen ago
Chapter 115: Fight or Flight ago
Chapter 116: Receiving the System ago
Chapter 117: Family Gathering ago
Chapter 118: Ancient Aspects ago
Chapter 119: Changing ago
Chapter 120: Seeking New Dungeons ago
Chapter 121: Passives ago
Chapter 122: Arcane Domain ago
Chapter 123: Black-Fire ago
Chapter 124: A Ghost in the Snow ago
Chapter 125: Remnants of the Northern Empire ago
Chapter 126: Remnants of the Northern Empire(2) ago
Chapter 127: Preparing for the Dungeon ago
Chapter 128: A Living Poison ago
Chapter 129: Godling ago
Chapter 130: Celebration ago
Chapter 131: Mage-Fist ago
Chapter 132: Coronation ago
Chapter 133: Seeking a Seer ago
Chapter 134: Manipulating the Body ago
Chapter 135: Gold to Crimson ago
Chapter 136: Sarah's Trial ago
Chapter 137: Let the Hunt Begin ago
Chapter 138: Collecting ago
Chapter 139: Leaderboard ago
Chapter 140: Arcane and Void ago
Chapter 141: Fighting for First ago
Chapter 142: Transformation ago
Chapter 143: The End of the First Stage ago
Chapter 144: The Second Stage ago
Chapter 145: Attrition ago
Chapter 146: Regeneration ago
Chapter 147: Core ago
Chapter 148: A Land of Frost ago
Chapter 149: Soul Resilience ago
Chapter 150: Rest Area ago
Chapter 151: Order of the Elements ago
Chapter 152: Failed Creation ago
Chapter 153: Drifting Isle ago
Chapter 154: Round 1 ago
Chapter 155: Round Robin ago
Chapter 156: Visiting ago
Chapter 157: Final Round ago
Chapter 158: A Life for a Life ago
Chapter 159: A Pairing of Arcane and Void ago
Chapter 160: The Last Fight ago
Chapter 161: Final Reward ago
Chapter 162: Preparation for War ago
Chapter 163: An Empty Field of Grass ago
Chapter 164: Flee ago
Chapter 165: A Light from the Moon ago
Chapter 166: The City of Wealth ago
Chapter 167: Copying Memories ago
Chapter 168: A Changing of Soul ago
Chapter 169: A Third Avatar ago
Chapter 170: A Badge and a Coin ago
Chapter 171: Informant ago
Chapter 172: Transportation ago
Chapter 173: Meeting the Invasion ago
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Nighty
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A magic scholar on a journey to master his study.

Unlike in most stories where the protagonist ends up in another world he did so thanks to his own power and not a plot device summoning that just happens for no reason other than to allow the plot to take plce. Even if it was not intentional it opens up a lot of potentional directions this story can take from there that would not be possible with the cookie cutter plot devices.

 

The MC has the perfect mindset for a great story of magic study and adventure, he doesnt lack determination in pursuit of his goal and the most important : he does have a goal.

With a good balance of righteousness and ruthlessness the MC is not overly cruel or softhearted and makes the right choices to survive in a ruthless world while coming out on top in a conflict. He is neither the hero nor the demon lord but has his own designs on what to do with the world he ended up traveling to.

 

His companions are a rare mix of individuals that promise a lot of trouble due to their background , perfect for keeping the action running wherever he goes. Their personalities are authentic and diverse enough to make even casual conversations entertaining and their interaction doesn't get dull or repetitive.

 

Overall its an interesting story that hooked me since the first chapter and hasn't let me down ever since. The only reason I'm giving  4.5 stars to the story score and not 5 is because his ability to learn in his sleep is on one hand unique but on the other hand quite lazy and overpowered. His goal is the mastery of magic and all he has to do for that is sleep.

Edit after chapter 25: changed score to 5 , MC doesnt get the easy way out of training for the more difficult spells anymore and gets off his lazy behind to actually train.

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1. Style - good visuals of magic and other fantasy elements. Not a complete waste of a "game system" with an explanation that is passable. As a backdrop to main character it does just fine... or it would've if the main character was different.

2. Grammar - competent, occasional typos are rare and not disturb9ng the reading flow. Sentence structure is not great though. Fine, but not great. For a web novel is just fine.

3. Story - it is a power trip. OP powers, fast power up, very impressed locals. Power trips rely heavily on the main character and cannot survive on the story. So this score is a function of the next (and final) one.

