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Real science is done on the edge of knowledge. If done correctly, you really are not certain of the outcomes. If done incorrectly, people can get hurt. This is the story of a researcher tossed across reality.
Current update schedule is entirely sporadic, but I do commit to not dropping the story. I'm aiming for 1 small chapter a month at the moment.
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Thank you author-san! I have read up to the latest chapter at this time, chapter 18. It is clear from the unique and well personified character that you have put a lot of effort into character creation. It is clear from the complex multifaceted magic system that you have put a lot of effort into the magic system. It shows and it is a refreshing divergance from the many 2D stories on RR where we are given only a name of spell in bracets, i.e. [Fire ball], and no depth to the magic system; where all we learn about a chacter is the he is a "2nd Rank Mage with earth affinity; I could go on.
This world, characters, and magic system are truly unique, at least compaired to others that I have read, and the story is well written. Thanks author-san! Keep it up!
I'll break down each section as I give weight to the ratings.
The style is consistent and when changing between 3rd person and 1st person scopes it's done fluidly without breaking flow. It's honestly such a good demonstration of control of scope blending that I've taken notes for myself in this regard.
Grammar could use some improvements, I saw several cases of the incorrect words being used or in some cases mispelled words entirely. There are also cases where it's clear that the writing is done from a perspective of speech, and speech writing leaves traces of dialects which breaks flow.
The story itself is fantastic. It has clear and dedicated flow. Each chapter expands on the previous and drives forward the next. In addition to this the story also provides a very unique experience and draws the reader to continue reading the next installment.
Character development is slow but there are a few inconsistencies with character actions. This is especially prevalent in the prologue with Cali/Carli (both names are used and I'm unsure which is correct).
Overall I like this story quite a bit and I intend to subscribe and continue reading it. It has some flaws, but nothing severe enough to prevent me from enjoying reading the story.
You know when you read a story or play a game so great you almost wish you could wipe the memory from your brain, just so you could experience it again for the first time?
This story was fantastic. It was delightfully funny in a way that was wasn't forced. Its plot & pacing where on par with the most binge-worthy reads.
The style was smooth and allowed for an effortless transition between different view points and different characters.
The only improvement I would personally like would be to include more information about the characters and scenery. My imagination was more than willing to fill in the blanks, but sometimes when I did finally get a descriptor it clashed with what my mind made up.
Overall, my favorite work on Royal Road to date!
Overall: The story uses the old, tried and true premise of world transfer/reincarnation and does an excellent job of making the development of the MC more believable than any other such Story I have read so far.
Style: The style is fairly consistent, but not entirely. Dialogue is in a few cases a bit hard to follow, but there are not enough issues to really subtract from the story.
Grammar is excellent as far as I can tell from my non-native English readers pov. Most people should find it more than sufficient for reading enjoyment, and I will brave the hazard of attracting some flames here, and say that some native English speakers use worse grammar in their own works.
The MC is well developed already by chapter 10, with his own relatable desires and fears. Some side characters also have some nice depth to them, so it's a solid 5 in my book.
Wow, what a unique idea and captivating story!
The author turns the reincarnation genre on its head by doing something we haven't seen before. Each chapter is well written and is balanced between dialogue and exposition. The grammar is impeccable, and the prose is easy to follow. I found the pacing slower, in the beginning, but believe this was done in order to flesh out the characters. As I progressed through each chapter, the story picked up the pace and the engaging plot made it well worth the read.
I definitely recommend this to all readers, especially fans of the reincarnation genre. You will find yourself drawn into a dynamic and well-told narrative.
Overall: The story is great and while the main quest has been revealed I would love to see a bit more foreshadowing.
Style: A slow pace with lots of information about the world, the only thing I did not quite like was the waves of people being introduced.
Grammar: I can't judge, but haven't found a single mistake so far.
Story: As with every incarnation story this is a hard part to judge. The main character has been given a couple of perks like his knowledge of modern technology and physics as well as an enormous dick and magic abilities.
So far there has not been an awful lot about either of the last two abilities, his magic seems to have a major drawback and the dick jokes have been edited out for the most part.
His knowledge will be a tougher thing to balance but so far not an awful lot has happened with it. The fact that people know he is from another world makes things interesting but hard to predict.
