Grimoire: Retake

Grimoire: Retake

by kourii

"Reality is different than a story or a game." That's what my best friend used to say to the otaku me all the times and I myself knew full well that it's true. Well, that was until now... Why you ask? Let me ask you instead, what if you woke up one day, remembered your past life, then found out you are a harem member of a RPG game? The harem MC is childhood friend A and the main rival is my brother B. Hah! And that's just the beginning! You are mistaken if you think that's all. How about an amazing finishing touch of having found out later that reality does not follow the original storyline but might actually be the improved sequel version of the RPG? Hahaha, God, I'm laughing tears of despair....

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Newbie writer of Grimoires

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Present? Past? Honey badger does not care!

Why should a honey badger care about the tense they are using? (I'm not stating everything has to be in the same tense, but the same groups of  sentences - like narration of actions, should be) They just write. Wether it is an error piled on an error or not? Honey badger does not care! Someone reports an error to the honey badger? Honey badger does not care!