4. Character - Rainer. The Main Character. The reason this story sucks. 

He, as a person, disgusts me. He has no morals. He pretends to have them, but he has none. And not in an interesting way but in a way a spoiled modern brat that never considered or was faced with a hard moral choice in his entire life can be immoral. Where morality just never formed.

Spoilers ahead.

He murders his travel companions he traveled with for days because if they live they may increase the danger to a girl he lusts after.
He murders non-hostile people for personal gain and justifies it by saying they would've attacked him later.
He considers committing genocide because his adopted pet fairy was hurt in the past by other fairies.
He shortens a person's lifespan by a matter of years because of a racist remark towards his girlfriend.
He proposes a deal with fairies that want to take away his pet fairy while intending to just kill them all and take his payment for free justifying it by "they will do the same anyway so I better strike first". Completely ignoring the fact that if they bring the promised item that would mean they intend to honour their side of the deal.
He "refuses to live constrained by the laws of society" and he seeks Absolute Power to gain Absolute Freedom to not be constrained by those laws.

And despite all that a girl that can feel souls states in her inner monologue that he is "a good person".
He is not a good person. He is a very bad person that is declared by the author to be a good person

I can be interested in reading about a villain's path to power. I can even root for him, if he is honest about what and why of his actions. Or I can enjoy expecting his actions catching up to him.

But Rainer is declared by the author to be a good person that just can be ruthless in protecting his loved ones. That does not work with the way he discards any pretense at morality the moment it becomes convenient or advantageous to him.


Morality is something you have to suffer for. Suffer the consequence for sparing a potential threat that have not harmed or attempted to harm you or yours yet. Suffer from guilt of doing what had to be done. Suffer loss or fear of loss as consequences of your actions. And in return you get other people putting their trust in you and letting you intomtheir hearts.

Laws of society is the price of being a part of it. To stand above them is to place yourself above society. It is to place greater worth onto yourself than any other. The ones who cannot afford to do so but do it anyway are called criminals. The ones who can afford to do so are called tyrants.

But the greates sin of Rainer is the sin that is unforgivable for a main character of a power trip. He is weak. He is a powerful mage and grows more powerful at an unfair pace but he is weak as a person. He has no convictions. He has no ambition. He is weak in character and so trying to insert myself into the mold that he is left me with a slimy feeling of being a formless slug.

Jade Dragon
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Read up to chapter 24, Good writer.  While I'm not really a huge fan of the story or plot, the writer is good enough to bridge the difference.  

My strongest problem with the story would be the main character.  Granted in a game world style story the main characters are going to be overpowered badasses.  But everything just comes too easy to him.  Even his "struggles" are momentary.  Most of his problems are his own fault, many of his crisises are the result of him running from trouble instead of destroying it, then he just destroyes it anyway making it feel unstatisfactory how you just wasted time reading a few thousand words about what a dangerous situation the MC was running from only to learn nope, the mc was just running because... whatever?   

In short the story has no tension.  

The author tries to create some with some of the subplots, but with the character locked away from those overpowered foes powerleveling, it's pretty apparent when he does emerge from the dungeon and face everyone chasing him he'll be seriously overpowered and those "lurking dangers" will be easily crushed like every other challange he faces.

OVERALL: 3.5 / 5.0 - mediocre MC, sorta dull supporting cast mostly meh story, carried by a solid storyteller with good writing competency.

Style: 4.5 / 5.0 - the style of the story is written in a 3rd person voice, overall the author is rather good with this voice and the story flows well.   It's not perfect but it's close enough.

Grammer: 4.5 / 5.0 - simple easy sentence structure, solid use of language, little to no obvious errors.  As a technical writer the author is quite strong.  This score isn't a 5.0 only because the writing level isn't particularly high; the competency is quite high, however the language is simple, as is the sentence structure.  Almost too simple, in some cases he actually can confuse the reader by oversimplifying the scene.  Still a cut above most writers here.  

Story: 3.0 / 5.0 - basic story, while the author has some nice twists to the concept of the "transported to the video game or fantasy like world" genre which keep the concept fresh, it also uses those mechanics as a crutch in the place of story telling and scene setting like most of the more mediocre works in the genre.  You get a lot of status screens which mean little to nothing (as the MC will just curb stomp everything anyway) or grinding/sleep learning/skill aquisition sessions interupting whatever interesting plot might be trying to happen around it.  And the plot is sort of lost in all of it

Character: 3.0 / 5.0 - the only thing keeping this from being lower is the undead knight companion, who I have to admit is about the only character I like, and who seems to have a personality in this story.  The flirting between the MC and the female cast is about the only signs of life we have between the rest of the characters.  The MC is unlikeable and astonishingly stupid (mostly when the plot needs to put them in crisis), I still can't gather what the MC sees in the wolf girl beyond her being cute and having a fetish for animorphic girls, frankly she seems to have whatever personality the plot needs at the time, and her character's motivation seems to be "be main girl", while the 3rd person talking fairy is so close to every other fairy i've read in other literature, I can't be sure "what" she is suposed to be.  It's strange I find rarely meantioned side characters more interesting then the main plot in a book, but this is one of them.