Character Score: So far we don't have a lot of well-introduced characters. We got Hurrit aka Talo his two parents and his two teachers. We got barely any information about the four of them but they seem to be interesting enough but nothing really special about them.
The main character seems to be smart but strange, telling everyone about his origin being socially awkward and throwing temper tantrums at times. He feels a bit too young, for his incarnated-self most of the time, or rather childish and proud?
Last but not least another not so great point, the update schedule or lack thereof. Seems like the author takes a long time to post something, but whatever he posts is polished and well written...
I will follow this fiction since it is interesting. This review has been written with the information of chapter 1-24
Review upto chapter 15.
Overall, I highly enjoy this story, it continues to be a pleasure to read. One thing that is great about it, is it's unpredictability. The author really knows his own mind and where the story is headed, leading the reader on a realistically surprising journey.
Grammer is flawless, some minor typos which I'm sure the author with rectify upon giving a once over.
Story is bizarre, pure sci-fi, with elements of fantasy and divine intervention. Chatacters are masterfully crafted, and the authors own knowledge of the sciences are commendable.
I personally love the use of foreign languages, the italicised thoughts, and the notion of, and interaction with, the divine/higher powers. Things I use often in my own writing, so I definitely approve.
I highly recommend this story for anybody looking for a flawless read, and immersion into a sci-fantasy story with a believable, realistic and humourous MC.
Style: Very well written. Author has a very solid understanding of good writing habits and his work carries a very professional flair. I'm wouldn't stand out of place on store bookshelves in my opinion.
Story: This is a unique take on the popular reincarnation theme. Seems very well planned out with promising plotlines. Bolus has created his own form of magic system, and with his solid descriptive ability it's sensible and a lot more fleshed out than many of its peers among the fantasy genre. Props all round on this one.
Grammar: I'm a horrible judge of grammar as commas are my own nemesis. Within those constraints though I saw no errors which broke the flow of the story. No idea how it would stand to an english major or pro editor, bit gets 5/5 in my book.
Charector: the MC is a very life-like charector. Very easy to relate to with the exception of one choice early on. It's still early though and the author as plenty of ways to flesh it out in the future as I believe he/she shall. Side charector stand as their own individuals with their own goals, personality, and past that coincide and flow along with the story. Excellent work on that.
This story does more than set the bar for all of us authors. It also opens up our eyes to a fresh new way of life and a really original, creative plot. The author shows a brilliant knowledge of science and the world that he has created, spinning up a fantastic tale that really caught my attention.
The style is really unique, and the word choice is really strong. There were several different transitions between viewpoints, which were handled masterfully. The author has created a really vivid world, with lots of details that are revealed to us smoothly through the text instead of being told right up front. There's lots of humor, and realistic dialogue to carry the story along. The only confusing thing was the dialogue- sometimes it was difficult to know who was talking.
The grammar seemed fabulous, but my grammar isn't great myself, so I generally don't try to judge. I noticed the occasional mistake, but nothing that really hindered the flow of the story.
The story itself is the best part, because it is such an extraordinary new perspective on the reincarnation genre. I won't give any spoilers, but as a whole, the story is fabulous. The world that the author has created is flawless, enhanced by an incredible knowledge of modern technology. Every chapter adds more and more depth to the character's journey and the world that Volos has created.
The characters themselves are really strong and realistic, with real struggles and flaws as well as joys, which seems to be a shortage in most of the fiction on RRL these days. There aren't too many of them, which gives us a chance to really go into them and who they are.
Review up to chapter 11:
This story grabbed me from chapter 1 because it's vastly different from what I'm used to finding on RRL. The author writes with confidence, has excellent grammar, and what seems to be a deep understanding of science related things, for lack of a better word.
Style: Easy to follow, consisten, and infused with enjoyable humor.
Grammar: Not a problem at all.
Story: It's been very compelling so far and the author does a very good job of having an adult brain in a child's body and is able to show the limitations of how information can be expressed from a child to an adult, which was very cool.
Character: Sometimes I don't have a clear understanding of who's speaking, but from context, I haven't had too much of a problem putting it together.
Locations and characters aren't typically physically described, which would be one of my only cons for this story. I'm not sure what the kingdom's culture is and I mix up the character's names in my head frequently, but I think that's just because I'm not used to reading names of that sort.
Overall: I really dig this story and it's one of the few stories I want to binge when I log on. Two thumbs up, and I'm eager to plow ahead.