After beating Kingdom domination Scitus, our Protagonist is told by a strange man that he has been chosen to be a god for universe six. Scitus believing that the man is with the creators of Kingdom domination, his favorite game, decides to play a long. Little did he know that the man spoke the truth and Scitus would become a god, The God of Monsters
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This is going to be addressed for chapter 40. It may improved later on but I can't keep on forcing myself to continue.
Overall, the author have a concept that he wants to write. There is a universe that the author had put an effort in constructing.
But, it still seen as lacking, banal, and generic. There's the divinity aspect that comes into play, but it isn't explore or used to it's fullest (as of chapter 40, but damn it's chapter 40).
Infact there isn't a point in making divinity a main characteristic because the MC act like a normal generic (isekai) ruler. If so why make him a god? Especially if making him an exceptional man with an extraordinary gift could have the same effect.
While in the same issue, the MC is all in all boring. He is expressionless in practice, his overall action and adventure are quite simple and unassuming.
For all it's worth the MC is sometimes feels like a side character with how he is written.
Now the flow of the story, they are some parts where it feels disjointed. Especially when the location changes, or when there is more than two conversation are being shown.
The story also suffer from lack of tension. There isn't any. There is an attempt to do so but it would usually fell flat on its back and does nothing.
While the interaction between the MC and the goblins are cute, his interaction with everyone else needs a lot of work.
This is especially jarring when you're trying to follow his train of thoughts, it would be a jumble because his personality changes either too often or not enough.
He doesn't feel like someone whom you could relate to, or form an empathic connection with.
The grammar of the story also comes into play, sometimes there is no distinction from the primitive goblin speak to normal human speak.
The difference should be highlighted because this method is to show the underdeveloped mental state of the goblin but it got lost because the supposedly "civilized" people also sometime speak in aa grammaticall incorrect way.
The main idea of the story is quite interesting, but the execution especially it's continuation is highly debatable.
this story got off to a good start and parts of it got me excited for where it was going to go, but there are some glaring issues when it comes to pacing, transitioning and asspull.
Genuinely this could be a good story but the author is rushing things, and throwing too much and too many things into the mix way too early, it doesn't give the characters the chance to develop properly or the story to build in suspense.
I hope you read this review author, your story had/has potential and you should finish it but treat this as a first draft, read some cultivation novels for learning how to power scale and lead to more powerful foes, but tbh you had a good idea of how to do that already, even if it didnt work out.
The various races that have fued with eachother could have been handled differently you could have spent time exploring the different cultures and the characters within.
I'm not meaning to be harsh but maybe take the time to write a rough outline of the story and sub plots and take your time with each part dont rush.
RIGHT off the bat, you can notice that this has terrible grammar. Try hiring an editor or installing something like Grammarly.
It's nice to read but hey, the story is filled with cliché and the characters are absolutely not original ...
(i'm chapter 30)
The stories pacing is good. Originally I had issue with what apeared to be spelling and grammar mistakes but was pleasently surprised to figure out they were just speaking another more primitive language. The start up seamed unpoloshed but was quickly forgotten when the story progressed. I highly recommend reading this story or at the least saving it for latter so you can read 30+ chapters. Releases so far have been quick and this trend continues. If you love world building, empire building and character interactions then you will enjoy this story.
Intresting concept. Cant wait for more.
Looks good, and am looking forward to more.