Tyizor
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Conflicted. Has a lot of potential, but it's choppy atm.

Seeing as I haven't been on in awhile, I was somewhat surprised to find that a new story had risen to #1. I wanted to see what the hype was about, so I decided to start reading.

First of all, I want to make it clear that I'm writing this review as if I were reviewing a professional work, and not just a story written on here. I've read several stories on here, and this is definitely one of the better ones in comparison. Yes. It's trope-y. Yes. Some of the characters lack depth, but there are definitely some good elements blended into the story.

Now for the actual review. 


Style: Due to the nature of the story (a in-depth magical researcher in a world w/ status windows), this is resulted in some problems. The magic is explained in detail (which I like), but that also becomes an issue. After the initial flair of the details, I found myself starting to just skim over the magic expositions. While a lot of detail is given, it's not necessarily presented in an entertaining way. Yes, we hear about his failures in his sleep world, but nothing in detail. It's generally just *failure failure failure* *poof* *epiphany* and it works right away. I'd personally appreciate more on how the epiphany came to be (adjustments of past failures) rather than exposition on how certain aspects of magic... feels. I may be biased, but inset laws and playing off of those always seems far interesting than. "This feels right. Lets wing it." It may be too late to change this though.

As for the system, I'm a strong believer that systems disrupt the flow of the story, since I have an extremely hard time imersing myself in a world with status windows and stuff. It's just not relatable or remotely realistic. That's just me though. Personally I think you did this alright, but it feels like a limitation.

 

Grammar: No serious complaints. I never found this a huge deal unless it made the story literally unreadable tbh.

Story: Lots of complaints about the early chapters. The MC's thought process isn't explained enough when it matters. Esp during the whole "kill everyone to protect Kara and the fairy" dungeon sequence. The action when analyzed was logical, yes, but it lacked the foreshadowing leading up to it. Even if the MC has been established as logical, it felt like he just went full sociopath on us. As for the end goal (school), it was introduced in an odd manner and it currently feels insubstantial. He hasn't talked about funding, recruitment, or a concrete curriculim yet. It's mostly been 1 on 1 interactions that slightly relate to it.

I enjoy that there's signs of foreshadowing where you drop certain plot points down as foundation for the future. Instead of just leaving them be, you constantly reference back to them (ex. wyvern egg, and the cook) in casual conversation.

My biggest complaint about the story, however, is tied to the characters. Unfortunately I can't grade story and character seperately.

 

Character Score: MC is somewhat fleshed out, but still has moments where he seems robotical. How do I put it? He's too "logical" and "perfect". Flaws about him seem to be superficial and forced in rather than genuine and problem-causing. Everything seems to play to his advantage rather than him working towards it. Does he work? Yes. It doesn't seem like he does though. Nothing has seemed like a genuine threat to him thus far aside from the lich in that quest, and even then he blew past him easily when it came down to it. Tatics seem lacking and are much closer to brute force. I commend you for creating a MC that actually thinks and works towards a defined goal instead of creating another glorified slice of life (a problem a lot of stories on here has), but I can't help but feel that there's a lot of untapped potential here.
Unfortunately the biggest character problem isn't the MC. It's Kara. Initially I was quite pleased to find a female character and love interest that isn't just a personified blob of fanservice (not that I'm accusing the author of doing that now). She was just as strong as the MC and had some defining character traits, but it didn't stay that way. Even before the MC advanced to Archon, she was already fading into the background. She fell in love with him what almost seemed like instantly after the kill-everyone incident. Most of her supposed budding love was off-screen. Rather than someone who brought any insight or competence to the table, she quickly descended into nothing more than extra mobility due to her wolf form. As soon as the MC advanced, she disappeared all together. Soon enough, she brought nothing to the table that the MC himself couldn't bring. You see that she's upset about it, but it doesn't seem to be anything serious. Instead, she just happily plays the role of the girl that needs protection (her power might not fit that role, but her personality is starting to).es, you can argue that Kara brings a side quest to the table, but there's been very few signs of it thus far (until recently). This was honestly quite upsetting for me to see. I'm hoping a new arc fixes this.

