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So let's say there's this girl. A young girl who happens to be a highly-trained, psionically-gifted, nanite-infused, genetically-enhanced and emotionally unstable assassin that doesn't know the concept of 'mercy' or 'holding back.'
Let's say she and her imaginary friend miraculously pass through the borders of reality into an alternate universe, crash landing into a world of swords and magic aboard a starship full of high-tech wonders.
Now, let's also say the first person this borderline psychopath meets happens to be her doppelganger - a highly gifted mage who happens to have a few problems of her own, like a bad temper or a bad habit of chronic self-delusion.
With me so far? Good.
Now, what's the on the agenda for these two different people who happen to be the same person? Settle down, start a family and thoroughly enjoy life. Maybe get married and have some kids. How about befriending a violent alcoholic or defeating an ancient evil being? Perhaps kill a few dragons and wreck a city along the way.
Anything can happen around the city of Runetap, after all. It's a place where bizarre and strange things occur on an almost weekly basis. The people living there have long abandoned silly things like common sense or minding the details. A giant flaming UFO streaks above the city in broad daylight? That's just another Tuesday. The City Guard even had the form for that, so believe me when I say this.
It's your loss if you mind it.
This is the light-hearted and fluffy tale of Ellie and Kira as they forge their own path of absurdity and crazyness across a world that often makes little sense. Loosely inspired by the Discworld series of books by Terry Pratchett, even though the author hasn't actually read any of them.
Contains yuri, mature themes and the author's personal views on several subjects. Explicit content is kept to a minimum.
Does NOT contain slavery, rape, drugs or any other similarly heavy themes.
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I am quite happy that i am the first to post a review hehe first dibs!!
So the first few chaps were a bit confusing as the author was stil trying to find his own way as how he/she wants to make the structure of his writting.
What i mean by this is that it was confusing as to whom was talking you kinda had to fiddle a bit and reread parts to know who is talking or what they meant with inside jokes ect.
After some time i either got used to it or the author got better at it as of the latest chaps i think its the latter so keep up the writting ^^
As for the story itself i like the interactions between Ellie and Kira its just Kiramazing hehe.
Release speed is very decent a very mayor good point as many peeps on royalroad want to make stories with 100+ chaps but never even get farther than 15 chaps or so -.-..........
I hope to read the completion of this novel.
Oh one last thing the first 10-15 chaps or so i wasnt really amazed til the interacactions between Ellie and Kira became rahter uniq at that point i am now waiting each day for a new chap to be released as i cannot wait for more fluffy weird antics of these 2 chars.
This says a lot it doesnt feel copied but rather original to the 2 chars.
This story isn't deep. If your are looking for detailed worldbuilding where you learn the nitty gritty of of how everything works you won't find it here. If you don't like senseless violence you should probably move on. If however you are looking for a comedic tale that doesn't take itself particularly seriously, and that is written in a style reminiscent of Japanese web novels without actually pretending to be one, then this is the story for you.
Don't be put off by the mass posting of early chapters, this fic is well worth a read. The style and structure slowly get better, so don't be put off by all the one-sentence paragraphs. The story and grammar and characters are excellent from the beginning.
AND IT'S SO CYGNAS-DAMN FUNNY!! I LOVE THIS!!
Less a review than a comment. I know it's for affect and an experiment, but please don't ever use this writing style again. The short choppy one sentence paragraph after one sentence paragraph starts to become a drain to read considering the line breaks you use between each. Nothing flows and the entire thing becomes a staccato of disjointed ideas that should connect but don't.
It works for dialog; statement, paragraph break, counter statement, paragraph break, counter counter statement.. and onto infinity. But for internal monologue instead of giving each thought the feeling the character thought something, paragrap break, they thought something else, paragraph break, another thought... as each thought comes to them; it instead slows the process of telling the reader the story down and makes it seem like the characters are incapable of having complex thoughts. i.e., they are stupid.
I started reading this because Exterminatus wrote it, and I wanted to check out his other works after found out how much I like Large Chests.
I read 85 chapters of this series, and I don't really regret doing so. It wasn't too bad of a read. But I doubt I will finish it up because there's just no tension. This is because the MC's are too powerful right from the start for anything to ever threaten them.
And even when the fights end there isn't really anything funny going on, the fights just end and life moves on to the next chapter where everything's lighthearted and lovey dovey. A meteorite could fall down and threaten to the destroy the entire planet and one of the MC's would just blow it up because it was blocking the sun. (That didn't happen, but if it did that's pretty much how the fight would end.)
It's not outright bad though, just not comparable to Exterminatus later works.
Decided to revise this. Don't like it, due to bias, and how the story itself is contradictory to the description of what would've been a more interesting main character. Instead of an assassin, you get a submissive something? She doesn't kill. Read to Ch. 24, good on the author for actually completing it though.
When I first started reading it, the story felt a little off. Like to much was going on a once. To many details being thrown out. After a few chapters though, everything started to click. Now reading it is a constant flow of LOL, with just enough drama and plot to keep it together. Its great.
So...I'm quite liking this one so far. I've read all of the currently released chapters (through 74), and I can't wait for more! The grammar is solid - not perfect, but definitely nothing that would detract from the reading experience, and with minimal errors. This story reminds me a lot of Terry Pratchett's Discworld series, in the ridiculous situations and character personalities. As Pratchett is one of my favorite authors, I'm a big fan of anything that follows in a similar vein. I can't wait for more chapters!
I like stories where sci-fi meets fantasy. In this story, a girl from the stars cra... er, lands on a planet with magic, swords and monsters.
The characters are memorable and unique. The overall story is a good one, with a good use of various points of view to help progress the narrative. The icing on the cake is that there are times when I just can't stop myself from laughing!
I highly recommend this story for anyone who is interested in fantasy novels or a sci-fi fantasy mix... or just wants a good laugh.
It has (had) potential, it started out ok if a bit confusing and i can see how it would be on par with ELLC.
But the author dropped the ball, most of the story is a confusing mess and the way many things are handled makes little sense, and the no killing thing was frankly stupid and ridiculous from the start.
Unlike an 'insanity' story it's just a mess no entertainment or 'crazy person' mentality at all. And the whole "it's your loss if you mind it" thing was just another hole to sink the ship.
The choppy sentence by sentence style was not, and never will be, acceptable in any story but a childrens book.