Other characters:

Theo and Gul(whatever I can't remember his name. SkeloBro it is.) are well done. Theo brings experience and knowledge to the table. SkeloBro plays the straight man and the side quest role. They both have definitive character traits (Theo less so, but mainly since he was introduced later). Good job here.

Luna. Eh, personally I don't like these types of characters (cutesy kids stuck in mature bodies), but she brings her healing magic to the table, and the side quest. No serious complaints here without being extremely biased.

Other fairies: Reason I'm grouping them like this is because none of them have been all that fleshed out. The author has the issue of not being able to flesh out characters in an efficient manner without dragging it out and requiring them to have a lot of screen time. I advise the author look into short stories and see how characters are fleshed out near-instantly with minimal screen time.

 

Overall: My Review title.

Davr
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Good start...then meh

I read up to chapter 81 of the story. It started out pretty well, the main character's power was building up a bit fast, but it didn't serve to degrade the story at all. The main character seems to want to keep a low profile to stay out of touble, but it turns out that keeping a low profile was the reason he was caught up in so much trouble. Besides that and the pretty one dimensional characters, it was an enjoyable read until the MC's sister was introduced to the story. For me, this is when the story started to dramatically drop in quality. Adding the sister dissipated any speck of tension the story had until that point. Why? Because now, instead of there only being one OP character in the story, there are two. Alongside the sister being introduced was a series of really boring chapters about travelling to the north that just made reading anything after exceedingly tedious to read. Seriously, you're going to put the part about building his own school and all that boring managerial stuff after torturing your readers through a boring ass travel montage where the MC is just teleporting around doing mundane tasks.

I also want to add how underwhelming every antagonist is in the story. Every villain is built up to be this hidden force that threatens to kill the MC at any time. But then, the villains appear before the MC and get their asses kicked or put in a disadventagous position. It's like antagonist blue balls, all that buildup and then nothing happens.

By the way, the sexual content tag might as well be removed, since all you get are suggestions on what is happening. Author wants the sexual content to happen in your imgination.

Victor DoUrden
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Rather dissappointing how completely extremely shitty the reviews are for the most part. Seems like a lot of half wits have never read a power trip in their lives... let alone actual real fantasy novels of any sort with a spell caster in it. Anyway that aside... I'm gonna  try to keep this short and direct. Not gonna get techicnical or anything.

Story has and HAD promise but somewhere in the later 40s and 50s it starts treading the line into complete utter garbage sorry to say.  Power trip wank off stories are like hay in a haystack here. Story has less tension then kids books as people are eager to kiss ass and hand away victories like how a water fountain hands away water. I get the new writer and all that jazz but such things I have mentioned are hallmarks of absurdly fresh newb authors or simply extremely bad ones. Also some things should be mentioned again instead of seemingly forgotten. Failure should be rampent for a young man who does not know jack about where he is let alone the acting, the hammy lying with everyone eating it up, and expecially! The nails something he has never done in his entire life and has no fucking idea how to do it... but does it anyway on the first try bs.

I really liked the story when it started and hoped for better and still hope you revise and turn it around... but it does not seem like you have a decent bar for yourself. Nothing stands out and the overall feeling the story gives is almost copy paste to other power wank stories. Do you really want to just write what is turning into an awfully mediocre story or have it be memorable? If this was up on amazon it would just be another awful litrpg story.

If you like your character, your story your world... build on the world. Make your characters suffer. Give reason to learn and grow. One can't appreciate sugar if one only eats sweet things. You can't apprecaite anything if it's so free as everything is to your characters. S/orange/gold items are only and ONLY as such because they are good AND don't rain like whites/copper.

 

Nevertheless thank you for what you've put out so far and for writing anything in the first place. I hope someday you take your work and elevate it into what it could be.

 

Edit As it goes on it just gets worse, more generic, characters get flatter. MC is not smart just everyone else is not bright or as powerful. MC is a one trick pony. Enemies conviently carry absurdly rare gear just for the mc when he does them in.

Edit: So shameless all these new accounts liking this... crap at best now. I really wonder how many are just dumb legion and how many reviews are from the author himself

Devest
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Great story. If it was a book I had to pay for I would gladly buy it.

Lurken
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Character changes less expected then the Spanish inquisition

This review contains spoilers up to chapter 14.

The story starts out well enough, if generic. There is nothing wrong with generic, and it goes along decently enough. The world is hard-mode, even though the MC gets himself a really cheat-like ability. The writing is good enough, though sometimes there are linebreaks even if the same character continues speaking.


As the story progresses we run into the first actual problem - Luna. Or if not the first actual problem, the first symptom of a problem. Luna represents the cliche ditzy harem member, and should have been a warning for me as a reader.

The story continues, and for some time, Luna has the spotlight. Even in light of the cringe-inducing dialogue, it could almost be considered sweet. This continues, until we run into the first miniboss. Now, this guy (back then) was not a very big deal - the MC almost kills him with one attack! The problem is, due to later revelations, this guy is apperantly fuckstrong, even if other people actaully are stronger. This is a example of a problem that will become more apperent the further into the story you get - the fact that the author has no concept of powerlevels and writes by the rule of cool.

Continuing on, the MC meets a band of general bros, and they crew up in the hunt for glory and loot! Aaaaaaaaand there is the SECOND harem member - the distant, cold but collected Swordswoman. As the swordswoman enters the scene, Luna (the ditzy fairy) is quickly sidelined with the quick phrase of "lol she's in my pocket or something dunno :^)".

The story continues on and they get to the dungeon, and right here the power-problem shows itself. The MC gets a direct hit on a level five (5!) enemy, and it's merely stunned. Be reminded, this is the exact same, if not stronger, attack that would have oneshot the miniboss if he did not have his defenses up. The miniboss was level fourteen (14!).

The fighting breaks out, and against all odds, and against all that has been shown before, the MC somehow ends up on the backfoot - almost dead! Aaaaaaand then the cool, calm and collected swordswoman uses her "secret transformation", and she turns into a half-demon, something that "does not exist!!!!".

She protects the MC, and all is well and good. But not really, since the coming of age ceremony for demons might as well be called coming of edge ceremony - they are required to go into a human village and kill them all - bathe in their blood etc etc. The band of bros that have traveled with them so far are of course appaled! They HATE demons, but their friend is one? Following the only logical decision they turn on the demon. And here everything that the author has railroaded without any thought to logic falls apart.

During the series so far, the MC has seemed like a genuinely caring guy. If he can, he'll help out. He cares about human lives, and nothing from earlier ever implied he did not. He helped people hunting, he tried to help people fighting, and he wanted to help people that were enslaved. But in this moment, he betrays the band of bros. And i could see this happening, i really could. They found out about the fairy, and they might sell him out, so that is one of the reasons he kills them. The other is to protect the half-demons life, because he feels bad? But the thing is, she does not. She explicitly tells him she feels no remorse for killing all those villagers, but he still saves her. I could have seen the MC killing the band of bros, AND killing the demon (since she is a MASS MURDERER: I REPEAT, THE MC DEFENDS A 100% GUILTY MASS MURDERER THAT FEELS NO GUILT FOR HER CRIMES). 

This is the point i just fucking gave up. Author - if you read this, you fucked up hard. I mean, i can deal with a lot of railroading, but you seriously gotta re-write some shit in this series since i've not seen anyone as inconsistent as this MC in quite some time. The MC protecting her makes no fucking sense - and the only reason it happened was because the Author wanted the MC to waifu her.

All in all, it has good grammar and style, but the content is as empty as the MC's personality.

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Not worth it, while the grammar is good, it's quite misleading. The start is unique and you have a MC who wants to explore more of magic, except that when he teleports himself magic becomes stupid easy. He get's the info downloaded just by thinking of how to change a spell. There's no figuring out how to make the magic missile into different shapes, it just happens. 

The author so far has focused on two females for character development, and both seem to have romantic feelings for the MC within 1 week of meeting. The MC who is supposed to want to advance his knowledge of magic start learning sword fighting for some reason. If his class is about seeking the true origin of magic, I'd have him void his class for not sticking to it. 

Spoiler only because other might find it just a big a reason to stay away from this story as I did.

 

 

 

 

He kills ~9 people to save a murderer who admitted to him that they murdered a village. The author defends his stance by saying that the people were greedy, except we see nothing because he skipped his interactions with the people. Sudden break of character to pander to people is a big turn off. 

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What the hell is this group effort?

Lol, This story has such an inflated status and it feels purposely done when most of the positive reviews are from seemingly throwaway accounts. Overall its pretty much meh. It had a good premise but it wasted like 80% of it and ended up a bland poorly executed fiction. Relationships rushed, MC is a plot puppet with no actual personality. MC's magic is super easy mode contrary to what the beginning made you think.